Elementally Challenged.

Summary: Entry #001 Wider than the Sea. “There is a moment of confusion when a land animal enters the water. Beast, […]

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Entry #001
Wider than the Sea.
“There is a moment of confusion when a land animal enters the water. Beast, human or fairy, it doesn’t matter. The surface is broken and every sense is suddenly shocked.”

~ Artemis Fowl: The Time Paradox.

“What’s a mermaid, daddy?” Two large blue eyes stare at Artemis Fowl II, who was in turn staring at a computer screen. He glances at his daughter for a second. Golden locks of hair tumble down past her shoulders, framing her fair heart shaped face perfectly. She smelled of strawberries.

She frowns as her daddy did not answer her.

“Daddy… What’s a mermaid?” She stressed on the word ‘mermaid’. She wanted to know what it looked like. And daddy was smart. If anyone knew it, it was daddy.

He looks at her again. This time, he speaks.

“A mermaid… Is something that is so beautiful, you couldn’t imagine.” He says. She frowns again. If daddy couldn’t imagine it, could she really?

“Could you please…” What was that word again? Right. “Could you please define this… beauty, daddy?”

He moves away from the computer and faces the girl. “She has beautiful aquamarine eyes, golden corkscrew curls like the sun, and, contrary to popular belief, the smartest girl you will ever meet. ” He felt like crying. But no. Father says it again and again: Men don’t cry, they think.

She puts down the book in her hand and rests her chin on her knees. She listened intently to what daddy had to say about mermaids.

“This mermaid, she has the perfect body, and her skin was of the smoothest sort, like silk.” She was in awe. She wanted skin like silk.

“Her voice, it’s like the waves you hear when you’re at the seaside, it’s thunderous and calm, soothing and strong. All at the same time.” He pauses for a moment and looks down. She looks at daddy, hoping he would continue.

“Go on…” She nudges him gently. He looks back up and smiles, ever so slightly.

“And her smile…” He swallowed.

“And her smile?”

“Her smile was wider than the sea.” He remembers.

She giggles. He asks her what was so funny. She replies, “She sounds like me.” She smiles. Her smile was wider than the sea.

“Yeah, she does, doesn’t she?” He strokes her hair, those golden corkscrew curls were the color of the sun.

“Do you know her?” She climbs onto his lap and props herself down.

“I… I do.” He tries to smile. He can’t. He looks at her eyes. They were of an aquamarine blue. When he looks at them, he sees her.

She smiles again.

Wider than the sea.

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  1. Ah awesome Fic. (:

    Minerva is it not? Very fantasized. I loveeeee it!


  2. Sea, I am always amazed with your work. Beautifully written, and the use of the quote was amazing. Great job. ๐Ÿ˜€

  3. Brilliant. ๐Ÿ™‚ She sounds beautiful! The use of the quote was ingenious. ๐Ÿ˜‰ I’d ask for un update, but… challenge entry. *sigh* XD


  4. Beckett Simpleton July 6th, 2010 at 7:00 pm 4

    Aw sweet
    YOu make Minnie sound so beautiful and likeable!

  5. I have to say i enjoyed it. loved the quote at the begining.

  6. *bangs head* Sea…you are the most awesome writer ever! I love your work and you’ve never let my expectations fall.

    *Gives dairy milk*

    This is awesome and made minnie actually seem likeable….eugh, can’t believe I said that…excuse me while I go wash out my mouth.

  7. ArtieMinnie baby, right? Amazing job, I was absolutely stunned XD It’s so sweet, but not too sweet that it gives WillyWonka brain-cavities. You out-did your self again. Truly beautiful job ๐Ÿ™‚

  8. ๐Ÿ˜€ thanks a lot guys. I tried as hard as I could to rock at least this particular element for obvious reasons. XD credits to my friend Fifa for giving my inspiration by thinking up the caption “her smile was wider than the sea”. ๐Ÿ˜€
    The only reason I had the quote at the beginning was because I went “Quote Hunting” in Kinokunyia bookstore the other day with my sister. We each pick a random book and open a random page and read a random quote from it. And just my luck this challenge came along. One of the quotes:
    “Although the ogres did not stay long, as tea parties were really not their thing.”

    I suppose it really isn’t their thing, huh?

    Taken from an awesome picture book. ๐Ÿ˜€

    () ()
    (รขโ‚ฌยข.รขโ‚ฌยข) how long haven’t you seen Bun-nay? XD

  9. Duck With No Name July 8th, 2010 at 9:34 pm 9

    That is absolutely beautiful, Sea. ๐Ÿ™‚ I really loved that- there are too many fics on here portraying Minerva to be a horrible person but you’ve written a wonderful one about her and it totally deserves 5/5! ๐Ÿ˜€ If I could give you more, then I would but… *gives chocolate instead* ๐Ÿ˜‰

  10. *Frowns* I have only read the first paragraph. I like your style of writing, very vivid. *Frowns* Golden locks? Minerva. *Sigh* Nice job. I like it. And I hope you update soon.

  11. ?
    (to chap 2)

  12. minerva’s a MERMAID?! why doesnt anyone tell me anything???

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