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Nevar

Summary: Platinum leaped over the 10-foot barrier with ease, and continued into the wind tunnel. She jumped into the air, and spread […]

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Platinum leaped over the 10-foot barrier with ease, and continued into the wind tunnel. She jumped into the air, and spread her wings; her tail flashed open when the first draft of artificial wind hit her. She didn’t toy around and flew straight into the open air. Real air.

Platinum was alone, probably because the rest of her friends were out collecting files. The new arrivals in Nevar were anxious, and the sooner their papers were collected the better. She glanced around, a quick scan of the horizon, when she saw one of them. Her pride was assembleing. Platinum landed silently to wait for the rest of the bird/big cat/human hybrids to arrive.

“I got the human’s, but wasn’t Perigine getting the elf’s?” Platinum turned arround to find Ebony, the smallest- and quietest- of the pride. Actually, Ebony was a girl. Probably the strangest one on the planet.

“Yeah, Perigine’s got the elf’s,” Platinum replied. Hawkspurr landed behind her, followed quickly by Perigine. Her pride was assembled.

“Now let’s hunt ’em down. Perigine, you take the west forest. Ebony, you search the mountains. Hawkspurr, search the coast. I’ll nab the Hircruss.” One by one, her pride lifted into the air, the light of the chase in their eyes.

***

Artemis awoke to a sharp pain in the back of his neck. It was the first thing he noticed when he regained conciousness. The second was that he was somewhere unfamilliar. It was about then that he decided to think about his situation before opening his eyes. I am in a hospital, he thought. That’s why there’s a needle in my leg.

Convincing himself that this was his situation, Artemis opened his eyes. I must be worse than I thought; I can’t remember why I’m here and I’m having trouble picking up reality. What Atremis’s brain thought it was seeing was a forest. Artemis was lying on the ‘ground’ in the middle of a ‘clearing’, and the needle in his leg was a large insect. His brain also made up a story about being eaten by a monster. Artemis decided that he was really sick.

Out of instinct, he swated at the insect.

To his surprise, it flew away, leaving a large red welt behind. The needle feeling  in his leg was gone.

Something was seriously wrong.

***

Holly awoke to find herself in a forest. And that’s not something you can say every day.

Panic raced through her body, and her instincts told her to get up, which she did. But it was too fast and her already blurry vision swam and a waiting grenade went off in her head. In spite of her pain, and the fact that she couldn’t see anything, she looked around.

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  1. *singing* if you are clever, you can figure out the the secret of the title… 😉

  2. You have spelling mistakes, and grammar mistakes. Proofread, and get a beta. There’s a list to the left of this page.

    Anyway, good story. I would have enjoyed it a lot more if it had proper spelling and such, but… No, I didn’t manage to guess that name. What name? Tell me!

  3. Pretty good. Now, the main issue I saw was Beckett. That is how you spell his name. If you fix that, it would help. 😉
    Interesting idea. Update, it there’s more. 😀 I’d love to see how far this goes… 😈

    ~CC

  4. I appologise for all the spelling mistakes. I can never spell Beckett’s name right. HOWEVER, the title i spelled that way for a reason. (hint: try looking at it upside down. That helped me come up with a title.) I shall go edit now. I need to.

  5. Cool story. But you know, same problems as everyone said. I just looked at the title upside down and said, “OH!” It’s raveN!! But wait, why is it raveN?

  6. YAY!!!! you got it! it’s ‘raven’ backwards! this reason will reveal itself in time. ;))

  7. Okay, i have edited and updated. Should have better spelling now. I was editing it by hand, rather than using spellcheck. Now you can read this without fear. 😉

  8. come ON people! SOMEBODY read this! Please!
    …My story is dead. *sigh…*

    Comments merged, one at a time, please 😉

  9. Captain Awesome August 5th, 2010 at 7:11 am 9

    I read it, so it’s not dead. It’s awesome.

  10. UUUUUUUUUUPPPPPPPPDDDDDDDDDAAAAAAAAATTTTTEEEEE

  11. you NEED to update!!!!!

  12. Artiholi180 iz watchin you ^_^ August 20th, 2010 at 4:39 am 12

    NOOOOO! dont end here! keep going =)))) please…..0.0 (puppy eyes) i like this story…….. Please update, Falcon.
    -Dex out-

  13. *demonic voice* YOU SHALL UPDATE OR I SHALL BUG YOU AT SCHOOL!!!!!!

  14. WOAH YOU GUYS ARE AT THE SAME SCHOOL…
    wait i wonder if we go to the same school might have not noticed you before or something

  15. UPDATE ALL YOUR STORIES AND STOP SAYING YOU’RE A BAD WRITER!!! FoalyIsAGenues- yeah I have been seriously thinking about that, it would be SO freaky if everyone on the site went to the same school and we never knew it… But then I’d probably love school cuz I wouldn’t be the only insane one!

  16. if you dont update i stop reading

  17. lets see. holly hanging out at fowl manor, parents leaving for vacation, and people get eaten by random creature that appears to be from other dimension…….. i like it

  18. Alright, peoples. I updated… and more is comeing. Soon. I promise. *shoves update-hateing, REAL Falcon into closet*

  19. No, really, I updated… Has this story died again???

  20. I’m dying!!!!!

  21. @FoalyIsAGeneus
    Do you live in colorado?

    @Fal, one of the dying breed of fangirl who doesn’t want to marry Arty

    It is NOT dead. Just slightly ignored.
    How does this have to do with the Para Files????

  22. It has to do w/ da Paradox Files because…

    That’s where I got the idea.

    D’arvit. I hate this new format.

  23. Update, please! it’s nov. 1st 2011!

  24. How dare you end on a cliffhanger?!

    No mistakes. You are good at reading through, I always end up having a few leftover mistakes.

  25. I am still confuzzled.

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