I can’t believe this is happening…(finished)

Summary: ok so the section of chapter 2 was only half of chapter 2 so now i have chapter 2 done. i actually tried this time.

Chapters: 1 2

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Ok want to put this out there now this is my first fanfic ever… so the characters might be a little ooc… sorry. R&R&R. thx

She had just gotten out of the shower when there was a knock at the door. She pulled on a robe and ran to answer.

“Who is it?” she said.

“Who do you think?” said a gruff voice.

God it was him. She knew there was a random survey coming, but now. This was the worst possible time for this to happen. Oh well, might as well get it over with…

“Hello, Vinyaya, can I please come in?”

Of course it was him. She should have known that her questioner to be none other than Commander Julius Root.

“I don’t know can you?” she asked with a slight hint of sarcasm.

She heard him sigh heavily. She didn’t know what to do. Should she let him in or ask him to come later? Now would be better ultimately.

“Nice robe, Vinyaya”, he said masking a laugh as a cough.

“Shut up, Root”, Vinyaya grumbled,” come in, you can sit down if you want I have to go get dressed.”

She walked to the bathroom as he sat down on her couch. Quickly getting dressed, she felt nervous, no one came this early to ask questions, right? She soon walked out into the main sitting room drying her hair in a towel.

She sat down next him lightly.

“What do you want, Root?” Vinyaya asked, acting as though she didn’t know.

“I have to ask you a few questions about the LEP”, Root stated simply.

“Fire away”

“Do you like your job?”

“Yes”

“Do you like the way civilians are treated?”

“Yes, even though you yell at Foaly”, she said with a small laugh.

Root smiled slightly.

“Do you like the budget for the tech section of the LEP?”

“It’s o.k. but it could be better…”

“Will you go on a date with me?”

Vinyaya felt as though she had run head long into a wall. Had he really asked her out? Of course he did. But did she like him more than a friend?

He looked uncomfortable. “Listen if you don’t-“, he started

Vinyaya cut him off, “Of course I will go out with you”

I put this into word now that my computer is fixed. It would have been fixed earlier but I can’t edit it on my 3ds. Thx peace.

 

Chapters: 1 2

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5 responses to “I can’t believe this is happening…(finished).” Join in!

  1. Hi some mistakes, it has potential go find mind. I’m so bad at grammar *laughs* look at mind under me and myself.

  2. God it was him. She knew there was a random survey coming, but now.

    It should be: God, it was him. She knew there was a random survey coming, but now?

    “hello, Vinyaya, can I please come in?”

    You need to capitalize the H.

    Oh, For of course it was she. And she had known that Foaly would have put her questioner to be none other than Commander Julius Root.

    Firstly, F is not supposed to be capital. Secondly, It makes no sense. Thirdly, I recommend that “Of course it was him. She should have known that her questioner would be none other than Commander Julius Root.”

    Okay, there are loads more, but fix these first. Then we’ll tackle the rest.

  3. ok thx and srry little rushed had to go tfix the computer than it crashed again… ill fix them later peace!

  4. This was really good and there were a couple mistakes. Update!!!!!!!!!! @GoldenWolf2456 You have a 3DS too? All hail Nintendo!!!!!!!!

  5. in the newer part of chapter 2 i messed up i’ll fix it now though.
    Every now and then he would look over at me and smile.
    there fixed sorry.

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