Oh, Sorry. Is that the wrong question?
Written on July 10th, 2008 by computerzandbks4everStory Details
Loading ...In the jet on the way to Minerva’s house, Artemis and Minerva were coming up with ideas to get Holly and Trouble married.
“That really got poor Trouble riled, didn’t it?”
Minerva nodded in agreement. “Maybe we won’t have to do anymore plotting. I think that will get Trouble to propose.”
***
Trouble had indeed taken Artemis’s comment to heart. He was still thinking it over the next day.
Trouble was leaving the Police Plaza for the day. He was going to the jewlers’ first before he went home. He ran the whole way there.
Oh, I hope she likes it. He stopped short. But what if she says no and doesn’t love me? Trouble resumed his stride. But she has to say yes! His feelings were in turmoil. He wanted to propose, yet he was afraid Holly would hate him for it.
After laboring over the selection of jewelry, Trouble finally chose a thin gold ring with one large diamond in the center and two smaller ones on either side.
***
Holly was laying awake in bed. She was thinking over the day’s events. Do I love him? I wonder if he really loves me. Maybe that’s why he re-directed the conversation. But it could be the opposite. Maybe…
She turned over, but didn’t fall asleep.
***
July 10th, 2008 at 7:40 pm
its not that bad, but i think it needs to be longer.
July 10th, 2008 at 7:46 pm
well its supposed to be short, because there’s not much else to tell
July 10th, 2008 at 7:48 pm
I concur. It’s not great but it’s not bad either.
July 10th, 2008 at 8:00 pm
funny, thats what i think 2
July 10th, 2008 at 8:15 pm
Not to bad. Maybe longer though.
July 10th, 2008 at 8:18 pm
you could have artemis walk in on holly and trouble “WINK WINK”
July 10th, 2008 at 9:36 pm
its supposed to be short!
on 2nd thought…
July 12th, 2008 at 7:04 pm
I like the idea, but i agree that it was too short. It was pretty much: “Marry holly trouble!” “ok, fine. ta-da!” “yay!”. You say there’s no more to tell, but there is. What exactly was Trouble thinking about after Artemis said that? What was Holly thinking? You can always add more depth, you just have to think from different angles of the story.
–ambi
July 14th, 2008 at 9:28 am
It would be GREAT as a full length fanfic so you could make it a bit longer
July 14th, 2008 at 10:12 pm
Awwww, what a cute story
July 14th, 2008 at 10:13 pm
Holly & Trouble always belonged together, IMO.
July 15th, 2008 at 4:00 am
you would be my absolute hero if you wrote a story about arty and minnie’s first fight/make up. A/M 4 evah!!
July 19th, 2008 at 10:55 pm
ok, i’ll make it longer,
and for FANCYTHAT, i’ll make a fight/make-up
i will update soon, but i’m going to be away from computers 4 a week, so it will take a while
July 26th, 2008 at 10:24 am
I love the new chapters but it’s a bit soppy… I LOVE IT!
August 4th, 2008 at 1:40 am
(fancythat) i’ve decided to make a different story about artemis/minerva’s first falling out/make up
(english-minerva)thanks!
August 11th, 2008 at 9:00 am
I hate you! Holly married Trouble! Waahh! You WILL write one about Artemis/Minerva’s first falling out, NOW!!! AND… Artemis will marry Holly! YAY!!!
October 14th, 2008 at 3:58 am
Holly and Trouble belong together! *puts hands on hips and mock glares at A/H shippers* no offense intended, but I am very strongly in favor of a Holly/Trouble relationship.
November 5th, 2008 at 1:30 am
You’re my kinda girl JHF! (or boy…?)
I don’t know what to write next, so I’m offering a challenge to anyone who wants to to enter a chapter can…
Or you can give me ideas.
November 14th, 2008 at 2:29 am
Thanks! And, yes, I am a girl.
Why don’t you write about Holly and Trouble going on a honeymoon, and things falling apart in Haven during their absense? But first write about their wedding. If you need more specific ideas about their wedding, just ask. And how about you write it as if Root never died? I think it would make the story even better than it already is, and that’s saying something! This is one of my favorite stories on this site! And how about you write a story that is the same basic plot, but is Julius/Vinyàya instead?
Keep up the WONDERFUL writing!
January 4th, 2009 at 9:17 pm
(Julissa Holly Fowl) Thanks for the WONDERFUL feedback! I will definitly (spelling?)take your suggestions into consideration, especially the honeymoon idea. I’m thinking of making an HT wedding fic. I was SO disappointed when Root died. I think I’ll keep writing as if he never died. Thank you so much! I’ve never had a compliment that nice.
I’ve never really tried the JV ship. That would be really interesting to try. Keep Writin’!
January 4th, 2009 at 11:01 pm
I agree with what Helen said on August 11th
but its a pretty good story
January 4th, 2009 at 11:11 pm
I dont want Holly or Artemis to really get married… I kinda like the Artmeis has crush on Holly and Holly has crush on Artemis idea.. then theres the whole two diff species…
NOW TO THE STORY REVEIW
I like it (for a trub and holly ship), I did a story with Holly and Trubs getting married and it was shorter then this but turned out great! This could be like, the b4 and mine is like the after.