Highschool years
Written on September 18th, 2007 by VinyayaStory Details
(25 votes, average: 3.76 out of 5)
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“Oh my god Lili, I can’t believe you kissed Trouble!”
“Sorry holly, I dunno he’s kinda cute!”
“Yeah but-“
“Well it’s not like you are going out or anything. Anyway it wasn’t just me. He kissed me back!”
“I can’t believe you! You evil cow !”
“Whatever. Just cos you love him and he doesn’t care.”
“How dare you! He does care!”
“Yeah that’s really obvious since it was me he made out with.”
“But-“
“Face it. He doesn’t give a toss .”
“SHUT UP I HATE YOU!!!!!!!”
“Do I look like I care? Sorry I gotta go now. I’m late for my date with Trouble.”
“AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!”
“Chill Holly. No need-“
” DIE YOU!!!!!!!!”
“ Owwwww! Hey stop!”
That’s when Trouble who had heard the commotion came in. He stared at Lili and Holly. Holly had her hands around Lili’s neck.
“Oh my god.”
“Wait, this isn’t what it looks like!”
“What do you mean? You are trying to KILL HER!!!!!!!”
He led Lili out of the room. Holly collapsed on the bed crying.
Of course Trouble wasn’t going out with Lili. But Holly didn’t know that.
Some other stories by Vinyaya:
- Trouble, on Holly and Artemis
- In The End
- Talent
- Aphrodite ~The Adventure Continues~
- The Holly Short Novellas
September 18th, 2007 at 5:37 pm
soz i will fix it later…and put it inot chappies…
September 18th, 2007 at 7:27 pm
hm…. this sounds alot like mine. but then again mine sounded alot like yours. now im confused. Its really good, except for a lot of cursing.
4.99/5
September 18th, 2007 at 7:30 pm
and i dont picture chix like that. but anyway…
September 18th, 2007 at 8:13 pm
nice i like it!!!
September 18th, 2007 at 11:48 pm
i love you vinyaya!!! that came out really wrong…i love yer storys
September 19th, 2007 at 12:55 am
i love it, been waiting for u to add on to the orginal one lol.And plz o plz dont make me wait for the next one! ill go crazy -.-
September 19th, 2007 at 2:19 am
Vinyaya it was very good. Personally I didn’t mind the cursing. It added quite a lot of color. However I wouldn’t think Holly one to give up so easily. Please continue if you don’t I’m going on strike and won’t write a single story until you do!
September 19th, 2007 at 6:52 am
another highschool storie!!! YAY.
can’t wait until u add more
September 19th, 2007 at 8:52 am
Vinyaya- i have to say. your one of the most talented writers on here.
September 19th, 2007 at 4:13 pm
thanx all but i’m afraid i have to delete the swearing or the story will be deleted brb!
September 19th, 2007 at 5:04 pm
there and i also spilt it into chappies!
September 20th, 2007 at 2:31 am
I really like this! Vinyaya please continue. Gah! I’m like you and Holly’s biggest fan!
September 20th, 2007 at 7:18 pm
as am i yours!
September 23rd, 2007 at 10:10 pm
ok i cant quite imagine chix in that manner but overall id say it was an excellent piece of writing much like ur previous ones.Keep up the good work and you’ll go far (geez i sound like one of those weird life couches who ses keep this going and you’ll go far) any way seriously id say that ur practically famous on this site
September 25th, 2007 at 9:19 pm
lol thanx!
September 27th, 2007 at 4:37 am
ohhhh!!!I AM JUST SOOOOO IMPATIENT!!! KEEP ADDING!!! please? I WILL TRY TO WAIT BUT WELL…..;)
September 27th, 2007 at 5:17 pm
ok i will add tonight!
September 29th, 2007 at 8:59 pm
I like it but Chix is a little ooc
October 1st, 2007 at 11:21 pm
Do you think that Chix is starting to get really wierd? I can not imagine the real Chix doing that. Is he really that sleazy in this story? I like, but I am kinda confused about the Chix part.
October 2nd, 2007 at 11:03 pm
CONTINUE SOON!
October 8th, 2007 at 3:02 am
dude continue!
October 9th, 2007 at 7:17 pm
ok lol
October 9th, 2007 at 8:54 pm
this is sooo good r u goning to continue today?
October 9th, 2007 at 8:57 pm
oh go one then.
October 9th, 2007 at 9:07 pm
plz continue!!
October 9th, 2007 at 9:08 pm
What?
October 9th, 2007 at 9:54 pm
Ok how did she break her leg? and second when was she invited to a party plz explain.
October 9th, 2007 at 10:01 pm
i will in the next chappy be patient lol…
October 9th, 2007 at 10:04 pm
Okidookie I will try to obbtain that virtue.
*snicker* like that’s gonna happen!
October 9th, 2007 at 10:15 pm
Have I really never reviewed this before? I guess not, which is weird, because I’ve read it and I definitely like it. Romances are not really my thing, but this is a very good story. I really like how you don’t portray either Holly or Trouble as perfect- they often get overcute in these types of stories.
October 9th, 2007 at 10:17 pm
definetly.
October 10th, 2007 at 4:42 pm
Yeah in my earlier stories holly and trouble are definatley too cute. In the actual books though holly is a grumpy little sod most of the time.
October 10th, 2007 at 8:48 pm
I really like it… it is a bit too cutesy for my general taste, but every now and again I like some pure fluff.
Maybe add another element, something a little less happy, just to add depth to the story. You don’t really need too, but if you want to make it a novel length fic then that might help. And maybe make Holly a little bit more feisty. I just love how prickly she can be sometimes.
Good job, keep it up! Definitely one of the better H/T’s out there. (Not that they aren’t all great, I just like this one a lot).
October 10th, 2007 at 9:15 pm
uh this isn’t gonna end up an h/t lol i never said who she was snogging…
October 11th, 2007 at 3:30 am
Lol, great as usual! From your biggest fan, you have done a great job!!!!
October 13th, 2007 at 11:13 pm
NO I’M HER BIGGEST FAN!!
October 14th, 2007 at 2:49 am
love ur story but it would be better if you could hurry up and add on!!!!
October 14th, 2007 at 10:00 am
ok lol how bout you tie for biggest fan?
October 16th, 2007 at 11:54 pm
NEVER! i am your BIGGEST fan EVER!
October 21st, 2007 at 3:37 pm
*sighs* whatever i can have a fan club i suppose lol…
October 26th, 2007 at 5:32 am
I shall be the leader and we will stalk you!
October 26th, 2007 at 4:30 pm
lol. How? I live in scotland remember!
October 26th, 2007 at 6:24 pm
Well… I guess I could steal a plane from the untited Italian Airport and then some how get to the U.K. unless my followers don’t live in Italy that could be a problem…
CONTINUE!
October 27th, 2007 at 10:19 am
uh Jelly….why don’t you just buy a ticket to scotland? much easier
hee hee i’ll come. (im not stalkin anyone thou) lol
October 27th, 2007 at 5:53 pm
I thought that stealing a plane from Italy to Scotland would be much easier I mean no security! lol plus it would have so much adrenaline rush!
October 31st, 2007 at 3:43 am
I really liked the story , I really wish u’de continue.
October 31st, 2007 at 5:51 pm
ok lol but i am starting to get scared!!! i thought i was safe on my little united kingdom island!!
October 31st, 2007 at 9:42 pm
lol ohhh that’s funny! safe from people like me!
November 5th, 2007 at 1:14 am
i think no one is ever goin to be safe from jelly….she will always find a WAY!!
lol
November 5th, 2007 at 1:24 am
Dun dun dun dan dun dun dun dun dan dan dweedele dee dweeldle dee doooooooooooo! My new theme song! pretty spyish huh? oh wait you can’t hear it! Oh well!
November 9th, 2007 at 4:24 pm
We(probably)won’t stalk you if you keep ON WRITN’!I’m not sure about Jelly.Just keep the updates and stories a-comin’!
November 10th, 2007 at 9:43 am
lol write stories or get stalked by a person with a theme song that we can’t hear
November 11th, 2007 at 9:37 pm
lol
November 11th, 2007 at 10:08 pm
plz continue? *puppy dog eyes* *turns evil*
NOW!!!! grrrr.
November 11th, 2007 at 11:39 pm
lol again , PLZ CONTINUE , PLLLLZZ UR A TOATLLY AWESOME WRITER! and i neeeeedd to read ur stories!!
November 16th, 2007 at 2:15 am
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March 24th, 2008 at 3:40 am
Hola, i like the story, especily the SOS part
P.S. how do u do the smile?
March 24th, 2008 at 4:40 am
wat smile ??
:’(
March 24th, 2008 at 4:56 am
wait a moment….i only jsut read hapter 6……NO!! THAT CANT BE THE ENDING!!! theres to many opitunities for good ideas!!! reconsider???