A Bad Day, Or Not? CHAPTER 7 ADDED 30/8/07!!!
Written on March 5th, 2007 by Nicole_artistStory Details
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Nicole’s POV
Ah yes, Pacific Fair. Shopper’s haven, heaven, etc. If Artemis couldn’t find something here that he liked, he wouldn’t find it anywhere. Dad dropped us off at the pet store end exit, as he was going to do something else while we shopped. Which was very fortunate, considering the fact that he might notice if we went to an ATM with his card. We found the nearest one, which happened to be far away. Luckily it was secluded, as two kids going to an ATM and taking out money without an adult might arouse suspicion. As I had zero experience with ATMs, beside watching as my parents punched in a pin code and took money from a slot which sprung out notes, Artemis worked the machine. I looked on. The machine beeped, and Artemis suddenly started punching in numbers like crazy.
“Umm…” I said. “What are you doing?”
“Overriding the maximum cash withdrawal limits,” he replied tonelessly, not looking up.
“Oh,” I replied, feeling idiotic for a second. Then realisation dawned on me. “Artemis. How much did you take out of that person’s bank account?”
Still not removing his attention from pressing numbers to change the machine’s withdrawal limit, he replied with a slight gloating smile. “Ten thousand dollars.”
My jaw dropped without me realising, but I closed it again before Artemis could see it. I took a deep breath. “That,” I gasped. “Is a lot.”
“To you.” Artemis retorted.
I realised that I was being somewhat insulted, but decided to drop it.
Suddenly the ATM beeped again, but a green light flashed from somewhere.
“Now it is going to work,” Artemis smirked.
The ATM’s money slot suddenly filled with an inch thick of $100 bills. Realising that the machine would explode (or something similar) if I didn’t take them out ready for the next batch, I grabbed the notes. I think I had about $3 000 in my hand, more than I had ever even seen, besides on television. In the ATM appeared another cluster of notes, which Artemis snatched up. Another bundle appeared, and I scooped that up. The machine whirred a bit, sounding almost as if it was complaining, then settled down.
“Well,” Artemis said, as if we had just watched a mildly interesting television show, and not had just tricked an ATM into giving us $10 000 stolen from some wealthy businessman. “What store do you suggest we depart to first?”
Now this was the part I was looking forward to. “We go to City Beach first, where all the cool surf brands are.” I announced, thinking that with all that money I could probably get myself some things too.
“Cool?” Artemis asked warily.
“Ehm…” I mumbled. “The brands that everyone wears.”
Artemis gave me a look that seemed to say I know that you also want to get yourself some items too, I know what you’re thinking, or something like that. We headed off for the store.
A few minutes later we arrived at the very beachy-looking store. I sighed and gazed up adoringly. Artemis just looked down his nose at it in distaste.
“What is this dump? It appears as if someone bought a two floor shack and filled it with ghastly items of what appears, if you study them closely, to be clothing.” Artemis, of course.
I decided not to be offended. Probably what he was trying to say was that this place was not Armani, or wherever it is he usually buys his clothes.
“Well, you want to blend in, don’t you?” I asked. “And judging by the amount of stares you’ve received, you sure aren’t in that designer suit.”
Artemis studied his suit carefully, as if he could make it normal just by analysing it. Time was marching on, so I grabbed Artemis’s bony shoulder and steered him in.
Artemis’s POV
The instant we entered this “City Beach” our senses were assaulted. Our ears were confronted by vociferous teenage music, if you can even call it that. Rack after rack of colourful clothes screamed out slogans, advertisements and brand names. The air itself seemed to have become thicker, and a peculiar smell hung about, not one that I could identify. Not unpleasant, but not exactly pleasing either. Perhaps I simply had an acute sense of smell.
“Ooooh! Sale!” squealed Nicole, who had apparently spotted a rack of discounted garments. Perhaps that would distract her enough to forget about the fact we were in this shack for me.
“Okay Artemis,” she said, clutching a purple dress. “Where to first?”
Obviously I was not in luck.
“Outside?” I suggested.
“Ha ha. And as a bonus, just because it’s Thursday, ha,” Nicole replied. “Fine then, I’ll choose. We’re going to the staple of a normal teen’s wardrobe; jeans.”
I sighed, then reluctantly followed her as she threaded her way through the racks and up the escalator. I had to remove myself from this place as soon as possible, and a plan was forming in my brilliant mind…
“What size are you?” Nicole asked, interrupting my train of thought and shattering my near-meditative state. I hadn’t noticed that we had arrived in what seemed to be a shrine of denim.
“How would I know? Take into account the fact my suits are tailor-made, and I’ve never set foot in a store like this before,” I replied irritably.
“Fine, since you’re almost like a walking skeleton-” Nicole retorted.
I shot her a withering look. I was not nearly that emaciated!
“-I say you should try on the smallest size, and use a belt.”
She browsed quickly through the racks, occasionally holding an article of clothing at arms length to evaluate it, then either putting it back or hooking it over her arm. After a few minutes she had five pairs of jeans for me to try on. Little did she know that something quite chaotic was going to happen in the changing room…
Nicole’s POV
I led Artemis over to where the belts were, so his jeans wouldn’t fall off him or end up halfway down his backside like others guys wore their jeans. Artemis selected three of what I think he thought were the most sophisticated. We then headed off to the changing room, passing near the counter. I could have sworn I saw Artemis slide something into his pocket, but it must have been an illusion. Why would Artemis need to steal something when he could buy it with the exorbitant amount of cash we had?
I waited patiently for Artemis to try the clothes on a few metres outside the door of the changing room stall. After browsing the nearby racks and finding nothing of interest, I instead turned to stare at the door of the changing room. That was when I noticed the wispy smoke wafting out of the gap between the door and ceiling of Artemis’s stall. Fortunately I wasn’t as slow as some of my classmates, and quickly evaluated what I already knew.
Artemis doesn’t like this place. Artemis wants out. Artemis brushed past the counter.
I whirled around to look at the counter.
Oh crap, I thought. There are cigarette lighters on that counter.
I snatched up a nearby water bottle and hoped there wasn’t a camera watching me, then unscrewed the cap and unceremoniously flung the water into the changing room stall. The smoke almost immediately ceased, and not a moment too soon. It had been about to reach the smoke alarm, and the whole store would have been doused with water from the overhead sprinklers.
About a second later Artemis opened the stall door, wet hair plastered to his face and clutching a lighter and the burned remains of a wallet at his side. Well, at least he hadn’t burnt the jeans.
“Well that was smart Artemis,” I said sarcastically. “What next? Are you going to make the escalators explode?”
He replied via throwing the wallet and lighter into the clothes bin where unwanted clothes are dumped, then storming off to the shoes section. I quickly darted into the changing room stall and grabbed the jeans and belts, then caught up with Artemis.
“We should only get a few shoes here, as there are better shoe stores elsewhere,” I said, as if nothing had happened.
Glare from Artemis.
“I’d say you’re this size,” I went on, picking up a shoe that looked about the right size. “Now, if you don’t want to suffer the indignity of me ripping off your loafer and shoving on this shoe, I suggest you put it on yourself.”
Surprising me by actually complying, he did, albeit grudgingly.
“Well, does it fit?” I asked. “You walk around to see.”
“I know how to see if a shoe fits,” Artemis said acidly, getting up and walking around. This would have been more dignified if he had completed a circuit of the shoe section, and not fallen over because the shoe was a size too big.
I suppressed a snort of laughter, and watched as Artemis clambered up, attempting to not look embarrassed.
“I believe I need a smaller size,” Artemis said with all the dignity he could muster considering the circumstances.
I got him the shoe.
An hour, four pairs of shoes, eight shirts, a pair of board shorts, a wallet, two hats, five pairs of socks and a few items for yours truly later we were at the counter and the cashier, Zac, (he had a nametag on) was scanning our items.
“That comes to a total of $855.55,” he said, obviously wondering how some kids were going to be able to afford that amount.
I fished into my bag and found my wallet, stuffed with the notes from the ATM. Now that doesn’t look too suspicious now, does it? I asked myself sarcastically. I took out a wad of money and handed to the cashier, who took it with a slightly incredulous look on his face, putting it into the till and handing me the change.
“I hope that now we will be able to remove ourselves from this atrocious place you call a shop,” Artemis sulked.
“Yes, and soon we’re going to be a slightly more appealing store Artemis,” I smiled.
The cashier Zac’s head whipped up. “Artemis?” he squeaked. “Artemis Fo-”
“This is the part where we run,” I muttered, grabbing the bulging bags of clothes, shoes and other stuff we had bought.
And before Artemis could complain, I grabbed his sleeve and ran for the exit so he had no choice but to follow.
“Wait!” Zac yelled. “I have so much to ask you! Like who’s that person you’re with? And why are you here? And-”
He was cut off by the manager, who had clamped a hand over his mouth because he was alarming the customers.
When we were a reasonable distance away from City Beach, Artemis and I both stopped running (or jogging, since I couldn’t sprint for any longer than ten seconds unless I was on a sugar high) and collapsed on a nearby bench.
“Well that proves it,” I gasped, still managing to find some humour in the situation. “I’m not much better at running than you. How sad.”
Artemis glared and didn’t say anything, although that might have been because he was too puffed to speak.
After buying a cold fruit crush from Boost Juice (Artemis had to examine the ingredients first, to make sure it wasn’t “junk” we ambled off to where all the designer brands were, Myer.
I really hope that was worth the wait! Constructive criticism welcome, as are compliments. 
Read, rate and review! 
And also tell me if you see any mistakes!
March 5th, 2007 at 2:52 pm
I thought it was great! I hope you got an ‘A+’ on your assignment. You should definitely write more…
Oh, and I wasn’t sure where to put this, because it doesn’t seem to fit anywhere. I put it in ‘other’, if you think it should go somewhere else just say so.
March 5th, 2007 at 6:36 pm
WOW!!! Even i could’nt write that well, adn i’m da best in my class!! I luv ur story!!!!
March 5th, 2007 at 10:18 pm
Thanks!
MMK, I haven’t got my assignment back yet. Lazy teacher… XD
It should be in Other for now, but it may lean towards another category when I update.
I’m thinking about involving two geeks from my classes in the next chapter.
Should someone else appear? From the AF world that is…
March 6th, 2007 at 1:01 am
I loved it, adorable!
I wanna be in it! (just kidding)
Adding Holly would be cool though, if you really want to know who would be cool in it. Or Mulch.
March 6th, 2007 at 1:17 am
I think just Artemis is good, for now at least… after all, he’s the one you touched in the dream, right?
Anyway, I think you should just take him around school with you. He can make sarcastic comments, and do your homework. Or something. And he’ll have to disguise himself from everybody who’s read the books.
You should write Opal in as a fangirl.
March 6th, 2007 at 9:56 am
Perhaps… XD
Spoiler! (Kinda…)
I was going to make him run somewhere to get away from the nerds (cause one of them reads Artemis Fowl) and then tell him how his life is a fiction book. It’s the end of the school day so I was going to have to bring him home or somewhere. 0.o
Then somehow I could make Mulch appear. I like him, he’s funny! Maybe Artemis could work out how he got here and work out how to get others here. Coolness! I already have a plan… but it must wait, as I have homework and a test tomorrow.
Spoiler Over.
BlackOpal, do you want to have a cameo appearance as a fangirl? Or something else? Waitress? I’m thinking (Spoiler!) that I can take Artemis to a restaurant/club that my dad takes me to. And the place called KidSpace in there. That would be VERY funny… XD (Un-Spoiler)
Kay, must study for math test. Bbfn!
March 6th, 2007 at 3:46 pm
I think all of that sounds brilliant, I can’t wait!
Good luck on your test
March 11th, 2007 at 12:24 am
I liked it and i dont know if this was a real dream but if it was it whould be the BEST DREAM EVER!!!
March 12th, 2007 at 8:51 am
Where have my other chapters gone? Ahhh!!!!!
March 28th, 2007 at 12:53 am
ah my gosh I can’t wait to read more on it. It’s exciting and funny. That is a great dream.
March 28th, 2007 at 9:51 am
I did continue, but the chapters are missing. Rrgh, MM!
April 14th, 2007 at 8:10 pm
suweat nicople please write more!!! so ur 12 then ha u told me ur age indirectly so know I know
April 17th, 2007 at 11:57 pm
KEEP WRITING!!!!!! I THINK THIS IS AN AWESOME STORY, I ALSO THINK THAT MINERVA AND HOLLY APPEARING WOULD BE AWESOME!!
HOLLY COULD HAVE BEEN DRAGGED OUT OF THE DREAM BY THEIR SWAPPED EYES, YA’ KNOW, AS FOR MINERVA…………SHE COULD HAVE BEEN SUCKED OUT OF THE DREAM REALM BY A RIFT THAT WAS CREATED WHEN YOU DRAGGED ARTEMIS WITH YOU INTO REALITY.
April 18th, 2007 at 9:27 am
Katya, someone FINALLY noticed. *rollseyes* But I’m almost 13.
I’ll go find the missing chapters Foaly. I don’t think Minerva or Holly are going to appear for a while yet, but I might switch to their point of view (or Butler’s).
April 18th, 2007 at 1:58 pm
OKAY, BUT YOU WILL INCLUDE MINERVA, RIGHT?, RIGHT?, RIGHT??????????????????????????????????
April 18th, 2007 at 10:49 pm
I just read ur new chapters I is suweat so these are the chapters u kept yelling at mm about right ? foaly this artemis is BEFOR minerva time soo hopefuly nothing good will happen to her or she won,t even be meantioned ! but its realy good so write more!!!!!!k?
April 19th, 2007 at 12:40 am
I’m glad the chapters are back up
Anyway, the story is still very good, but I already complimented it to death, so here’s some constructive criticism-
Artemis is OOC in Chapter 3. I know you made a little note about it, but the part that seemed most unlike him to me wasn’t where you put the note, it was the discussion about your art. I mean, it’s good and all, but that conversation wasn’t like Artemis and didn’t help the story any.
April 20th, 2007 at 9:46 am
I kind of realise that, but I wanted to indulge my ego… XD Should I change it? Or delete it completely? (I would be willing… *gasp*)
Sorry, Minerva won’t appear unless I keep writinf for a loooong, loooong time. We’re just after book 1. Well, kinda.
I shall try to update Chapter 4. And trust me, Artemis will be very in-character now.
I AM Artemis… 0.o
April 23rd, 2007 at 9:47 pm
This is soooooooo cute,keep writing!!!!
April 24th, 2007 at 3:00 am
PUHLEAZE WRITE MORE!!!!!!!!!!
THIS IS THE PERFECT STORY, I, THE KING OF FINDING FLAWS IN EVERY THING IN THE WORLD, COULDN’T FIND A SINGLE FLAW IN THIS(EXCEPT THAT MINERVA AND I ARE NOT INCLUDED) STORY, PLEASE UPDATE A.S.A.P.!
P.S. DON’T FORGET MY IDEAS (I COULD HAVE WRITEN A STORY WITH SIMILAR STUFF, BUT I CAN’T STRECH MY THOUGHTS AS MUCH AS I WANT) THEY ARE PERFECT FOR ADDING A TOUCH OF ACTION TO STORIES WITH RIPS IN THE FABRIC OF ALL REALITY!!!!
April 24th, 2007 at 4:49 pm
*gasp* sorry dont mind me just got home.Me thinks it good.
April 25th, 2007 at 10:12 am
Thankyou for reviews! I love reviews! I only update when I get reviews! ^_^
Now I will go twiddle/update.
May 3rd, 2007 at 2:56 am
nicole its awsom so hurry up cause I wan,t to read the rest k?!!!!!!!! its a matter of life or death!!!!(sounds more dramatic dosen’t it?) hey hoow come I don’t have smilies(place mad smilie here) thats not faire(place another mad smilie )
May 4th, 2007 at 11:02 am
You mean this one? :-X
Hehe, I’ll only tell you how to get smilies if you promise to keep reviewing…
May 4th, 2007 at 11:03 am
Oops, I didn’t get the mad smilie. Ehm, pretend it isn’t there…
May 7th, 2007 at 1:29 am
It was so good please, please, please,update soon!!!!!!
May 13th, 2007 at 9:58 pm
‘There was only one remedy for a day as horrible as this: a book. The ability to detach yourself from the real world is one that you should use. But not just any book would suffice; it had to be an Artemis Fowl book, my favourite series on the entire planet, and below it as well.’
I feel exactly the same way, every time that i have a horrible day, I read one of the Artemis Fowl books and one hour later, I come out of my book smiling, i also use them to help with anger management.
May 14th, 2007 at 10:35 pm
Please update very soon!!!!!!!!
May 16th, 2007 at 2:16 pm
cant wait to hear the rest
May 20th, 2007 at 6:27 am
Finally, some more reviews!
Okay, I’ll start. 
May 23rd, 2007 at 11:18 am
KOOLIEZ GR8 STORY
KEEP WRITING!!!!!!!!!!!!
May 23rd, 2007 at 11:05 pm
You must write more!!!!!!!!! *using mesmer to make Nicole write more* BWAHAHAHAHAHA………… (realizes that he is still writing).
May 25th, 2007 at 5:51 pm
your weird(giggles madly)
May 25th, 2007 at 8:55 pm
Who, me?
May 26th, 2007 at 4:44 pm
This story is so good please write more!!!!
May 30th, 2007 at 11:29 am
Eureka!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
I’ve found the pun!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Dontré P. Renure!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Entrepreneur!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Do I get a cameo appearance?
If I do my name is Zac K KOOL!!!!!!!!!!
May 30th, 2007 at 11:30 am
I’m a GENIUSSSSS!!!!!!
May 30th, 2007 at 12:32 pm
Lol, someone FINALLY got it.
You can have a cameo appearance. Would you like to be a cashier at one of the stores? We can only have Zac though, because it will be on the employee badge.
May 31st, 2007 at 7:17 am
Yes I can be a cashier
June 1st, 2007 at 9:08 am
When are you going to write the chapter that has me in it?
June 1st, 2007 at 9:34 am
Jeez, I have homework. It’s been what, one day? Patience, my friend, is a virtue.
June 1st, 2007 at 9:37 am
comme ci comme ca
mais l’hâte calme j’augmente ne soigne pas de cette vertu
Ive been learning french in school
it says:
OK
but still hurry up i don’t care about that virtue
June 1st, 2007 at 9:59 pm
VIRTUE RULEZ!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
You might want to get a beta, that’s all that I can think of, and, I think what Foaly meant was that there was a tear in the fabric of space and time in the real and DREAM worlds, and he has dreams about what would happen after the fifth book after falling asleep while reading, due to sleep deprivation, of course, that’s how good it is.
June 2nd, 2007 at 8:38 am
Huh? I already have how it’s possible planned, and it involves alternate universes. That’s all I’m saying.
Because of all the nagging, I will start the next chappie. So be happy.
Why would I need a beta? I practically AM a beta.
June 4th, 2007 at 8:01 am
Hello just thought i’d say hello so HELLO PPLZ!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
And Gr8 job wif da story it’s really Kool
I LURVE it!!!!!!!!!
Do yas get da picta that i LURVE IT!
June 12th, 2007 at 1:12 am
Um, the reason I said that was becuase I couldn’t think of any constructive criticism, but, mabey, you could, um……………….OH! Mabey you could make Artemis act like more of a smart-aleky-braniac with a know-it-all-attitude.
June 12th, 2007 at 10:37 am
Hehe, don’t worry, I will… (I’m feeling sorry for the me in my story…
)
Sorry it’s taking so long, I’ve got exams, and homework, and art to finish. *sigh* Real life, if only it wouldn’t interfere.
June 14th, 2007 at 10:08 pm
Don’t worry! Take your time, the same thing happens to me.
June 15th, 2007 at 12:15 am
That was excellent, and did ur lazy teacher give u ur grade yet
June 15th, 2007 at 3:36 pm
I LOVE IT!!!!!! KEEP WRITING!!! IT’S AWSOME. PLEASE INCLUDE HOLLY SOON.SHE COULD BE WORRING ABOUT HOW MUCH EVERYONE KNOWS ABOUT FAIRYS!!!
June 16th, 2007 at 3:08 am
great me loves but continu or else I vill have to strangle u
is that the mad smilie?
June 16th, 2007 at 3:08 am
*cheques smilie* yes it is go me
June 16th, 2007 at 5:43 am
HURRY UP! PLZ! IM BEGGING YOU! PLZ!
June 17th, 2007 at 10:11 am
It’s soon, it’s soon! And trust me, it’s REALLY long. 0.o
June 17th, 2007 at 8:49 pm
Great story, Could you please hurry up and type more. I can’t wait. Can you PLEASE include Holly. PLEASE, PLEASE, PLEASE PLEASE or I won’t rewiew again for a long time
June 19th, 2007 at 9:03 am
:| Well that’s not good, but I still can’t include her. Yet. She’s not in the universe.
June 19th, 2007 at 9:51 am
>:(
:O
June 19th, 2007 at 10:19 am
: | New chapter is up! Celebrate!
June 20th, 2007 at 12:41 am
It’s really good. And funny. And it makes me feel bad for theyou in the sory, because Artemis is going to maul you. Which is part of why it’s good. Not because I want you mauled, but because Artemis’s indignation is amusing.
June 24th, 2007 at 8:49 am
Ah well, that’s good. I think. I was trying to be funny.
)
And where/when is he going to maul me? And what do you mean by maul? (How sad, I’m the author and I don’t even get what you’re talking about in my story
June 25th, 2007 at 12:49 am
I wasn’t really clear- I wrote that when I was really doing something else. Anyway, I meant that… well… I don’t know, Artemis seemed not to be very happy with you. I don’t really think that he was about to hurt you, but people on the other end of his plans ususally end up even unhappier than he is.
That doesn’t seem any clearer. I hope you understood it…
June 25th, 2007 at 8:46 am
Well, that made a bit more sense I guess…
Now, if you’re eating something right now, stop eating it. If you’re precariously balancing something breakable, put it down. For here is a sneak preview of the Artemis who shall star in a sim-story of this (AKA this story with pretty sim pictures to look at) fanfiction along with me and any other characters/people who worm their way into my fanfic. Okay, enough blabbering. Heeeeeeeeeeere’s Artemis!
[IMG]http://i150.photobucket.com/albums/s97/Nicole_artist/Snapshot-1.jpg[/IMG]
Or if that doesn’t work, go to…
http://i150.photobucket.com/albums/s97/Nicole_artist/Snapshot-1.jpg
:-D
June 25th, 2007 at 9:12 pm
OH MY GOD!!! THis is the best story that You’ve done ever. I could really use your help on my story. Lot’s of Luck and Love from
Holly
PS You can call me Holls
June 29th, 2007 at 2:10 am
just vone sing; I vant more zu must rite more!!! so hurry up and get to vork!!!!
jk hey its great really
hehe its great and u have about a few thousand errors in there (ya like u trust my editing skills
July 2nd, 2007 at 1:59 am
;-) And it’s not like I’m beta-ing your story either… *cough*stone…gods…Shivin…*cough*
July 7th, 2007 at 9:18 am
omg this story rox
i can’t wait for the next chapter.
ur a fab writer
:-)
July 20th, 2007 at 1:19 am
noww nicole now u hurry up and write us a nother chapter now theres a good girl yes very good *says as if I were an old grannie*
August 10th, 2007 at 12:44 am
Please update soon it is driving me crazy trying to think of what will happen next! This story is so good!
August 11th, 2007 at 10:18 pm
OMFG THAT WAS AWESOME!! ONE OF THE BEST FANFICS EVR!!!!!!!
August 30th, 2007 at 8:16 pm
u shall be forgivien for the “shortness” and “unextingness” of this chapter if u hurry up to write the next one
September 2nd, 2007 at 7:20 pm
OMG cant wait til its updated and done its soo awesome!!!:)
September 3rd, 2007 at 5:40 pm
*stares at the Sim picture of Artemis*
…
His hair is messed up.
September 4th, 2007 at 11:01 am
I blame the dimensional travel.
September 13th, 2007 at 10:01 pm
it made me smile.
September 15th, 2007 at 1:29 am
OMG nicloe your soo funny please write more!!!!please!!!
September 23rd, 2007 at 4:07 am
This is so good but how will Artems get back she dreams agin and pulls artemis with her kinda lame ending right? oh well your funeral i just want to finish the story!
September 24th, 2007 at 11:50 pm
Sorry about the last message i m just so very annoyed that this has been going on for about a year! You need to finish I shall give you 4 stars now but this should be placed in alternate unervese
October 8th, 2007 at 3:51 am
this isn’t good one star
October 8th, 2007 at 3:58 am
Hey, the least you could do is tell Nicole why you didn’t like it. How else is she supposed to improve?
I wonder what happened to Nicole, though. I know she went on vacation a while ago, but wouldn’t she be back by now? I don’t know. Anyway, I hope she comes back soon- among other things, I’d love to see this story updated.
October 23rd, 2007 at 8:24 pm
Yeah, I havn’t talked to her in ages or had any reviews…
October 30th, 2007 at 1:16 am
sorry I didn’t read the whole thing. 4 stars! once again sorry I hope my one star hasn’t affected your ratings…
November 3rd, 2007 at 11:25 pm
it hasn’t because this is still in the top tens! WOW NICOLE I LOVED UIT ! TOTALLY ABSORBED ME! WOW , THIS IS AWESOMNE!!!!!!!
November 6th, 2007 at 8:36 am
NICOLE WHERE ARE YOU!!!!
MISSING
Nicole_artist
REWARD IF FOUND: $0
hee hee
November 6th, 2007 at 11:01 pm
Missing:
Brothers brain
reward:
you keep it
if you can acctually find it:
GOOD JOB!
if u do find it:
u r a liar ( it doesn’t exist)
November 11th, 2007 at 6:32 pm
lol ,
thats the same with my brother …..
December 2nd, 2007 at 8:52 am
OMG! I am so sorry that I haven’t been here to update, for pretty much ever. I have been weighed down with school so much. Think 12 pm bedtime every night, if I’m lucky. It was worth it though. I got dux of my year. But now that it is nearly Christmas holidays I will have time to finish everything, and hopefully no one hates me. You can hate my story though. I just read it and realised how crap it is. I’ve gotten better in six months. I hope. XD
Does anyone reeeeeaaaaaaallly want me to continue, or would you all rather I start a better, new story, involving everyone in the AF world and maybe me? Because this story isn’t going anywhere real fast, and I could do much better now. So, what do you think?
December 2nd, 2007 at 9:59 am
i reallly badly dadly madly want u to contiune plzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz
December 3rd, 2007 at 12:38 am
I’m so glad you’re back, Nicole!
If you really feel this story isn’t going anywhere, then by all means, start a new one. You shouldn’t keep writing something you don’t enjoy. I do like this one a lot though, so it’s really up to you.
Oh, and somebody else commented and told you to continue, but I deleted it accidentally.
December 3rd, 2007 at 1:09 am
That would be me.
December 5th, 2007 at 5:26 am
finaly u update
I say if u want start a new story but pleeeeeeeeeze continu this one
December 5th, 2007 at 1:50 pm
HI!!! Yes I would like you to continnue , but then again this is all up to you…….. i do wish u would though.
May 11th, 2008 at 12:07 am
Please continue.I really want to know what happens next.Please please please.
June 30th, 2008 at 8:54 pm
Well, I think this story is awesome and really really really want you to continue, but it’s up to you: if you want, you can continue and make us all happy or if you don’t want, you can start a new one.
I found one flaw: Artemis was a little OOC in some parts but it doesn’t affect the story so go on! Still, it’s your decision.
August 4th, 2008 at 8:16 am
Woah!!!
Hey, I love it!
Maybe M and H could appear cause they were worried about Artemis. H could be there because of the eyes… hang on, that didn’t happen yet! So then maybe they could appear because they foud the dimension rift that was created when you pulled Artemis away. Butler was unsure of the thing, so he called them both. Then they accidentally get sucked in or something and appear… somewhere. So now you gotta go and find the dimension rift so they can all go back. *cry, sob* Cause you don’t know where the rift is in this world, but it it somwhere in Australia, your city. Something like.
I absolutely loved it, or what you’ve written so far. Just one thing. Maybe you should try and add more paragraghs, shorter too. I’m getting a headache reading the words.
Waiting, waiting, and waiting,
Helen
September 17th, 2008 at 3:46 pm
THIS IS FANTAZICAL!!
ONE OF THE BEST!!
PPLLLLEEEAAAASEEEEEEE WRITE MORE ASAP!!!
DON’T DELETE IT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
October 26th, 2008 at 3:00 pm
I think nicloe_artist has officially disappeared. She… she… DIDN’T UPDATE FOR A H*** OF A LONG TIME!!!
I am majorly disappointed in you.
October 27th, 2008 at 10:20 pm
Helen, I just want to inform you that there is a city in Michigan whose name is ‘Hell’ so, yeah, in the context of that, you could safely use the word ‘Hell’.
Nicole, that first chapter was soooooooooo me, I was very depressed and bored after I had read The Time Paradox. I dunno if you’re till around; I’m new, but if you are,well I can understand you not wanting to finish something you don’t want to do. If that’s the case: please tell us how it would end, as in just a summary. Perhaps we can hire a ghost writer finish it, hmm?
Again, the H word is also a city in MI.
PLEASE.