It's not complete yet, since I know there are multiple mistakes (like Holly's OUTFIT being BAD and DEFYING GRAVITY =dies=) but I need honest opinions. Critique and helpful tips are VERY MUCH APPRECIATED (italicized, boldfaced, and underlined).
Feedback, please?
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It' quite a nice job indeed...the only mistakes I see s that Holly's neck is too large compared to her head, and her arm and shoulder are kinda small. Arty's eye sholde be bigger, but except from these things tha pic is good. I especially like Holly's face and hair...being grey she looks pretty also as Vinyàya...really this hair is the one I imagine for Vin
Btw, what do ypu mean with ITALICIZED???
-squeezes VR to death- thank youuuuu for the critique!!! Honestly, I hadn't noticed the neck, so thanks for pointing that out. And Holly's arm was definitely another one of my main concerns, apart from her (or Artemis', actually) "suit." Most of Arty's eye is hidden by his hair and his eyes are half-closed. Maybe that's why it looks too small? And about italicized, I mean the phrase "VERY MUCH APPRECIATED" would be in italics and bold and underlined if I had it my way. You know, italicized, when the letters are, like, slanted?
And H_a_A thanks for the sparkles comment. I was worried they took away. I tried hard to make them look like they were actually glowing.
Its extremely good, and indeed its one of the best portrayals of this scene on this site. Her neck, arm and boob are a little awkward but the faces are PERFECT.Good work!
oo i luv luv arty's hair... grr i still havent read tp yet. *dies of sadness* yes i know how horriable, but it's not a my library and my parents won't buy it, till it's at the half-price bookstore sooo....
a couple of things.... holly's hair should be falling, like on arty(unless of course it happens in the book, i that case ingore me), and is holly flying or is she sitting on him?? if by, "defying gravity" you meant wat i just said, well then good job, cause thats like the only GOOD JOB!! but why is holly's hair gray? or is it grey?? hmmmm
cmfrantz: ... have you read the book? Because you should know why I made it grey (and it's actually silver. )
ALLP: =O What are you doing looking at spoilers? Ah, well... it's you being spoiled, I guess... That IS what I meant about her defying gravity. And the reason her hair is grey is in the book.
OMG!!! Vinyàya rocks!! Remember me? Long time no chat my friend! How have you been? Sorry, their's me, rambling on and on and on and on an- oh wait, their I go again. X_X Annnyway. I think her hair wig thing falls apart when sh is running to Arty to rescue him... I like the pic. Here's a tip though, look at some photos, and really study them, then try and draw a person in the same position on a sheet of paper. Keep practising like that and you'll discover a whole bunch of little details and proportional hints that will make your pictures look even more life-like. Keep working on it, and you'll devolope your own style. and on a side note this smilie looks like a yellow Butler -->
Hi Holly nice to see you it's been such a long time! I really wish I could post some new fanarts but I'm so busy at this time Anyway, I'm so glad ourvA/H dream has come true, although I'm not as much a shipper as I was last year...oh well, HUGGIES!
Btw, what do ypu mean with ITALICIZED???
And H_a_A thanks for the sparkles comment. I was worried they took away. I tried hard to make them look like they were actually glowing.
Very good!'cept next time don't make Holly's hair grey,ok?
a couple of things.... holly's hair should be falling, like on arty(unless of course it happens in the book, i that case ingore me), and is holly flying or is she sitting on him?? if by, "defying gravity" you meant wat i just said, well then good job, cause thats like the only GOOD JOB!! but why is holly's hair gray? or is it grey?? hmmmm
ALLP: =O What are you doing looking at spoilers? Ah, well... it's you being spoiled, I guess... That IS what I meant about her defying gravity. And the reason her hair is grey is in the book.