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Deadly Melody

Summary: Warning! SPOILERS FOR TLG!!!!! (post TLG)

Chapters: 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 10 11 12

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This being my first fic ever I decided to start out small. If it doesn’t die I’ll keep going but I need hardcore con crit so I know what I messed up. I hope I did well!

Obsidia watched the young man exit the bar, the only one not staggering in his group of friends. She walked toward him and, discreetly, caught his attention. The man did a double take at the woman who had a face that would make Aphrodite herself sit up and beg. He whispered to the guy next to him, who could barely stand, and began to walk towards her.

“Hey, I’m Will. What’s your name, babe?” He asked, trying to flirt in his drunken state.

“My name is Katia.” She answered. She never gave out her real name. It was a mess to explain such a name.

“Katia. That’s hot.” He slurred. Will attempted to lean casually against the side of the Pawn shop that resided next door to the bar, but only succeeded in clumsily falling into the wall.

He opened his mouth to say something else but Obsidia covered it with her hand. She opened her mouth and began to sing.

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Artemis eyed the needle in Foaly’s hairy hand and asked a strange, but understandable question.

“Why do I have to be restrained for a polygraph?” He asked eyeing the iron cuffs locked around his wrists.

“In case we get a violent reaction out of you. We still aren’t one hundred percent of where your mental state of being stands. Something could trigger a negative reaction.” Replied the centaur as if it were the most obvious thing in or under the world.

“What is the wire attached to my temple because it is blatantly obvious it is not a polygraph wire.” “Erm… its electrostatic shock so if you do get violent we can knock you out so you can’t damage yourself.” replied Foaly.

Artemis gave the wire hanging beside his face a nervous sideways glance.

Holly chuckled and rolled her eyes at Foaly. “As if Artemis could actually damage himself. He couldn’t kill the cricket without bruising his palm!”

Artemis sighed. He has been enduring Holly’s constant teasing for about three months now.

“For heaven’s sake, Holly, those crickets were unnaturally large and trying to eat us alive. That’s hardly a fair comparison.” said Artemis in an exasperated tone.

Holly just rolled her eyes and punched his shoulder, causing him to wince.

Foaly turned to the wired up genius and said,”Test one. Artemis what is your full name?”

“Artemis James Fowl II.”

The polygraph did not change.

“Were you formerly deceased but resurrected yourself through illegal cloning technology?”

“Yes.” Still no change.

“Do you feel any deep emotional attachments to Captain Short outside of friendship?”

Artemis opened his mouth but no sound came out.

Foaly glanced up from his monitors when Artemis did not reply. Holly’s eyes narrowed as she remembered Orion’s ridiculous outbursts.

“Artemis,” she said in a warning tone,”answer the question.”

Artemis, for once, seemed at a loss for words.

“I…well, ah, you see, I…ahem, I…” he eventually stopped the first stutter of his life and trailed off.

“Artemis it’s a simple yes or no question. We need and answer to make certain that Orion did not resurface through the event of your resurrection.”said Foaly, clearly uncomfortable with the tension that could be cut with a knife.

“Well, there is a slight problem with that.” Said Artemis in a frank tone. “And what might that be?” asked Holly, joking tone long gone.

“That I don’t know if I can honestly answer yes or no.” Said Artemis softly, eyes downcast, usually alabaster cheeks now bright crimson.

Holly’s jaw dropped.

Chapters: 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 10 11 12

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  1. you maybe new,but you’re sort of good. i liked it,and i’ll be grateful if you keep it going. i just turned 11 last month and usually haaate too much romance but this was really good

  2. @shaadia- thanks. This is only the second fanfic I have written and the first AF. I’m glad you liked it

    When I updated it randomly added a third chapter, but its blank. I don’t know how that happened but I will try to fix it.

  3. Your new? Welcome to the sight! I myself just joined a little while back. I haven’t written any fan fics though.
    Nice story! I really liked it! Where did Holly go? Why was she so mad? I thought what Artemis said was kind of sweet.
    So far so good. :)Please update! I’m curious to see what happens next. ???

  4. hi silvergoddess i saw chapter two only now. Great job! And don’t worry about the third chapter being blank,that happens in a lot of stories,i guess. So far,i love this fic. i’m adding it to my favourites when you write more!

  5. Alright, I managed to get the chapters under control and I updated. Chapter 3 officially contains WORDS. I also have a new songfiction up called I Can’t Fix You.

  6. Glad u updated chappie 3 and its great. i read your songfic left a review now 2 be honest i am trying to come up with a theory why everyone’s better than me now IT IS BECAUSE YOURE OLDER AND THERE CANT BE ANY OTHER REASON COS IM BETTER THAN EVERYONE IN CLASS ahem,sorry. good story,keep writing,i will add 2 my favs *smilie face*

  7. Actually I’m not sure it has anything to do with me being older, but I do read a lot. I go through seven or eight 2 inch library books in a week NOT KIDDING. Its really helped with my spelling and vocabulary. I’m glad you like them! I like sad stories so don’t be surprised if you see a lot of them.

  8. Yeah maybe. but it has to be natural talent,because even i read books that are taller than me in diameter. well whatever. i’ll admit i actually am better than everyone in class and am trying ,not too hard,but trying,to maintain the status. silver,can i ask you a favour? PLEASE GIVE ME A BETTER TITLE FOR TIME PARADOX PART TWO, I’M FACING OCD AND GOING PARANOID PLUS MY ALTER EGO IS WORSE THAN ARTY’S!!!! pleasee continue your totally awesome story,honestly i log in daily to see what else you’ve added.

  9. I’m glad you like my stories. I’m going to update at lunch today and I’m also adding a new songfic and poem. I have no real life and i was up until midnight-ish typing it all.

    As for the time paradox thing…hmmm…not sure. Maybe something like Right Place Wrong Time or The Time Travaler’s Genius.

    I updated chapter four. I tried to make it longer too. Review!

  10. wow yeah,love 4th chappie. this is REAL intresting. write more silver,pls read my stories too,specially cos no one likes them:( i give u 5 stars though yours was awesome.

  11. Erm… chapter 5 is updated, but something weird happened and all of my paragraph spacing and indentations got screwed up. I’m going to leave it up for now, but I will fix it.

  12. chapter 5 is really good. also no spelling errors and stuff-spacing doesn’t actually matter to me if the story is good,which it is. keep it up!

  13. sexxicosmologist February 7th, 2013 at 2:55 am 13

    Hi I’m commenting!! 😀 I really do like your fic! I should have commented on it when I added it to my favorites but I was being lazy… so Sorry!

  14. AWESOME I AM SOOO GREATEFUL YOU UPDATED YOU ARE AWESOME TOTALLY AWESOME REALLY AWESOME VERY AWESOME AMAZINGLY AWESOME GREATLY AWESOME eh…

    MY FAVOURITE!

    No offence anybody else. I ADDED THIS 2 MY FAVS COS YOU ARE AWESOME!!!

    *invades comment* Ah actually, I didn’t mean to update! This was my work in progress and I must have updated by accident! FIXING NOW!!!

  15. yay update u have no idea how long i was waiting!

  16. was soo friggin awesome! so glad u updated! excuse me now,i have WWYD to look at!

  17. i am not ignoring that chapter. i still like the story and im totally pissed off that nobody else is commenting, silver deserves more. her writing is totally awesome and i start jumping about in excitement whenever shes posted something!

  18. YES!! update! *lollipop dance*
    wow…CliFFhanGer!!
    I love those! Just so long as you update quickly…
    Thank you! You updated this awesome story just for me? Aww! That’s so nice of you!

  19. Woo-ooh, it’s been a while! Thank you so much for updating! Me love it all! (hey, the cliffhanger doesn’t count 😉 ) Keep it up, Sil!

  20. Yeah, really good work! And I’m glad to see somebody posting, and to see you back on, if only briefly. 🙂 I did see a few small mistakes, but I won’t bothe pointing them out cause of how small they are, they don’t make much difference. Still, really great work! I’ll watch for the updates! 😀

  21. wow. i always love your updates. they’re amazing.

  22. ThunderSpirit October 4th, 2013 at 9:59 pm 22

    Hello. This fix is amazing and your updates are great!????

  23. Oops. I tried placing a happy face. Anyway you are really good.

  24. Nah, it’s not as good as the Rise of the Guardians I have on FF.net. It’s called Cold Insanity and has hit over 120 reviews last I checked. That’s my best story, and my favorite that I’ve written so far.

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