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Trouble’s Song

Summary: This is a sort of revised verson of Taylor Swift's Mean. It takes place a month or so after Holly and Artemis got sent to Hybras. DISCLAIMER: I do not own any of the characters in this story, nor do I own the song by Taylor Swift. Enjoy!

Chapters: 1 2 3 4

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Italics are the song. Bold is what Trouble is thinking.  A little swearing, so don’t be offended. Enjoy!


You, with your words like knives and sworsd that you use against me

Ark Sool. Possibly the LEP’s worst commander ever. He hates me. All because I supported Julius. And because I want Holly to return.

You, have knocked me off my feet again, got me feeling like I’m nothing

He’s screaming at me on a trivality yet again. I’m starting to feel like a civillian, not a respected Major who was second in command six months ago.

You, with your vioce like nails on a chalkboard calling me out when I’m wounded, You picking on the weaker man.

Even Julius in a blind rage was much easier to deal with. I respected him. Just because you’re the commander doesn’t mean you get to be a bully.

Well, you can take me down with just one single blow. But you don’t know what you don’t know.

He could easily fire me. But he likes tormenting me far too much. What our “respected commander” doesn’t know, or belive, is that Holly will return. I’ll be waiting. Hoping.

Someday I’ll be commander of the whole dang LEP and all you’re ever gonna be is mean.

Sool won’t last. He’ll wash out in a couple of years, and everyone will be glad. Me and Viyaya especially. Julius’s death was particulary hard on her.

Someday I’ll be big enough so you can’t hit me, and all you’re ever gonna be is mean. Why you gotta be so mean?

Sool is a complete jerk. He’s put me on a week’s recon suspension for the simple act of having a picture of Holly on my desk. I miss her. He thinks that I’m being rebellious, because they’ve been declared missing, presumed dead. Sool told us to forget her.

You, with your switching sides and your wildfire lies and your humiliation

Sool has, yet again, yelled at me in front of the men I’m supposed to be in charge of.

You have pointed out my flaws again, as if I don’t already see them. I walk with my head down, trying to block you out cause I’ll never impress you. I just wanna feel okay again.

“You’re incompetent! A daydreamer! A loose cannon!” He’s yelling again. I resist the urge to throttle him. When dismissed, I walk out, my head litterally hanging. Vinyaya’s at the door, her eyes understanding. “I hate him too” she whispers, barely audibly. We ride the bus to our homes together, talking about Foaly’s latest time spells. It looks like Holly could be back in three to five years. I get home, and simply lie on my bed. I just want one day to go by without being berated by Sool.

I bet you got pushed around, somebody made you cold. But the cycle ends right now cause you can’t lead me down that road. And you don’t know what you don’t know.

I think something new. Why is Sool so cold? I wonder. I will never act like him, I decide. If I ever become commander, I won’t be a jerk. I’ll be more like Vinyaya and Julius.

Someday, I’ll be commander of the whole dang LEP, and all you’re ever gonna be is mean. Someday, I’ll be big enough so you can’t hit me, and All you’re ever gonna be is mean. Why you gotta be so mean?

Holly, where are you? I fall asleep with bitter tears falling down my cheeks. I hate my life right now.

And I can see you years from now in a bar, talking over a crunchball game, with that same big loud opinion, but nobody’s listening. Washed up and ranting about the same old bitter things. Drunk and grumbling on about how you’re important. But all you are is mean.

The next morning, I wake up smiling. I had a dream about being commander, with Sool fired. If only. Oh well. D’arvit, I’ll be late! That’ll probably get me an hour or so of screaming.

But all you are is mean. And a liar. And pathetic. And alone in life and mean. And mean, and mean, and mean. But someday, I’ll be commander of the whole dang LEP and all you’re ever gonna be is mean. Someday I’ll be big enough so you can’t hit me, and all you’re ever gonna be is mean. Why you gotta be so mean?

I go to work with my head held high. I see Sool for what he is. An old, cranky jerk that feels the need to be superior. Within five minutes, though, I’m considering quitting. Like Holly. Holly, please come back to us soon!

Chapters: 1 2 3 4

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  1. Awesome! “But someday, I’ll be commander of the whole dang LEP” Ha ha! Classic!

  2. Did you write this song yourself? Hmm, interesting. Usually, I’m too… feh to do that. Lazy. Uninspirational.

    Well, most of this is thoughts, and I bet a lot of people have delayed commenting because you need a plotline. Even though it’s a songfic, it needs some sort of support structure. Trust me, I do that sometimes too. Though there’s usually not enough stuff to build an entire conflict-resolution-rising-and-falling-action plot, it’s expected you add some examples and stuff. Makes it more interesting. Granted, you did add a yelling act on Sool’s part… but yeah.

    Other than that, quite nice. It’s a bit rare to find something that’s Trouble-centered, since he’s more of a minor character. Just need more information on emotions and occurrences. And this is normally the part where I say “update”… but it’s a onshot… so…


  3. Hi guys!
    Wrr0rzxpurrt, this isn’t a one shot, so expect to see some revisions sometime. The Song ‘Mean’ is by Taylor Swift. I gust changed a few words. All credit for the song to Taylor. Anyways, gotta go, so Bye

  4. I laughed so hard when I listened to the song and then read the line “I’ll be commander of the whole dang LEP”. 😆

    Good application of the song to Trouble. I like hearing his perspective on Sool for once. IDK, I like it just being his thoughts…at least for this part, assuming you’ll update. I think adding more of a plotline would definitely be worth it, though.

    Update pleez!


  5. Grrr, my comment didn’t stick. Shoot. Stinkworms. D’Arvit.

    Okay, basically I said that I found the line “I’ll be commander of the whole dang LEP” hilarious, especially after listening to the song. 😆 And I like that you gave us Trouble’s perspective on Sool. And I think that having just Trouble’s thoughts for this section works well, but that an update giving more of the story would be great. And update. 😉 There you go, LEP.


  6. Nice songfic. I think that just being thoughts is fine and fits better with the overal tone and if there is plot later then all the better.

    Basically all I want to say has been taken by December so…there are a few typos but other than that I can’t say much more. Grape for an update? 😀

  7. I really like the update! It’s a good backstory to the song and is also good plot progression. Skillful. 🙂

    Good description – I like how Trouble gets dunked in the water. It kind of makes it realistic. I mean, as opposed to him “staring off into the middle distance as his heart breaks melodramatically”. 😉 I hope you know what I mean by that.

    Good character interactions and stuff. (Sorry, I’m running out of words. TIRED.) Mostly clean grammar/spelling/yada yada. IC. “Shrill girl” 😆 . *gasp* My brain is speechless now…I enjoyed this update lots. 😀

    Pleez update (if that’s what you’re planning to do)!

    ~December Holly, stealing E.N.HA’s words

  8. Like the commenter before me (who I now believe is FG-deceased… ENHA, WHERE HAVE YOU GONE?!), I am tired. But I’m still commenting, so that’s some points for me, right?

    The fourth chapter was really short… are you planning on lengthening that or is that just it? It concluded nicely, with everyone’s favorite happily-ever-after scene.

    Good spelling/grammar/caps/punc/spacing, and… now I’m feeling really tired. Ugh. Sorry for the posh comment.

  9. I love it! I normally hate short chapters, but the little abrupt ending was VERY GOOD. *walks away chuckling*

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