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Last Night

Summary: Yay for drabbles? Contains charrie death! πŸ™ ________ As the darkness crept on the girl, soft song rocking through her […]

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Yay for drabbles? Contains charrie death! πŸ™
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As the darkness crept on the girl, soft song rocking through her lips, cascading through the night. Love me, love me. The bittersweet song of insanity, forcing itself out. Run, run! Footsteps led out into the black, and the orange street lights did not catch her in the act. Jump, jump! β€œLast night, good night?” Asked the girl, standing on the edge. Jump, jump, jump! She took a step, but fear overtook her. β€œI’m not afraid of heights.” 

And then Holly Short fell, and she screamed on the way down.

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  1. I can’t believe you killed holly! Besides that it’s good and I didn’t see any mistakes.

  2. FantasyDevourer July 24th, 2011 at 4:04 pm 2

    You killed her!! Holly would never go insane. She’s just too soldier-ish. No mistakes.

    4/s. (One star knocked down because I don’t like Holly dying.)

  3. MinnieXplayer July 24th, 2011 at 4:14 pm 3

    AAAAAAAH!!!!!!!!!!
    The story is good-I mean the way it’s been written- but-AAAAAAAAAAH!!!!!!!!!!!!
    THIS IS AS HORRIBLE AS NO MORE CHOCOLATE? OR AS MELLO DYING!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
    NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!!
    Sorry for the insane bit…

    Keep the caps and punctuation at a minimum please. Thanks. πŸ˜‰ ~Fowlie

  4. You killed Holly!!!!!! Nooooooooooooo!!!!!!!!!!! Way?????????
    Other then that good story!!!

  5. Hermione Fowl July 24th, 2011 at 11:29 pm 5

    β€œLast night, good night?” Asked the girl, standing on the edge.

  6. Hermione Fowl July 24th, 2011 at 11:31 pm 6

    Sorry, my com stuffed up. And sorry for double posting.
    What I was going to say about those words, was that they should have been a new paragraph, and asked shouldn’t have a capital letter.
    Other than that, the story was really good. I loved how you called her ‘the girl’ instead of saying her name.

  7. Nooo!!! You can’t kill Holly!!! oh well.
    Yeah, I agree, I love how she’s the girl instead of Holly. I didn’t really see any mistakes since it’s so short, but its good!
    I say….4 stars? 5 stars? 4 stars. The only reasons are that it’s super short and I also don’t like Holly dying.

  8. in love with Arty 6302 August 2nd, 2011 at 5:33 pm 8

    Why would she go crazy and end up comiting suicide? and where was she when it happened?

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