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Nevar

Summary: Holly dragged the last suitcase into the car, and closed the trunk. She sat back, letting her Hummingbirds take her […]

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Holly dragged the last suitcase into the car, and closed the trunk. She sat back, letting her Hummingbirds take her weight.

She turned her attention to the car itself. It was expensive, no doubt about that. Why did Mud Men waste so much money on something that would only pollute the atmosphere? All these filthy forms of transportation, and they blamed it on the livestock industry.  The livestock industry! Were they so stupid that they blamed global disaster on cow farts?

Angeline climbed into the Pollution Machine, where Artemis Senior was waiting.
“Good- Bye!” Mrs. Fowl called as Mr. Fowl drove away, appalled by his wife’s need for last minute goodbyes.

Artemis observed the smoke trailing behind the family car. Butler was driving it, so that someone would bring it back. “Do you think we need a better, greener car?” he asked, only half joking.

Holly frowned. “I was just thinking the same thing. Why don’t Mud Men just crack down and…” She realized how furious she was with the human race.

Of course, Beckett had to ask: “What’s a Mud Man?” When Holly didn’t respond right away, he added: “They sound really ugly. I’ll bet the’re really gross and dirty, too.” While Beckett brainstormed ‘Mud Men’, Holly made a quick mental note not to use fairie terms around the twins.

For a moment, Holly closed her eyes.She instantly wished she hadn’t, because that’s when she heard the gunshot.

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  1. *singing* if you are clever, you can figure out the the secret of the title… 😉

  2. You have spelling mistakes, and grammar mistakes. Proofread, and get a beta. There’s a list to the left of this page.

    Anyway, good story. I would have enjoyed it a lot more if it had proper spelling and such, but… No, I didn’t manage to guess that name. What name? Tell me!

  3. Pretty good. Now, the main issue I saw was Beckett. That is how you spell his name. If you fix that, it would help. 😉
    Interesting idea. Update, it there’s more. 😀 I’d love to see how far this goes… 😈

    ~CC

  4. I appologise for all the spelling mistakes. I can never spell Beckett’s name right. HOWEVER, the title i spelled that way for a reason. (hint: try looking at it upside down. That helped me come up with a title.) I shall go edit now. I need to.

  5. Cool story. But you know, same problems as everyone said. I just looked at the title upside down and said, “OH!” It’s raveN!! But wait, why is it raveN?

  6. YAY!!!! you got it! it’s ‘raven’ backwards! this reason will reveal itself in time. ;))

  7. Okay, i have edited and updated. Should have better spelling now. I was editing it by hand, rather than using spellcheck. Now you can read this without fear. 😉

  8. come ON people! SOMEBODY read this! Please!
    …My story is dead. *sigh…*

    Comments merged, one at a time, please 😉

  9. Captain Awesome August 5th, 2010 at 7:11 am 9

    I read it, so it’s not dead. It’s awesome.

  10. UUUUUUUUUUPPPPPPPPDDDDDDDDDAAAAAAAAATTTTTEEEEE

  11. you NEED to update!!!!!

  12. Artiholi180 iz watchin you ^_^ August 20th, 2010 at 4:39 am 12

    NOOOOO! dont end here! keep going =)))) please…..0.0 (puppy eyes) i like this story…….. Please update, Falcon.
    -Dex out-

  13. *demonic voice* YOU SHALL UPDATE OR I SHALL BUG YOU AT SCHOOL!!!!!!

  14. WOAH YOU GUYS ARE AT THE SAME SCHOOL…
    wait i wonder if we go to the same school might have not noticed you before or something

  15. UPDATE ALL YOUR STORIES AND STOP SAYING YOU’RE A BAD WRITER!!! FoalyIsAGenues- yeah I have been seriously thinking about that, it would be SO freaky if everyone on the site went to the same school and we never knew it… But then I’d probably love school cuz I wouldn’t be the only insane one!

  16. if you dont update i stop reading

  17. lets see. holly hanging out at fowl manor, parents leaving for vacation, and people get eaten by random creature that appears to be from other dimension…….. i like it

  18. Alright, peoples. I updated… and more is comeing. Soon. I promise. *shoves update-hateing, REAL Falcon into closet*

  19. No, really, I updated… Has this story died again???

  20. I’m dying!!!!!

  21. @FoalyIsAGeneus
    Do you live in colorado?

    @Fal, one of the dying breed of fangirl who doesn’t want to marry Arty

    It is NOT dead. Just slightly ignored.
    How does this have to do with the Para Files????

  22. It has to do w/ da Paradox Files because…

    That’s where I got the idea.

    D’arvit. I hate this new format.

  23. Update, please! it’s nov. 1st 2011!

  24. How dare you end on a cliffhanger?!

    No mistakes. You are good at reading through, I always end up having a few leftover mistakes.

  25. I am still confuzzled.

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