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There, Right There!

Summary: Short, late update, quite a few swears. Sorry childrins.  Teenagers- MCR  GERARD- Dom, Holly, Julius, Trouble    We’re in trouble.  […]

Chapters: 1 2 3

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Short, late update, quite a few swears. Sorry childrins.  Teenagers- MCR 
GERARD- Dom, Holly, Julius, Trouble


We’re in trouble. 

It’s not just me this time. It was all the regulars, and you know how we are. 

We all sat at the table, while Commander Root, Trouble Kelp, Holly Short and Butler stood at the head. Artemis sat a knight’s move from me, and was also bowing his head. Likely in shame. 

“Look,” Root growled, “we’re tired of the inappropriate love stories.” 

“Especially from you!” Butler growled pointing in the general direction of ButlerxArtemis and I. Artemis nodded slightly. 

Holly walked behind him, slapping him on the head. “You too, Mud Boy! Your sleeping around helps no one!” 

“You had to tell the fangirls, Holly?” Artemis sighed, as we buzzed like bees about his potential girls, ranging from other fandoms (like Zoë Nightshade) to his own (such as Angeline). I was punched for suggesting Angeline. 

“Pretty much.” 

“We’re also tired of the plotlessness.” Everyone who had joined within the last month attempted to hide under the table. 

“They’re gonna clean up your looks with all the lies in the books to make a citizen out of you,” Trouble sung, snarling. “Because they sleep with a gun, and keep an eye on you, son, so they can watch all the things you do.” 

“Because the drugs never work, they’re gonna give you a smirk. ‘Cause they have methods of keeping you clean.” Butler said, semi-knowledgably. 

“They’re gonna rip up your heads, your aspirations to shreds!” 

Holly enjoyed that way too much. 

“Another cog in the murder machine . . . .” She trailed off, much higher than the boys, giving an air of calmness and finality. 

Yet, they were moving to strategic spots, and when they finally went into the chorus, everyone jumped. 

“They say all teenagers scare the living shit outta me! They could care less so long as someone’ll bleed.” 

No one really argued that. 

“So, darken your clothes or strike a violent pose. Maybe they’ll leave you alone, but not me!” 

“The boys and girls in the clique,” Root rumbled from directly behind SilverSong, ruffling her hair, but her composed face barely twitched. Her hand did, though. Toward her bow. 

He tried again on Ohan, “The awful names that they stick,” a few of us shuddered, in honor of Julissa. 

Satisfied, he silenced. Holly picked up. “You’re never gonna fit in much, kid. But if you’re troubled and hurt, what you’ve got under your shirt will make them pay for the things that they did.” 

She made a gun of her hand and pretended to shoot us all in the head. 

Again, we were all scared the crap out of. “They said all teenagers scare the living shit outta me, they could care less as long as someone’ll bleed. So, darken your clothes, and strike a violent pose. Maybe they’ll leave you alone, but not-“ 

“Me!” Artemis screamed over them. “The bloody main character! Really, who should fear these girls? Me, Peter Pan, forever in their age-range or you,” he pointed at Root, “The dead old guy?” 

Crickets of silence played their music. 

“All together now . . .?” Trouble reluctantly sang, in order to move us along. 

“They said all teenagers scare the living shit outta me, they could care less as long as someone’ll bleed. So, darken your clothes, and strike a violent pose. Maybe they’ll leave you alone, but not me!” The adults sang, and finished. 

“So, basically, cool it with the crappy writing?” Ohan asked, curious at the point. 

“Basically.” Butler agreed. Holly nodded. 

Hopefully,” Cookieninja said, still swaying to the song, “we can do that.” 

“That’s all we ask.” 

“And that I stop sleeping with a man my father’s age,” Artemis grumbled. 

“Haha, yeah right,” all the slash writers answered nonchalantly.

Chapters: 1 2 3

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  1. “You flaming boy band cabaret!”

    I loved that. A musical on paper, I mean screen, I mean…. in type. Sheer brilliance.

  2. You’re crazy. =)=)

  3. That was totally insane! I loved it soo much. I’m pretty well crying from laughing right now. OMG TWS strikes again. Fantabulous!

  4. If anyone wants to look it up, and hear the voices, (they’re rather amusing) its “There, Right There!” from Legally Blonde.

    Crazy like a /fox/!

    And thanks. I kind of thought someone/everyone would be a bit . . . pissed at their part.

  5. Pissed?! Heck no! Actually, that fit me surprisingly well for a song like that XD
    Yay for breaking out into random musical numbers!! That was awesome!! One of the most entertaining fics I’ve read in quite a while. Very nice. I love eet. 😀

  6. *laughs so hard I fall right out of my chair*

    I love how you got the Broadway musical effect, when it’s all typed. I AM somewhat disappointed that he’s gay *sits alone at 8:00 on Saturday 😥 *, but it’s still one of the funniest fics I’ve ever read!!! *goes back and reads it again*


  7. This is CoMpLeTeLy AmAzInG!!!!!And surprisingly IC. Creepy. Its like you’re watching me. *shifty eyed* This is one of my favorite fics EVER!!! I’m just happy i’m IN it! I saw less than .23 mistakes, and that’s ;pretty awesome. (NOTE; POINT 23. Not 23. Like, DECIMAL 23.) 😉

    That is actually something I’d do/ have done. 😆 That’s like cool. 😀

    Amazing work, TWS. I’d love an update/sequel. 🙂

  8. Oh, and I totally forgot to mention this, but I love the line about Bowser. XD

    He’s my second-favorite character from Mario Bros.! 😀


  9. I just watched a video of the number on YouTube. It really is surprising how much those people… are like us… o_o
    Brilliant idea.

  10. 🙂 Well. Every one copies me… *sniff*

    I’m kidding. But stll, its creepy how much we’re alike!!!

  11. I know, right? And I don’t know about you guys, but I’m not a blonde lawyer. And, no offense, but I doubt many of you have been jurors on a legit trial

    As for a sequal . . . I suppose I could do other’s LIKE this, with other songs/types of songs (likely still from musicals), but I can’t garuntee too many . . .

    Maybe you guys could write a few?! Id love to read them!

  12. Okay, here’s a serious one. It’s A-MAZ-ING.

    The SONG, not my FIC. My fic makes it seem sucky. I’m not that big an egotist -_-#

    But, yes, this is a bea-tatious musical, called Pippin, where my friends and I have decided all is awesome.

    Except Morning Glow. Morning Glow can can just rot in shame.

  13. Im forgotten. Poor me… And by you? TWS?? * sighs * I was gone for about 4 months…. But does the Silver Fox vanish so easily?

  14. where am I??? please can I be in this?

  15. Huh? What?

    No, I just chose semi-randomly. Silversong, Ohan, trust me, you were considered, I just had to play the part of casting director and say “WW(insert name)D?” and I figured Ohan would hurt someone (my main Yoshi-concren), and that SS wouldn’t care, and other people would . . .

    If I need you, I’ll use you, okay? I’ll do my best not to repeat. But, the only real-person narrative I’m doing is my own. I am NOT risking that kind of off-pissing on other people.

  16. Its alright! I know i was silent for a little while… don’t be mad… Don’t worry! Be happy!

  17. Oh my God… -dies-

    This was awesome!

  18. *revives* Thanks! Gotta suggestion?

  19. Yeah, I do!

    Although I’m not sure how you’ll do that one…

  20. Oh well. I probably WOULD hurt someone. 😆
    No, seriously.
    *people back away slowly*

  21. …Um…???? WHY is everyone from AF gay/lesbionic now?

  22. Ok why hadn’t I read that before?
    I love ur work TWS XD
    @Love child: I dunno it’s their choice isnt it?
    And mate I’m totally straight..not everyone..actually hardly nayone is gay/lesbionic

  23. […] There, Right There! has Teenagers by MCR, Silver, Ohan, cookieninja, BXA (she’s my partner in slashy crime [in MY mind, at least]) and a subliminal message all take major part. […]

  24. 😀 Wonderful chappie two!!! But… *sniff* No more SueStories??? 😥


    😀 Oh! I love chappy two! And… although you probably don’t care… I loved the description of Siver. 😉 I’m proud of her.

  25. Nah, I’m just a wittle tired of “OMFG, Minerva!!! She’s after Arty so we should all hate her fairly well-thought out character!!! Grrr!!!” It irks me because she, much like Kikyou and Rosalie Hale before her, is a good character. Terroble person, but good character. So, Sue away . . . I’ll just sit here and be irked.

    Thank you 🙂 Proud of her for not jumping, or proud of her for being about to shoot the Commander?

  26. Well… she’s a good Fangathering Ranger because she didn’t jump, and remained impassive. Annnnnd, she’s a good strategist because she knows how to easily make Root stop the singing. 😀 Well. Her longbow may be powerful, but my recurve is, too! 😀 We are both equal… sorta. 😀

  27. Ohansahyosheli March 10th, 2010 at 2:31 am 27

    Well, the one sentance I spoke was IC. And this story is AWESOME. UPDATE!!!! I will 😥 if you don’t!
    (well, not really, but I will inside.)

  28. I have to speak in favor of slash fics. Artemis is just lucky that I never published my tentative A/F, or A/O for that matter.

    I love this story! You manage a whole musical thing with pure text!! 😀


  29. Oh please, me write terrible stories. Recently I have changed my ways, I MUST admit. Though my first story wasn’t that bad, just very… kiddish.
    Anyways, thank god you used Teenagers, I was waiting for some MCR to pop up SOMEWHERE. Now, to my MCR songfic that I haven’t even thought of yet.
    Great job TWS. I love chappy 3.

  30. ‘Twas absolutely a-mazing TWS. I am laughing so hard I am crying! Beautiful! I loved the Legally Blonde theme mixed with a musical. I could clearly picture everything in my head. As my reading teacher would say, “Wonderful imagery, and beautiful form. Bravo! Bravo! 5 stars!” Well, she doesn’t really say that, but I do. XD

  31. -gasps- I’d forgotten about this. The third chapter is awesome although it left me wanting to write more Artler…

    Ooh, and “BXA (she’s my partner in slashy crime [in MY mind, at least])”

    I feel so flattered! I
    ll be your partner. 🙂

  32. 😀 I still would lie OnE mOrE uPdAtE!!! Go TWS!!! WHOO HOO!!!!


  33. Hermione Fowl March 26th, 2010 at 6:50 am 33

    You rock, TWS. Your stories never fail to make me laugh.

  34. This is spooky. A gay Artemis? But I fell off my chair laughing anway.

  35. Ohansahyosheli May 17th, 2010 at 1:30 am 35

    Oh, lol. Continue!


  37. Alanna-Lena Zelen July 10th, 2010 at 12:11 pm 37

    Wow… I say wow *blinks* (yes, so good I log in *gasp*)

  38. 😀 Love this. I really, Really do. 🙂

  39. The first was by far the best. The second was my least fav. (but still awesome). 🙂 It’s stories like these that make me want to hunt you and bring you back here.

  40. I’m amazed how I have never come across this pice of geniusly crafted song fic before.

    I’ve never actually seen the legally blonde musical before and I never really knew why my friend liked it so much but NOW I see why.

    I loved the first it got me really hyped, the second was a little slow but good nonetheless. I knew the song to the thrid and it was weird how I was listening to the song in my head but also could imagine them singing so I felt really weird.

    5/5 it’s in the TOP TENS anyway but let’s secure it there 😀

    Marshmellow for awesomeness. 😀

  41. Please do more! And since you made this so funny, you get the… L.O Certificat of Random Funny-ness!!!

  42. Lotsa cursing. Lotsa random. Lotsa no sense. Have read a LONG time ago. Have been procrastinating on commenting pretty much… since I’ve joined the site, I’m ashamed to say. But I finally finished all of it… yah. Pretty humorous, and with the signature TWS impeccable grammar/spelling/punc/caps. Yeah. Feh.

  43. December Holly February 4th, 2011 at 9:54 am 43

    This was painfully funny, especially the first chapter. I looked up the song and almost split an organ laughing. In the same breath, Artler gives me the serious creeps.

    No mistakes that I see. Excellent job!


  44. The song fits so well I thought that you made it up. Chapter 1 is possibly the funniest thing I have ever read.

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