Silent Snow
Written on February 7th, 2010 by bookwormchickStory Details
- Category: Uncategorized and General and Angst and Poetry/Songfictions
- Author: bookwormchick
- Word Count: 510
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(2 votes, average: 5 out of 5)
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I find it kinda funny, I find it kinda sad, the dreams in which I’m dieing are the best I’ve ever had…
Artemis looked out the window as the snow drifted down slowly. Behind him the fire in the fireplace blazed, but he was still cold. He had had another dream. Each were different but they were all black and white images, like a slide show. And they were all silent, almost peaceful. But the pictures themselves were grotesque. In each someone he loved died before him and he could do nothing, not even think, he could just watch with no emotion. And last night it was himself. He was simply laying on his bed ,as if in sleep, but he knew that no breath entered the lungs of the boy under the covers. His eyes stared blankly at the wall, glazed over. Artemis shivered. It was only a dream, it had to be. He looked back out the window at the silent snow. He walked back to his bed and fell into uneasy sleep.
Artemis stood on a cliff, rain pelted him and lightning flashed and thunder boomed. The noise and light was all around him but he was still and calm. He took one step and fell to the depths below him. Still he did not scream or flail. Artemis simply fell and did not feel. He was at peace, no thought ran through his head.
Artemis woke with a start. He sat up and hugged his knees to his chest. Dreams. Torments of the night. All he could do was look out to the silent snow.
February 7th, 2010 at 8:41 am
AWWWWWWWWWEEEEESOOOOOOOOOOMMME!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
*1st comment dance*
February 7th, 2010 at 8:49 am
Awesome. But has spelling mistakes, and the long paragraphs are kinda hard on they eye but I don’t really mind. I only say that because I’ve staring at the computer screen for like five hours and I’m tired.
Awesomeness itself. (Copied froma review
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February 7th, 2010 at 10:02 pm
That’s deep. And really good!!!
There were a couple of spelling, punctuation, and grammar misshaps, but it wasn’t bad. 
good job. Update?
ps its grotesque.
February 8th, 2010 at 6:02 am
You need to split up your paragraphs, work on your spelling and try and make your story flow better.
This is a generally a good idea, you just need to extend on it more.
Also mad World is a fantastic song, one of my favourites!
February 8th, 2010 at 10:17 am
Run this through a spell checker. Please. Pleasey pleasey please. If you do, it will be amayzing. It’s already awesome with the spelling mistakes, but it would be absolute perfection without them. I looove this. Nicely done.
February 9th, 2010 at 2:54 am
Yeah, the spelling is definately . . . eh. Like, “please fix this pronto” eh. The grammar was also pretty iffy, with tenses and stuff like that.
I liked the content itself well enough, but I thought that it was almost . . . ick-ified by how short it was- it could have been amazingly amazing, but it was kind of short, and didn’t really give the reader enough time to figure out the meaning behind the dreams.
February 9th, 2010 at 8:20 am
Yeah, a bit short. But brilliant. =)=)
February 10th, 2010 at 3:42 am
I fixed it happy?! I’m really bad at spelling ok! but thanks for the comments!!
February 13th, 2010 at 9:29 pm
i don’t know if i’m gona continue this one. should I?
February 13th, 2010 at 9:48 pm
No, I think it’s good. =)=)