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The Party Problem

Summary: A/N:I know it’s no longer Christmas, and it is Christmas themed, but by the end it won’t be. It also […]

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A/N:I know it’s no longer Christmas, and it is Christmas themed, but by the end it won’t be. It also won’t be a boring, cliche’ one, where they fall in love and live happily ever after. Enjoy!!!!

Holly’s P.OV.

Fairies don’t usually celebrate Christmas. They used to. Then Mud Men started the fireworks, the parties, the present-giving, and, although the didn’t know it, the end of a fairy holiday.

So when Artemis invited me to a Christmas party, it took a lot of persuading.

“No.”

“Please?”

“No.”

“Why?”

“I could ask you the same.”

“No, you couldn’t.”

“I could. If you phrase it like this;why would Artemis Fowl, the most unsociable person I know, want to hold a party?”

“I don’t. Mother does.”

I rolled my eyes.

“Please? As my friend, Holly Short, I am asking you to come.”

“I don’t see why not.” The words were out of my mouth without my registering the fact. But I continued with a list of questions, not regretting my choice of words.

“Do I have to bring a present?”

“That would just be an added bonus. But not compulsory, no.”

“Will Minerva come?”

“Yes.”

That put me off a bit. I didn’t want her ruining my first Christmas.

“But you’ll come anyway.” It was a command, not a request.

“But I don’t-”

“See you tomorrow!” And he hung up, leaving me with the looming prospect of a party.

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  1. This is gonna be good. I’ll keep tabs on this one.

  2. Thanks. 🙂 Any advice? Any possible way it could be improved?

  3. I like it. I mean with the whole jealously thing
    -Diana Fowl 😀

  4. bad Trouble!
    anyway why would lili be so nice to holly

  5. Thanks guys. 🙂
    Dovepaw:I now have an even better plot to the one I had originally. Thank you. I now owe you an update to the story of your choice.

  6. Ah, a funny Christmas theme. And a good one at that. Keeping updating, and I’ll keep reading.

    Also great 1st person story. Though I do enjoy stories more in 3rd, this one I’ll make an exception for.

    5 for 5

  7. I sympathize with holly. i dont like xmas parties either

  8. Thanks guys. 🙂 I’ll update ASAP.
    DarthZ:I don’t mind parties, as long as I don’t have to dress up, and at least 2 of my friends are there. 🙂

  9. Dude!!!! Seriously?!!??!!? Oh *gagging, retching noise* (reasons: a] Trouble’s sick mind and b] short comments)

    I will now type an extremely long comment on my hard-to-type on iPod.
    Some OOC-ness on Holly’s part; I don’t think she’d speak so out-of-turn two times in a row. I also don’t think Trouble would be so sick. In a bad way. Artemis wouldn’t say pretty please. And no offense, but pretty stereotypical anyway (hypocrite is I) with the whole party prospect.

    Impeccable grammar, spelling, caps, and punc, as per usual. And why is this not depressing? That’s new for you. XD.

    Keep working, HF, this is craycray short. (I get my weird lingo from my brother)

  10. Thanks for such a long comment!!! I’ve become soooo bored reading tiny things that say ‘good, update’. I love it when you comment on my stuff. 🙂
    I don’t Trouble very well, which is probably why he’s so OOC-but seriously, he’s a bloke, and he’s seen a pretty girl. It does happen.
    How is it stereotypical? I’m not 100% on what that means, so help would be nice.
    I will fix Holly and Artemis.
    Thanks again for making an effort. It made my day. 🙂

  11. Okay, I was also going to write out a long comment, but WE stole the idea from me. XD

    My biggest complaint is that it’s just too short. Not enough words to make it feel like a filling story. You could add descriptions next time of what exactly Holly is wearing to the party.

    Also (and this is just me nit-picking), the second-to-last word of the second chapter should probably be capitalized, because it’s the first one in a quotation mark.

    I still want you to update, though. 😉

  12. Thanks Ann. 🙂 I will write what Holly is wearing, I’m just not quite there yet. The next bit will be from Artemis’ P.O.V., and he’ll describe it in minute detail for you. And I’ll add more detail to the other parts of the story too.

  13. It’s just, y’know, there’s always a Christmas party fic for Christmas. The Fowls hold a ball, or the LEP throws a bash. Then there’s the chance that Holly and Artemis will “realize their feelings for each other and long for the other with the knowledge that admitting their thoughts could be fatal to their shaky and awkward relationship”. You get it a lot.

    Haha! I’ve happy-fied an author!

    Seriously, though, what happened to Queen Angst and Fluffitude?

  14. They will not “realize their feelings for each other and long for the other with the knowledge that admitting their thoughts could be fatal to their shaky and awkward relationship” because that is boring. It will be much better.
    And it gets angsty (is that a word??) later on. You didn’t seriously think I would let them happily ever after, did you? That would be nice. 🙂

  15. I have faith in your angsty-ness, Hermione. 😀 And that was a very interesting start. Very disgusting Trouble Kelp. Eek.
    I just came from reading something off-site that was badly written, so I feel doubly appreciative of your proper English. 🙂
    Pleez update!

  16. Hermione Fowl January 3rd, 2011 at 2:25 am 16

    Thanks ENHA. 🙂 Never be alarmed by things boys do. Their minds work in strange ways. And never be alarmed at things I write. My mind works in an even stranger way. 🙂
    But seriously-this is not just for you, but for everyone-can you not write proper criticism?? Is WE the only one who can ever think of anything I can improve on? I’ll never be able to be a better writer if no one tells me what to improve on.

  17. You want criticism? Hm. *puts finger on lip* I guess I don’t want to risk hurt feelings unless there’s a big issue…but you’re right. No, you’re wrong. No, you’re…AHHHH!! How do I criticize that? 😉

    “Her lips were blood red-but not it a way…” Okay, – should be , and ‘it’ should be ‘in’. And I prefer Trouble when he’s not a lout. I don’t think he even smiles in the books.

    Seriously, if you want more criticism than that you’re just going to have to write badly!

  18. Hermione Fowl January 4th, 2011 at 9:23 pm 18

    Thanks ENHA. 🙂 It’s the effort that counts. It just annoys me when people go ‘that’s good, update’. And I’m not going to write badly-cause you wouldn’t read my stuff if I did.
    I don’t know Trouble that well-I haven’t read the series in AGES. So I just made it up. 🙂

  19. Hey, you’ve updated! I saw your comment about my concrit, and was dying to reply, but couldn’t because I needed more stuff to talk about.

    Nice update, rather short, ha about the sneakers! Totally her personality. Why would Artemis dance
    with Lili? Ay, you’re the author, have fun with it.

    Not much to say, though, updates are *cough* too short.

  20. Hermione Fowl January 5th, 2011 at 1:37 am 20

    As I’ve said before-Artemis is a boy. Lili is a pretty girl. I’m a girl, so what goes on in a boys mind is a mystery to me. What goes on in Lili’s mind, however, I know all about. . . MWHAHAHAHA!!!!!

  21. HI!!! how is U I loooooooove ur story + enjoyed playing with you 2-day!! and on an earlier topic it woul be kinda creepy if ya think about it. you know the terrifying prospect that we could know everyone on fanfic and have no idea. I have a quick question, who lives in wellington, in Maungaraki. and goes to Maungaraki school? as 4 stori wise Fab! fab! fabbity! fab! fab!

    Please no comment conversations, okies? 😉

  22. Hermione Fowl January 7th, 2011 at 2:48 am 22

    Yeah, Abra, don’t be naughty. 🙂
    Thanks for your enthusiasm.

  23. The third chapter I believe was the greatest moments of Fowl history. But can Artemis Fowl dance? I haven’t read much of Lili in the AF books, and didn’t really cared to notice minor characters so I can’t ping you if get her out of OOC. Though I believe Artemis would have been more hesitant on accepting the invitation though. Poor Holly though, she didn’t like wearing that sparkly dress (Lost Colony) and now she’s wearing another dress.

    Very funny and can’t wait to read the next chapter.

  24. Hermione Fowl January 8th, 2011 at 3:04 am 24

    Thanks Mr. B. 🙂 I don’t know if Arty can dance. Well, he can now.

  25. Well, this next chapter was quite different set of writing. 1st person is always fun to write.

    But now about the content. To be truthful it was short and Holly was a tad OOC, or unless she had a drinking problem I wasn’t aware of. I don’t believe she would have went for the drink when Artemis and Lili were dancing.

    Also the last paragraph it says “Diverting” which I believe it should say “Diversion”.

    Over all worth reading and updating. As well as the threats of not updating. (If only I can vote again)

    – Mr. B

  26. Actually, Mr B., “diverting” and “diversion” could be interchanged. They both work out. I really don’t understand Lily’s intentions… or Holly’s reaction for that matter. By the way, you didn’t post an announcement saying that you updated! Or you did and I haven’t seen it… (leaves to check for any new announcements/stories)

    Anyway, I think you should write longer chapters… or more chapters in one sitting, because these tiny updates are really not enough to write a long, elaborate comment like I normally do. There’re no mess-ups in grammar, punc, caps, and spelling, so…

    OOPDEET. GRAZI, MON AMI.

  27. Holly is not OOC. Just be patient, and all will be revealed.
    I will try to update again soon, and make it longer.
    I did post an announcement, and I was very sad that no one commented on it. 🙁

  28. December Holly February 4th, 2011 at 6:12 am 28

    Well, I’m glad that you explained Lili and Artemis dancing and Holly’s drinking. It’s weird to think of her having a drinking problem, but I guess it works. Background on how she got that way would be interesting.

    Great updates as usual! I like that you’re using Lili. She doesn’t usually get much development.

  29. Thanks very muchly.
    I will write a sequel on how Holly got her drinking problem, and why Lili hates Holly so much, and something on Artemis too. 🙂

  30. Hermione Fowl March 2nd, 2011 at 3:43 am 31

    Please please please LEPO, tell me what you like, what you don’t. How will I ever become a better writer if I just get comments like that??

  31. no offence but i really do not like the end but what can i say im a a/j person

  32. Sorry about my last comment. I. Liked it when Holly was drunk, but I can’t say I’m thrilled about the end. I mean it would have been bit of a seen-it if he married holly, but why oh why did it have to be Lilli?
    Rock on!

  33. Hermione Fowl March 2nd, 2011 at 7:02 am 34

    Well, it was Lili or Minerva. And I personally don’t like it when people kill me, so I chose Lili.
    Delata:A/J?? Arty/JULIET?!?! Seriously? Interesting. I’m A/H but I prefer writing about more interesting couples.

  34. A/J is a sweet couple, if not a bit strange. After the Limo thing, she’s now 7 years older than Arty… It’s a bit much.

    Kay, I’ll admit it — I didn’t like it. That was pretty abrupt, actually, with no real plot. Lili was just being weird, it explained nothing about why Artemis decided against Holly, blah blah blah. Not one of your best works, HF. But I will say, at least it’s finished now!

  35. Hermione Fowl March 3rd, 2011 at 4:43 am 36

    I will fix it. Thank you for a long comment, and saying why you didn’t like it. Check here TOMORROW and it will be fixed, possibly with a whole other chapter.

  36. NOOOO I HATE LILY FROND! AND EVERYONE SPELLS IT LILI! AAAAAAAAAAAAAARGH!

    …no mistakes…

    Woah, please cool it with the letter repetition 😉 It stretches the page.

  37. Hermione Fowl April 13th, 2011 at 8:13 am 38

    It’s spelled Lili because that’s how Eoin Colfer spells it. It’s the proper way.
    And I’m glad you commented and all, but seriously? That’s it? You hate Lili, cool, but nothing about my story. . .

  38. I hate you!!! HOW could you! TRAITOR!! YOU married Lili and ARTY, ARTY of all people.

    But overall it was a fabulous story. 🙂

  39. Ah, an A/L story. Very different indeed, the story was quite interesting to read and even more so to see the end conclusion.

    The only real problem I see is the lack of answers of what happened between Holly, Lili and Artemis between the party and wedding. A lot of blank spots for the readers to fill.

    But all in all it deserves my 5 star rating back at chp 1 and will always be a 5 star story.

    With a little Pixie dust,
    – Mr. B

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