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Summary: I edited it to make it rhyme better! Here’s the new version! I want to eat CHOCOLATE! Every single day! […]

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I edited it to make it rhyme better! Here’s the new version!

I want to eat CHOCOLATE!

Every single day!

I’m not allowed it, but it’s awesome

Whatever Arty says.


The red ones are the best!

Arty says my teeth’ll rot,

I’d say he’s a pest.


That’re bigger than my head!

I want Coke and lemonade –

…But it makes me wet the bed…

I want PIZZA!

Arty eats baby fish…

On my birthday, I want a cake

So I can make a WISH!

I want to eat the MOON!

(If it’s really made of cheese)

Arty says I can’t have it –

But I remembered to say please…

I want to get a DOLPHIN!
Just ‘cause I think they’re cool

But Mummy says it bad for it

If I keep it in my room…

I want jars of TREACLE!

And I want a pet bunny!

Whatever I want, I can get,

Because Daddy’s got the money!


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  1. FoalyIsAGenues October 3rd, 2010 at 9:41 pm 1

    YAY chocolate!! *first comment dance*

  2. *first comment dance* aww… adorable!! you get a lollipop. ^^

  3. That’s very cool. And cute, and all that other stuff. 🙂 You made a small typo in the first paragraph-me, not my. Also there’s a big blank spot at the bottom. =)=)

  4. That’s cool. 😀 I assume its all true, right? 😉

  5. Beckett Simpleton October 4th, 2010 at 4:33 pm 5

    Thanks guys 🙂 No ratings? 🙁

    I know. the blank spot’s because I don’t like typng at the very bottom of the page, so I click enter a few times. This time, I forgot to delete it though. :mrgreen:

  6. Its a good poem. Its kind of funny. Tell me. Have you ever tried to do a songfic of the song “Little Lion Man”?

  7. Beckett Simpleton October 5th, 2010 at 4:59 pm 7

    LITTLE LION MAN! YAAY! LOVE THAT SONG! No, actually. I shall listen to it now and think of something!

  8. just be sure to replace that one bad word in the song.

  9. Beckett Simpleton October 6th, 2010 at 5:20 pm 9

    Praises. Yessir!

  10. Love it. Amazing. Wow. 😀 😀 😀
    I HATE ‘Little Lion Man’! I hear it too much.

  11. how can anyone hate a song by Mumford and Sons?

  12. Your an awesome poet. I love it! Do more or i will attack you with my minions!

  13. Beckett Simpleton October 8th, 2010 at 3:41 pm 13

    EG… Okaaaaay… There’s also ‘My Brother which is the same sort of thing.

    I dunno. I don’t like ‘A White Blank Page’ from when it gets past ‘could you lie next to her.’ I know that’s the first line, but i like the way he sings it 🙂

    Thanks Falcon. If you hear LLM too much, it’s kinda like All Fall Down and Nothing Ever Hurt Like You by OneRepublic & James Morrison. It gets annoying. 🙂 Or ‘My Patch’ by Jim Noir…

    *lightbulb pops up above head*

    My Patch… Oooh I could annoy Arty with that…

  14. Next time maybe make Artemis write a poem.

  15. Beckett Simpleton October 9th, 2010 at 4:49 pm 15

    Kay. 🙂

  16. awesome poem dude!(if you are a dude)

  17. Beckett Simpleton October 16th, 2010 at 2:23 pm 17

    I am a dude-et actually 🙂

  18. o. oops. have an oops-cover-up marshmallow. (I’ve GOT to think of better names for marshmallows…)

  19. …since you seem to be taking my marshmellow thing I shall resort to grapes, grapes are now my thing 🙁 I guess I’m opting for the healthier option now.

    Now onto the main topic, I thought this poem was quite cute, but I don’t personally think it’s amazing I just think it’s very cute and fun.

  20. This was a very cute poem. Something to work on: it’s really hard to nail rhythm and line length, so don’t take it too hard when I say that you could work a bit on that. I especially like the last verse – sounds like a Fowl! Someone tell Beckett not to listen to Artemis!

  21. Beckett Simpleton December 3rd, 2010 at 8:12 pm 21

    Thanks 🙂 Yeah, I’m not the best at poems. This is, so far, as good as I get. I can only really do humour 😉

  22. That’s adorable. *squeal* It fits Beckett perfectly. *grin* Would YOU like some chocolate, BS?

    -Star* :mrgreen:

  23. Beckett Simpleton December 23rd, 2010 at 8:56 pm 23

    Yeah! I Loves Chocolate! *big grin*

    But we don’t have any chocolate in the house. And I really want chocolate now…


  24. LOVE IT! These are all things I wanted when I was little, too. And it’s also how I thought of my baby brother. 🙂 5 stars!!!!

  25. Well. I likes teh new version.

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