help me think of a title!

Written on December 30th, 2007 by lil.arty

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  • Author: lil.arty
  • Word Count: 1799
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Prologue:
“They found you. I told you they would. Get out of there while you still can!”
The phone went dead. He stood there, motionless. For 13 years he had worked on this project, and tomorrow….tomorrow all his hard work would be gone. The police had found out. Tomorrow they would come to investigate this building that was “abandoned”. But he had to expect it since they had the finest minds and that centaur. Lifting himself out of the chair, he walked over to the tubes. He placed a palm on its cold glass.  It would be hard to leave, but he had to. What they would do with them he did not know.
He gathered his coat and hat. Just as he was about to lock the door he turned and took one last look, one last look at his lab.
Chapter one: Undiscovered.
BANG!
“Come on men, put some back in it. Bang that door down.” Root took another puff of his cigar.
BANG! A dent was made in the door to the lab. This was going to take a little while. The group of L.E.P agents prepared to go for another ram. Fungus smoke surrounded Root. When it cleared he saw Foaly trotting towards him.
“Morning Root, got this door down almost? We don’t really have all day you know.”
Root rolled his eyes. Foaly started to talk again. He started to point out how he had found out about the place, but as anyone would of guessed Root didn’t care.
“….and then when this unidentified building appeared I decided to use the underground cam…….”
“FOALY! I DON’T CARE HOW YOU FOUND THIS PLACE! NOW GO AND GET THAT ASSISTANT OF YOURS!” Root took another puff of his cigar. Foaly frowned then went off to find that assistant of his.
Root turned his attention back to the door. The L.E.P agents went for another ram. This time the door fell, crumpling to the ground.
“Good job men!”
Foaly was the first to enter the lab. He flashed his torch around in all different directions. Close behind was his assistant Beta. They walked over broken glass, planks of wood and old furniture. The whole place was a mess.
Beta suddenly went in a different direction. His torch had caught something.
“Foaly! Over here. I think I found something.” He came closer to what he had found.
“Keep some distance kid; you don’t know what could be in that….tube?”                              As Betas normal cocky self he didn’t listen and went closer. He started to dust off the dust from the glass. When he tried to peer in all he could see was a greenish liquid. He clasped his hand around the handle and started to pull.
“Are you made? Do you even know what is in that?” Foaly said. Foaly went to stop him but it was no use; Beta was a stubborn and cocky centaur, just like Foaly.                                                                                                           He gave another hard pull at it and the door opened, letting all the liquid wash over him. He slid to the floor, coughing up the liquid. He wiped his face and stood up again to see what had come out. And to his surprise (and I seriously mean it when I say surprise) he saw a tiny drenched girl lying on the floor.
Foaly was already examining her. Beta walked over and bent over the girl. Her hair was bright orange with side bangs with black tips. It fell just beneath her shoulders.
“Like I said, keep some distance.” Foaly pulled himself up again and started to rummage through his bag. Beta took a closer look at the girl. He was about to brush her hair aside to get a better look at her face when her eyes flew open. Her eyes filled with panic and out of instinct she punched Beta in the nose.
He stubbled back and fell on his butt. The girl jumped up and ran behind a desk. Her eyes darted all around the room, taking in this unfamiliar place. Only then did Foaly and Beta notice her true features. Her eyes were a light amber with a certain look to them that was unusual yet beautiful. But what stood out the most were her pointed, fox like ears.
Foaly put his hands up, showing that he carried no weapon. “It’s all right. We only want to help…..do you have a name?” No reply. She only stood there, ready to run if need be. 
A group of L.E.P agents came rushing in the room. The girl gave a horrified look. But she did not run. Instead she stood there for a few seconds without moving and then, she changed…changed into a fox.    
 

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19 Reviews for “help me think of a title!”

  1. lil.arty Says:

    i made a lil mistake where it says are u made…it should actully be are you mad. …for anyone confussed :P

  2. lil.arty Says:

    oh almost forgot:
    This story is for happyhypnosis coz she gave me the idea of one of the characters and also 017350.

  3. KiZzA Says:

    NICE STORY! I LIKE IT ESPECIALY THE BIT WERE THE GIRL TURNS INTO A FOX LOL

  4. mahi101 AF Fan Says:

    nice , VERY VERY discriptive , its really awesome! should i rate it now or when ur finished ? and the title .. im not sure , well , i have to wait until its finished..lol.

  5. happyhypnosis Says:

    whoa, this is exactly how I imagined it for my story! good job!:D :D

  6. Olive Says:

    i thought it was an interesting start. sure had an interesting beginning, easy to hook a reader that way.

  7. lil.arty Says:

    thanx i will be sure to continue with another chapter.

    happyhypnosis:is there anything ya wanna addd to the discription of kit u gave me?

  8. 017350 Says:

    It’s pretty good… I don’t know how this story is going to end up, but I think “”What is that liquid!?”" would be a good title.

  9. lil.arty Says:

    hmmm possibly…but just u meatining the liquid gave me an idea :P

  10. mahi101 AF Fan Says:

    i like it./

  11. ARTY'SELFFRIEND Says:

    i LIKE IT!

  12. lil.arty Says:

    ok since u guys like it i guess i will continue….wen the next idea comes to mind lol :P

  13. happyhypnosis Says:

    hmm, no you captured her personality very well, but if your going to write anything about the others & you want they’re profiles just tell me (unless you want to make them yourself thats cool too :D )

  14. lil.arty Says:

    nah im gonna just focos the story on kit…the others an’t important lol

  15. happyhypnosis Says:

    oh yeah I forgot to add, on sketchfu.com, I drew a picture of kit, if your interested here’s the link: http://sketchfu.com/drawing/107547 oh and about the mark/tatoo below her eye I didn’t put that in the her profile cuz’ it would’ve been to hard to describe :P , its kinda like her creators signature. Its not the best drawing ever (its really hard to draw on there with a laptop touchpad lol :P ) but I tried my best. & I don’t wanna be annoying or anything, but I remembered 3 things about kit:
    1.) She enjoys sneaking out of the lep to explore haven.
    2.)She smiles alot & later on ( & much meditation later) she’s happy to be half fox (though in the begining she resents it.)
    3.) this is kinda up to you, I had kit wearing a beanie to cover her ears, but if you make up some kinda gadget ( like nighcrawler’s image inducer from x-men: evolution…okay that was kinda nerdy :P lol) that would be awesome! :D whatever you do I know this story will be super special awesome!;D

  16. lil.arty Says:

    lol it doesnt bug me if u add more becoz those 3 ideas gave me ideas for the story. only one littleeeee problem…..my computre is like busted and it may take me a bit extra to add more. :P

  17. hannah xox Says:

    I LOVED IT !!!!!

  18. mahi101 AF Fan Says:

    WOW , awesum pic happyhypnosis i really ,like the story.

  19. Star Jinin Says:

    Hmm…not too bad… EWW! CHIX IS PERVERTED!
    Bad Foaly! You and your carrot juice!
    Julius is afraid of foxes?
    Why isn’t Arty in this?

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