Storms
Written on March 1st, 2008 by BlackOpalStory Details
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I had to edit out some of the language. Though, it doesn’t quite work without it.
This one is kind of choppy, but I thought that it would be better to get crit on it then just let it rot.
This is about Artemis Fowl Senior. Can anybody tell me why? Well… yeah, this one is easy.
So just tell me what I did wrong. 
This one is only 100 words.
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Tsunami
Run.
Oh God, run.
Flip, it’s coming.
You created the earthquake.
And now you have to deal with it.
You thought that you were safe. You thought that you were far enough away.
You have never been more wrong in your life.
It’s coming, it’s crushing.
Breath!
Air, not water you moron.
Push back, kick!
Do something. Anything.
Gods, fight it.
You should have run faster, harder.
Shoot. If there was only anybody left.
You sank all of their boats.
Look what you did. Look at all you’ve accomplished.
I hope that you’re proud.
You deserve everything that you’ve got.
Some other stories by BlackOpal:
- Lost (Five Times Challenge)
- A Cracked Mirror
- Fairy Tales
- The Elephant
- Spectator Sport (Warning: TTP Spoilers!)
March 1st, 2008 at 9:08 pm
FCD* I love the symbolism! I love authors that have the ability to make symbolism like that, it’s awesome!
March 1st, 2008 at 10:11 pm
It’s very interesting… It’s a little early to for me to say if I like it or not. But it’s good, I’ll say that. Well, write some more!
March 2nd, 2008 at 1:22 am
I like it! can’t say that I would rate it five but If you added some more I think it could have a lot of potential.
March 2nd, 2008 at 1:32 am
I don’t get it… also, Holly seems very dark(and therefore OOC)…is this about her paranoia with the mud men finding them?
March 2nd, 2008 at 2:16 am
no I think it’s about how she can’t get above ground and breath fresh air and how everyone underground thinks there all that and a bag of potato chips and If they could see really how tiny they were it would lower there egos.
March 2nd, 2008 at 2:24 am
It’s about Holly’s view on society.
Mudmen society is always changing (or being destroyed by “storms”), they try too hard for stability.
While her society actually succeeds in achieving stability. Which means that it can never change.
Which means that it can never join with Artemis’ (which was really implied, and would take a lot of reading between the lines).
So it won’t let her out at all.
If anybody could understand that props.
Drabbles are meant to be cryptic, or somewhat that way.
It is the darker side of Holly, the part that resents the wrongs that the fairy race has done her. It’s digging a bit deep into her character.
March 2nd, 2008 at 2:27 am
um, okay then, I feel like I have a peanut sized brain now.
March 3rd, 2008 at 1:24 am
Okay, I got them all, The second one was when artemis Fowl the first was drowning when they went to save him. I like them all, its very … I dont know the word… I guess you could say sopisticated.. I guess, and oh yeah, whats drabble?
March 3rd, 2008 at 1:25 am
A drabble is a 100 word piece, basically a drabble of thought. You just let the thought… drabble out. XD
The first one is a 200-word-drabble, basically a doubledrabble.
Thanks for the reviews.
And Jelly- you don’t have a peanut sized brain, you just don’t think like I do. It’s probably a good think.
August 2nd, 2008 at 9:51 pm
ok i get them…now about the snacks can i have your truffels?
when you put me and holly in the troll area i stole some THEY WERE GOOD! im sorry for offending them and want more GIVE ME YOUR TRUFFELS!!!!
sorry had to let some energy out really like them, you have serios talen good job
October 15th, 2008 at 6:56 pm
A bit late, but I was searching for your stories, so I read this. I specially liked the last drabble, but the others were really good too. You know by now how I think about your work, I guess