My First Pimple REWRITTEN

Summary: This is the updated and hopefully improved version of my story My First Pimple. Contains no actual slash but heavily […]

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This is the updated and hopefully improved version of my story My First Pimple. Contains no actual slash but heavily hints at it being something that’ll eventually happen.

When Artemis woke up that morning he stretched and yawned, rubbing sleep out of his eyes, looking like an ordinary eighteen year old boy. He got out of bed and made his way to the bathroom to prepare himself for the day ahead. Artemis stopped in front of the sink and splashed his face with water. He then grabbed his comb and turned to his mirror.

The comb fell from his hand, barely making a sound as it hit the tiled floor. On Artemis’ cheek sat a small bump with a tiny white head. Artemis touched his cheek gently with his hand, feeling the pimple, making sure his eyes weren’t playing tricks on him. It was real and a little sore when touched.

Artemis frowned in irritation; he’d thought he’d passed the stage where he needed to worry about pimples but there wasn’t really much he could do and, to tell the truth, it didn’t really bother him. It was just one tiny pimple after all. He bent down and picked up his comb from where he’d dropped it and continued with his morning routine.

By the time he had finished buttoning his shirt there was a knock at the door.

“Artemis, are you up yet?”

At the sound of his bodyguard’s voice Artemis’ heart sped up and a strange mixture of panic and embarrassment sped through his body, his hand immediately flying up to his face to cover his pimple. His eyes scanned his room, brain working in overdrive. In a few short nanoseconds he spots his computer desk. He sits at the desk so that his cheek with the pimple on it is facing away from the door and opens up a page with one of his current projects on it.

“I’m awake,” he said, “You can come in.”

Butler opened the door and strode into the room, looking around to make sure everything was in its right place and nothing had happened during the night. He immediately noticed that Artemis was sitting at his computer, a regular occurrence for the young prodigy.

“Breakfast is ready if you’re hungry,” Butler said.

“Not right now,” Artemis said. “I’ll grab something to eat later.” He didn’t even look at the bodyguard as he waved his hand at him in dismissal. Butler stared at Artemis in confusion before leaving. A few years ago he would’ve expected this kind of behavior from Artemis but lately… Butler frowned as he closed Artemis’ bedroom door.

Artemis finally looked up from his computer screen as Butler closed the door, thankful that the older man hadn’t noticed that Artemis was looking at the project he’d completed just yesterday. Artemis sat back in his chair and massaged his temples. What was that? He’d never experienced anything like it before. It had felt rather… exhilarating and terrifying and wonderful and horrible…

Was he sick? Was there some sort imbalance occurring in his body? Something told him that wasn’t it. It wasn’t physical, it was emotional. But how had Artemis’ bodyguard caused such emotions to explode within him? How did he make them stop? Artemis sighed. The only solution to that he could see was to avoid Butler like the plague.

Artemis looked around a corner and down feeling ridiculously like a spy in one of those movies Juliet was so fond of. His stomach growled and he gave it a withering glare. He had spent the entire morning hiding in his room, entertaining himself the best he could. He had been able to protect himself against boredom but his own stomach had betrayed him. He was now trying to make his way into the kitchen without bumping into Butler.

The hallway was littered with the twin’s toys, obviously no one had been up here to clean yet, but there was no sign of Butler. Artemis began his walk down the corridor, dodging the toys and making way to the staircase that would lead him down to the kitchen. He was just about to turn and make his way down the stairs when Butler turned the corner ahead.

“Artemis, there you are,” he said. “I was looking for you.”

Artemis his mouth to say something but all that came out was a strangled noise. He stepped backwards but his foot didn’t land on the floor. It landed on something round that squeaked as he stepped on it. He fell backwards as his foot was thrown out from underneath him and he closed his eyes, preparing for the eventual pain.

The pain didn’t come. Butler had ran forwards and caught Artemis just before he’d hit the ground. Artemis opened his eyes and realized that Butler’s face was uncomfortably close to his own. He was bent over Artemis, one arm wrapped around his waist, the other supporting his back. Artemis was strangely aware that if he were to move his head he would be able to kiss his bodyguard.

“Are you alright?” Butler asked.

Artemis opened his mouth to say something but all that came out was a sort of chocking noise. He cleared his throat and tried again. “I-I’m fine,” he said. Butler nodded, looking relieved and distracted at the same time.  

They stood like that for another minute till Artemis tapped Butler on the chest. “You can put me down now,” he said, some small part of him hoping that Butler would continue to hold him.

“Oh, sorry,” Butler said. He pulled Artemis to his feet then stepped back. “Have you eaten yet?”

“No, I was just going to the kitchen,” Artemis said.

“Ok, good,” Butler said, nodding his head.

They were silent for a moment. It was very uncomfortable and Artemis decided that this was the awkward silence Juliet was always complaining about. But they only occurred when she went on a date with a boy she considered cute… Artemis’ heartbeat sped up at the thought.

“I should go,” Artemis said.

“Right,” Butler said. He nodded again. “You should eat.”

“I will,” Artemis said. He continued his way to the kitchen, pondering the confusing and embarrassing moment he’d just shared with his bodyguard. Oh well. At least Butler hadn’t noticed the pimple.

“By the way,” Butler called out. “You have a pimple. Right on your cheek.”

Hellfire.

 

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18 responses to “My First Pimple REWRITTEN.” Join in!

  1. The last part was kind of funny.

    ‘”By the way,” Butler called out. “You have a pimple. Right on your cheek.”

    Hellfire.’

    I laughed at that. You just made my day!

    All in all, it was good. Better than the original, actually. 5/5.

  2. Hellfire. I’ll have to use that one. You made my day. I love it. It’s cute. It’s not just some terrible fic that has no plot. Nice. 5/5.

  3. Loved the ending BXA.
    that was great, hilarious it just made my night.

  4. Oh, this is even cooler than the first “My First Pimple”. Soooo funny!!! 😆

    ~Yoshi

  5. Niiiiiice ending, buddy. 😀

  6. Free cyber cookie to anyone who guesses where I got the term ‘hellfire’ from!

  7. Ooh! Ooh! Memememememe!!!!

    You TTP when Artemis drops the webcam under the bed! 😀

  8. That’s right! Have some cyber cookies 🙂

  9. Umm…. can I have cyber cotton candy?

  10. Hermione Fowl March 27th, 2010 at 7:33 am 10

    Hellfire. I have to use that. As said before WAAAAAAAAAY better then the original. =)=)=)

  11. JadiaoftheFunk April 6th, 2010 at 4:14 am 11

    That definately fits in the ‘funny’ category! It was really well written. Nice job

  12. Now that is comedy! All 5 thumbs up!

  13. Beckett Simpleton May 26th, 2010 at 6:28 pm 13

    heh. sweet ending. lol. you me laugh. it was waaay better than the first version though. the first one made me cringe. i don’t usually read Artler

  14. Ah, comedy. 😆

    That was a great ending. Hilarious. The Butler/Artemis thing was a bit disturbing, but it was still funny. 😆 Love it.

    -Star

  15. mmm…that was a good way to start half-term holidays 🙂 Absolutely brilliant. I’ve never read the first one but this is still hilarious. Nothing like a little comedy relief before I go to bed heehee!

  16. Beckett Simpleton May 28th, 2010 at 11:25 pm 16

    OH MY GOD IT’S THE HALF TERM HOLIDAYS NOW! I FORGOT! YAAAAY! BTW, when i said sweet i didn’t meen cuddles sweet. Artlers scare me too but what the heck? *shrug*

  17. Really? Your writing style is okay-ISH, but the story is completely pointless and nothing REALLY happens. All the characters seem OOC and there’s too much drama over a small pimple. Seriously.
    Sorry if this seems harsh. Just giving an honest review here. Obviously, everyone else thinks otherwise. 🙂

    1/5 – Poor

  18. Ahhhhh!!!!!The horror! It’s a really good fic, but really? Their both males! It’s just that I thought the best chance for romance is Artemis and Holly! Or even Minerva and Artemis! Sorry, breakdown…………….4 stars!

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