The battle for Naturalia

Summary: pppllleeeaaasseee help tiiiiitle!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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the apprenticeship

It was a bright, sunny day in Naturalia and Gareth and Miles were on their way to talk to Merlin.   Gareth  was an eager, outgoing, and adventurous boy whilst Miles was the opposite he was intelligent, cautious, and suprisingly for his age he was wise.   Unspokenly Merlin had always preferred Miles and one day hoped to make him his apprentice. Miles wondered why Merlin had asked him to come and meet him for a “”serious discussion!”” this afternoon.  As Gareth and Miles were nearing the meadow just before Merlin’s house Miles asked

 ”Gareth why do you think that Merlin wanted us to come to is house?”

 ”Don’t matter to me ”Gareth stated””he told me that he’s gonna invite knightmaster Aries to come an’ that Aries might knight ‘me’ .  I hope so,  I’ve been preparing to be knighted for two years ”

 Gareth paused ” you think ‘he’ll knight me?”  ” I don’t see why not” said Miles looking at his muscled behemoth of a friend.

 ”I can’t see why he’d knight me for sure” Miles continued” you’re gonna be a knight  and what am I gonna be?   I’m not strong.  I’m not fast.   I’m not athletically inclined at all and all the things that I could do are either taken or require physical ability which I don’t have !”

Gareth sighed”so you’re not athletic.  you’re exaggerating.   there are things you can do yet my friend, things that only require the skills you already have: reading and writing”*Gareth began to raise in volume*” I CAN’T WRITE, I can’t READ but you can and few have those skills.”

 Gareth and Miles reached Merlin’s doorstep. ”Now let’s see if I can’t get knighted!”said Gareth cheerily. Just then the door swung open and Merlin’s massively tall and gray-robed figure entered the doorway

” Let’s not get our hopes up just yet children.” said Merlin in his deep and powerful voice”but don’t destroy your dreams either… cautious”Merlin gave Miles a quick glance then lead them inside where Knight-master Aries’s magnificently-muscled figure sipped ale while filling the entire armchair, and more (he sometimes drank too much ale and that has a consequence) Aries looked up from his ale

”Hello boys. Still practicing your swordsmanship Gareth?” asked Aries

”Yes,Sir!” stated Gareth proudly Gareth saluted as he said this for effect

”Merlin why did you ask us to come to your house today”Miles questioned

”I didn’t ”ask you to come here today”.”said Merlin” I told you to come here today”

”Yes sir but I thought it would be more polite to say that you asked us to come”replied Miles

”True, my boy true, touche.”stated Merlin

”Yet you still haven’t answered my question: why did you want us to come here today?”inquired Miles

”Yeah, why?”asked Gareth

”Because children a wizard can only have magic for a time equal to three life times and in ten minutes that time will be up and all of  it will flood into my cane and my apprentice must grab it before the magic dissipates or else the demons of Nezreal will get my magic”said Merlin gravely ”and that must not happen…Miles I need an apprentice which, you know that already now”turns to look at Aries and Gareth.”Aries could you please take Gareth to my ceremony room”Aries takes Gareth into the ceremony room”as I was saying I need an apprentice;and I wanted to ask you if you want to be my apprentice”Merlin looked into Miles’s surprised expression which quickly changed into one of happiness and honour

”I’d love to be your apprentice, I would be honoured;didn’t you mention that your magic was going to flood into your cane and that your apprentice must grab it, or something like that.”Miles looked at Merlin for a moment and watched a smile spread slowly across his bearded face.

”yes but until then let us relax and prepare for that event”Merlin said smoothly and both Merlin and Miles took seats across from each other.

 Meanwhile Gareth was teeming with what could only be described as sheer enjoyment as he kneeled in front of Knight-master Aries while Aries tapped him on the shoulder with his knighting sword and said ”I declare thee Sir Gareth of Naturalia.” After the ceremony Gareth burst out of the ceremony room and yelled ”I’ve been knighted!”

”What are you trying to do boy wake the dead”Merlin snapped

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  1. HI!!! are you new? I’m Torry Star but you can call me Torry!
    cool fic needs to be a bit longer though. please update soon!!! FCD!!! (that means first comment dance!)

  2. BoboParadizo May 25th, 2011 at 3:20 am 2

    Okay. A you have few mistakes.
    First of all, the whole thing is one big paragraph. You need to indent every time someone starts talking.
    Also, you need more period marks. For example,

    ‘It was a bright, sunny day in Naturalia and Gareth and Miles were on their way to talk to Merlin Gareth was an eager, outgoing, and adventurous boy whilest Miles was the opposite he was intelligent, cautious, and suprisingly for his age he was wise. ‘

    This sentence should be more than one sentence, or else it is really hard to read.

    Lots of misspellings. Like, ‘cum’ should be ‘come, and so forth.

    Anyways,from what I could read from this, it’s got potential. Very nice work.


  3. Its so short…yeah with a few errors, mentioned above, etc, blah blah…That’s not important. What’s important is an update. OR FACE MY AIR CONDITIONERS OF UTTER DOOM. Yeah, I’m wierd like that.
    hey commenters tell me who your fave character is so far

    Trust me, you should’ve seen the golden oldies. Real oddballs — you guys are nothing, XD. No doubleposting, though, kay? ~WE

  4. AFisawesome24689 May 25th, 2011 at 12:55 pm 4

    thanx for the encouragement guys and girls i’m working on an update asyou comment (and yes i’m new only had an account for two weeks)p.s.the misspellings were actually accents

  5. My favorite? Probably Miles.

    Thanks so much for fixing your story! 🙂

  6. AFisawesome24689 May 25th, 2011 at 11:37 pm 6

    no problem and personally my favourite is Miles as well though don’t tell anyone who read my story i said that (i don’t think that authors are supposed to have favourites 😀 )

  7. Miles, definitely

  8. Hi, you must be knew here. I’m AFcrazy15, but you can call me crazy (just like my family does!). I really liked this, please update or just about everyone else will send their objects of doom to eat you. I personally have bavarian cream filled doughnuts that eat you and turn you into more cream for their filling, but I don’t usually set them upon people unless I’m in a bad mood.
    Again, muy bien!

  9. BoboParadizo May 26th, 2011 at 4:11 am 9

    Sorry, I’m on a sugar rush. 🙂

  10. awesome! I like Miles! I forgot to put this in my first comment.

  11. AFisawesome24689 May 27th, 2011 at 12:22 pm 11

    MONKEYS ,CHOCOLATE BARS, AIR CONDITIONERS…COOKIES (man these people are crazy, better get writing that story)seriously people atleast choose something scary like bats or snakes or tarantulas!!!!

  12. BoboParadizo May 29th, 2011 at 10:16 pm 12

    Fine. Update or face my spiders of scariness!
    *cackles evily*

  13. AFisawesome24689 May 31st, 2011 at 8:49 pm 13

    now that’s an item of doom people
    (though the of scariness part needs work) please do not think me a critic!! i don’t mean to be one


    MAN, writing stories is so much fun! who agrees?

    MEEP. I just remembered why I just can’t leave this site — you guys’ll trash it if I do! No doubleposting, please, or tripleposting or quad-posting… etc. Please? XD. ~WE

  14. I agree! really good story! you should of met Jazz! She had flying blue pigs!
    Now UPDATE or face my Flying monkeys of awesomeness!

  15. I agree too

  16. AFisawesome24689 June 1st, 2011 at 12:36 am 16

    more items of doom?! i told you guys about this
    can you guys please please please help me title this make suggestions for my sake ppwweaseee!! * blinks multiple timeshow would giving a orion a lollipop have to do with anything i thought he was stuck in arty’s head
    commenters tiss, tiss, tiss how spontaneous they are
    is ”The Quest for Naturalia” a good name for this story because i kind of wanna name it something like that.

    Try not to doublepost, eh? ~WE

  17. FantasyDevourer June 1st, 2011 at 3:28 am 17

    This is an interesting plot, some little things like quotation marks being off and things like that.
    But… Um…. What does this have to do with Artemis Fowl??? Maybe later? 😛 if this story doesn’t, (I think one of the rules is that it has to be about Artemis & Co.) an Administrator might do something.
    Funnily enough, I was reading the story of King Arthur earlier today. Coincidence????

  18. BoboParadizo June 1st, 2011 at 3:58 am 18

    Well, I like ur story, but what does it have to do with artemis fowl? just wondering… cuz this IS the fansite…

  19. AFisawesome24689 June 1st, 2011 at 12:18 pm 19

    i didn’t know that it had to involve artemis fowl cause he doesn’t really fit in my storyline
    CURSES it is now time for me to send my barbarian warrior tribe on you and they’ll have HUGE axes and swords :I

  20. BoboParadizo June 3rd, 2011 at 12:43 am 20

    Dont worry, just have artemis time-travel to…um…wherever your story is taking place!

  21. AFisawesome24689 June 3rd, 2011 at 1:20 am 21

    how much does he have to be in it exactly
    like a glimpse or an entire introduction

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