In The End
Written on December 1st, 2008 by VinyayaStory Details
- Status : Complete
- Category: General and Romance and Angst and Challenge Entries
- Author: Vinyaya
- Word Count: 556
- Read 112 times
(3 votes, average: 4 out of 5)
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The Five Times Challenge - I don’t know if this challenge is closed or what, because I haven’t been on this site in about a year, but I am going to write a story based loosely on this challenge.
The Five times Artemis Knew He Was Human
The First Time- Pain
’Holly snarled. “Enough is enough.”
She pulled back her fist, fingers curled in a tight bunch. Artemis didn’t flinch. Why should he? Butler always intervened before punches landed. but then something caught his eye, a large figure running down the stairway on the first-floor monitor. It was Butler.
“That’s right, rich boy,” said Holly nastily. “You’re on your own this time.”
And before Artemis’ eyes had time to widen, Holly had put an extra few kilos of spring in her elbow and whacked her abductor right on the nose.’
PAIN— He wasn’t used to it. It stung, like nettles and wasps and thorns and poison and all other things which leave the mind a little dizzy from shock and pain. The elfen form of HER, Captain Holly Short, standing above him and Artemis thought. This is what it must be like, to be a prisoner that this fine Captain has just lost patience with.
And in a way he was.
_Because we’re all just victims of LOVE._
The Second Time- Love
Holly kissed him.
Lost of emotions were rushing through his head, like surprise, shock, slight indignance at the sudden nature of her advance, but mostly, the thought - I am enjoying this.
_You make me feel outa my element, like I’m walking on broken glass…_
The Third Time- Grief
Grub Kelp’s recycling ceremony.
Holly cried, So did Troubles mummy.
Trouble and Foaly pretended not to.
Butler glared at the floor.
Artemis felt detached.
But mostly, he noticed. The sense of sadness and almost-
_My insides all turn to ash… So COLD_
The Fourth Time- Humiliation
Cupid, not that such things as he existed, was laughing at Artemis.
How DARE he fall for an elf.
How DARE he fall AT ALL.
No, He didn’t fall.
He lept into love. Stupidly. And now, Foaly had heard him tell Holly all of those TRIVIAL AND UNIMPORTANT things, and he felt like all of this really should have been…
_My dirty little secret_
The Fifth time- Sloth
‘Artemis.’
Hurm?
‘Artemis.’
Whhshh…want?
‘Artemis, go feed the cat.’
Hurrrrshh…
‘ARTEMIS!’
What is it dear.
‘Someone needs to feed the cat.’
And that someone shall be You.
‘I did it last time.’
I don’t even like cats. Or animals in general. Apart from Foaly. Slightly.
___
‘Oh and while you’re there Arty, feed the baby.’
Bu- bu- But! As its mother it is surely your duty to feed it and anyhow, i already told you i will have nothign to do with this child of ours. You told me quite clearly that elfin/human children were not possible before we… you know.
‘I saw you cuddling it last night.’
I am hiring a nanny. I can’t cope with all of this added stress, and anyway I do not cuddle things.
‘Apart from me.’
Hah. That is an embrace of ownership.
‘Artemis….
Artemis’ life was not going to plan.
_But IN THE END it doesn’t even matter_
in The End…
December 1st, 2008 at 7:58 pm
Vinyaya! I thought you had left WAAY before I joined! I have read your other stories And I love them. This one is WONDERFUL too!
*First comment dance*
December 2nd, 2008 at 1:02 am
Are you back now? I hope so. You left before I joined, but I’ve read your stories and they’re AWESOME! And this one is no exception. It’s fantastic! PLEASE keep writing on AF FG!!!!!
December 2nd, 2008 at 1:15 am
No way!!! Vinyaya?!!?!? WOW!! You don’t know who I am, but wow, I’ve heard a lot of good things about you!
Moving on….
Couple grammar errors (grammar, ewhg, I shudder at the word). The first two were very good. The punch and kiss…
Grub’s death, somewhat sudden, I thought I had read it wrong a second there, the forth one, was more Cupid than Artemis. Oh wait…yes, yes, yes, I see it, now I get it, sorry, now I that I get, much better! Viel viel besser!
The last one, well, I would HOPE Artemis would be a better father than that, but I’m not doubting there isn’t a parent out there whose thought like that.
(I swear I smell cookie dough; it’s driving me mad!)
Good day,
Artymon, certified lunatic
December 2nd, 2008 at 2:05 am
DUDE I JUST MADE COOKIES! no lie!!!!! *weird*
Cool story! I saw a few mistakes but.. it was i always say.. TAWSOME!!! (Artymon can splane wat that means) You were left before Artymon had even joined? I am sorta newish here, Love all yer stories!!!!!!!
December 2nd, 2008 at 3:47 am
This. =. AWESOMENESSSSSSSSS.
K12, gimme a cookie!
December 2nd, 2008 at 5:44 am
YAY!!! VINYAYA’S BACK!!! OBVIOUSLY YOU DON’T KNOW ME, BUT, WELL, PEOPLE ARE ALWAYS TALKING ABOUT YOU AND - QUIT SHOUTING, HELEN!
I loved this!!! You will definitely win!!!
December 2nd, 2008 at 10:16 am
HEYO!!! It’s beena long time since we met. Hope you remember me
And your story was really GOOD!!!
I lovedd itt
It was sweeet
And the song In The End is super nice too!
December 2nd, 2008 at 1:42 pm
yes i remember you, and nice to ‘meet’ all of you other nice commenters
December 11th, 2008 at 12:52 am
Wow! Amazing as always, Vinyaya! This is just so stunning and cute at the same time XD
It’s amazing how far a little denial will go
December 11th, 2008 at 1:14 am
*stuffs all the cookies in my mouth* waff cooy? i’s hash no cooy!
Hey, I know your not alowed to edit it once its been submited, but you really should cap your I’s
December 11th, 2008 at 6:45 am
You’re not??? What the BEEP!
You should really edit this, you know. It’s super confusing. But super nice!
January 3rd, 2009 at 3:48 pm
I don’t know if I’m allowed to comment yet, as being one of the judges, so I’m not saying anything about the story yet. I do want to say, though, that I think you should make the last time in a full fanfic - that definitely could turn into something awesome.
January 3rd, 2009 at 6:00 pm
It IS awesome.
Oh,and on the cookies note, I baked a triple batch, so go ahead and pig out!
January 3rd, 2009 at 8:28 pm
That was so cool and funny! But I would like a little background, Vinyaya.
1.Why did Holly punch him?
1.How was he, in a way, Holly’s prisoner?
2.Why did she kiss him?
3.How did Grub die?
4.Why did Cupid say ‘How dare he fall AT ALL’?
4.What TRIVIAL AND UNIMPORTANT things did Artemis tell Holly?
4.So, this part I don’t understand. Was Cupid saying those things to Artemis?
5.Why did he say he did not like the baby?
5.Why, in the 5th one, does it say sloth?
Anyway, I really liked it. It should win. I especially liked the parts of songs at the end of 2 and 4.
2:You make me feel (out of my element,) like I’m walking on broken glass.(jonas Brothers-SOS)
4:(It’s also the title) My dirty little secret.
P.s. Are the endings to #1 (because we’re all just victoms of love) and #3 (my insides all turn to ash… so cold) parts of songs?
Well, awesome story and please answer my quastions!