~’When There Was Me and You’~
Written on December 13th, 2007 by 017350Story Details
- Category: Poetry/Songfictions
- Author: 017350
- Word Count: 494
- Read 199 times
(8 votes, average: 4 out of 5)
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This is my first songfic. I’m using the song “When There Was Me and You” from High School Musical. Any constructive criticism is appreciated!
Funny when you find yourself
Looking from the outside
I’m standing here but all I want
Is to be over there
Why did I let myself believe
Miracles could happen
Cause now I have to pretend
That I don’t really care
Artemis was in his room. Thinking over what had happened. It wasn’t what he wanted. But he was Artemis Fowl II, and he couldn’t be bothered with emotions such as sadness.
I thought you were my fairytale
A dream when I’m not sleeping
A wish upon a star
That’s coming true
But everybody else could tell
That I confused my feelings with the truth
When there was me and you
Artemis didn’t feel well with it on his mind. He had two options: He could just let it go, or he could take action. If he chose to let it go, then it would stay on his mind, haunting him, a long while. If he chose to take action, then he would have to admit his feelings. And the last think he wanted was to show signs of weakness.
I swore I knew the melody
That I heard you singing
And when you smiled
You made me feel
Like I could sing along
But then you went and changed the words
Now my heart is empty
I’m only left with used-to-be’s
Once upon a song
Don’t cry over spilled milk. Artemis kept mulling over those words in his head. It had already happened. Don’t think about it. He was sure that he could get there if he tried. He had his own private jet. He could be there in just a few hours. He couldn’t make up his mind.
Now I know you’re not a fairytale
And dreams were meant for sleeping
And wishes on a star
Just don’t come true
Cause now even I tell
That I confused my feelings with the truth
Cause I liked the view
When there was me and you
Ever since Minerva had moved, he had missed her badly. If he went, his feelings for her would be clear. That was something he wasn’t sure he wanted to admit. At least not yet…
I can’t believe that
I could be so blind
It’s like you were floating
While I was falling
And I didn’t mind
He wanted to go, and he knew it. It was one of those things that even a genius couldn’t be sure of.
Cause I liked the view
Thought you felt it too
When there was me and you
I’m sorry if this story didn’t make any sense. If you have any questions please leave a review. And remember RR&R!
December 13th, 2007 at 3:10 am
RR&R
(Read, Rate, and Review)
December 13th, 2007 at 3:26 am
Did you rate your own story? I see that there was no other readers besides me. That is unfair for other people
December 13th, 2007 at 4:14 am
cool , nice , i like it!
December 13th, 2007 at 5:14 pm
Star Jinin- I disagree. It’s completely fair. But if it makes you feel better, I’ll ask an editor to delete the ratings.
December 13th, 2007 at 9:17 pm
good fic…. bad that miNERDa’s in it. Hey ya did ask for constructive crittisisem!!
this is my fave song from HSM!!!!
December 13th, 2007 at 9:35 pm
Thanks! I knew that high school musical had a lot of fans. So I wrote a songfic with this song. It’s a slow short song, and it seemed to be the most Artemis Fowl-ish song of them all. Sorry for putting Minerva in there, but I didn’t want to be a A/H shipper. I knew that even more people didn’t like A/H than A/M. But I’m glad you liked the story!
December 13th, 2007 at 10:19 pm
i dont really like eitther… but if i had to chose i would say a/m otherwise , i prefer a/oc artemis/ other charecter…. like ones that we make up.
December 13th, 2007 at 10:43 pm
I wish people would stop saying they hated Minerva. Just because she kidnapped something doesn’t mean she’s evil! If you will kindly recall, Artemis kidnapped Holly! So technicaly, neither of them are very nice, but they’re both still good. Butler let Minerva near Artemis, so that means she’s a god person!
December 13th, 2007 at 10:57 pm
good person , and yeah , i agree , i like minerva! she’s nice ! wel… i dont know her but STILL , lol anyway , I really like HSM
December 13th, 2007 at 11:30 pm
hmmm… Interesting but In need of some work. Maybe less spilled milk, more action? and I think that it is perfectly acceptable 2 rate your story as long as you don’t do it 2 often.
December 13th, 2007 at 11:41 pm
im agree.. i always rate my stories.. lol.. and yes , i am one of those people whpo give it 5’s but i will stop doing that…lol
December 14th, 2007 at 1:32 am
I agree with you MINERVA PARADIZO. PEOPLE STOP CRITISIZING MINERVA!!! anyway good story.
December 14th, 2007 at 3:14 am
Perhaps…
I suppose you’re right. But I still don’t like her that much…
December 14th, 2007 at 4:10 am
Very origional, and I love that someone other then me likes the idea of Minerva and Artemis togeather. Only like 2 people I know of on this site do…
December 27th, 2007 at 6:27 pm
I think you could rate you own stories…
December 29th, 2007 at 1:49 am
Me too! Rating your own stories is perfectly acceptable!
January 7th, 2008 at 1:07 am
I don’t think it’s good to rate your own stories, cuz it boosts the rating. If I did it for Artemis meets Princess Alyss Heart my rating would definitly go up. Great story, also I really don’t get why people hate A/M yet they’re fine with A/H it’s the opposite for me.
January 16th, 2008 at 3:52 am
I agree. Minerva is not a person at fault whatsoever…but oh well. I personally prefer A/M over A/H, but that’s only my opinion.
Great story.
January 18th, 2008 at 12:35 am
Most people prefer A/M over A/H.
January 19th, 2008 at 10:54 pm
*eye roll* I think people (mostly girls) Hate MiNERDa because she’s stealing Artemis away from us!!!!
January 19th, 2008 at 10:58 pm
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I reread it pretty good now. I give it a three.
January 19th, 2008 at 11:14 pm
nice poem stilll;
Okay to alll the girls out there who hate Minerva because she’s steling arty from us- Wow.
January 20th, 2008 at 3:06 pm
i think its a great songfic. Just a quick question. Is this the fic you want me to judge in the competition cos if it is then i may need to point out something. The competition was themed: Valentine’s day, and if I’m not mistaken this, although has the element of romance, doesn’t actually mention anything about valentine’s day so there may be a slight problem.
Oh and a reminder that the deadline to my competition is coming up fast. So check out the rules and don’t delay!
to 017350: I will judge this fic but it may be given a lower ranking/score than it could have been. oh and well done for entering your the only one so far!!!
and also I agree give Minerva a chance!
February 9th, 2008 at 10:59 pm
Pretty good…kinda sad though I think.I hope my friends don’t go on here and find out I read these romance poems.It would just be embarrasing for a-a man like me.OH MY GOSH!HANNAH MONTANNA JUST STARTED!!!!NOOO!!
February 13th, 2008 at 11:54 pm
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February 20th, 2008 at 8:57 pm
I’m not a a/h or a a/m person. But if I had to choose, I think I’d be a a/m person. Oh well. I like your song fic!
June 2nd, 2008 at 8:00 pm
I know this is really rather random but I’m getting very confused because I get the fact that all the author’s comments of their own stories are in the blue dotted lined boxes but I don’t understand why yours is in a solid blue lined box for all of your comments. I’m confused can someone help me out here!!!
June 2nd, 2008 at 8:35 pm
Very perceptive. The archive has a new feature where all of the author’s comments are surrounded by blue dotted lines, all of an editor’s comments are in a blue solid line (017350 is an editor), and the admins’ comments are surrounded by a green line.
June 3rd, 2008 at 2:28 am
Hmm…if Minerva moved, wouldn’t Artemis visit? He has the time and the money! He isn’t like other typical teens…if it was Minerva’s death, then the story would make sense…and I like Minerva better dead! Mwahahah *evil*
LONG LIVE A/H!
June 3rd, 2008 at 6:11 pm
Thnx MMK that has cleared a lot of confusion!In fact I didn’t know that 017350 was an editor.