Fantasia Lorena

Written on November 16th, 2008 by Helen

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  • Author: Helen
  • Word Count: 1502
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Chapter 1:

  It all began at the end of an uneventful History class. The bell had just rung and students everywhere in the building were packing their bags, ready to move. Mr Reyman, a thin, balding man with thick, dusty spectacles, glanced at the clock and muttered under his breath, “Oh, no.” and rushed out of the classroom, closely followed by peals of laughter from some of the meaner students, at his forgetful manner.

  Artemis frowned. He disapproved of this crude form of entertainment, this laughing and sniggering and whispering behind one’s back. He had helped… sort out some of the cases with threats of Butler.

  Mr Reyman walked back into class before any of the students had time to leave, but this time he was leading a girl behind him. She kept her head down, prefering to stare at the floor instead. Her long silvery hair hid her face anyway, falling down to her waist in straight silky strands. Artemis detected a subtle change in Mr Reyman’s face. He was slightly paler than when he had gone out.

  Stammering, he introduced the new girl. “Class, t-this is Fantasia L-lorena, you new c-classmate.”

  The girl finally lifted her head and a collective gasp of horrified surprise went around the class. Even Artemis could not prevent himself a small and sudden intake of air.Now they knew why Mr Reyman was so pale.

  Fantasia was scarred. Terribly scarred. Red, half-healed welts were obvious on both cheeks, and it looked like a knife had cut her otherwise normal face into two unequal halves, through her eyebrow, her nose, and her mouth.

  Her clothes accentuated her ugliness. Her drab, sleeveless black turtleneck top, plain and unadorned black pants were covered by a grey hoodie.

  She mumble an boring, everyday, “Hi.”

  Her voice. Ah, now that was an entirely different matter. It was like a smooth, clear waterfall running softly into the pool beneath, the quiet thrill of thrushes on the summer breeze, the sound of leaves waving gently.

  In short, it was the voice of an angel.

  Artemis was captivated. An ugly face paired with a voice like that, so lovely. There had to be a mystery.

  “I… well, who’s going to help her g-get used to the school?”

  Every single one of the students present turned their heads away, seemingly occupied with something or other. All, that is, except for Artemis, who raised his hand, despite the looks that he got from the others. Her dull brown eyes met his sparkling blue ones. Wordlessly she sat on the empty chair beside him.

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6 Reviews for “Fantasia Lorena”

  1. Minerva Paradizo Says:

    *FCD*
    Hi Helen!
    I like this one, it seems really interesting. In chapter two, there are a few spelling errors. “evry” is spelt wrong for one. But otherwise, awesome grammar and spelling!
    Please update ASAP, or I will get very, very, angry! Just joking, but I will get impatient. Update soon!
    Your fan,
    Minerva Paradizo

  2. hitsugaya toushiro Says:

    hey why stop their i want 2 no how she’s related 2 holly
    is she their kid from the future?

  3. Miasaki Says:

    AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAWWWWWWWWWWWWSSSSSSSSSMMMMMEEEEEEEEEEEEEE!!!!!!!!!
    :o Seriously update or we will throw food at you (again).
    hitsugaya toushiro? Cool name!! where’d you think of it?

  4. Helen Says:

    Sorry, I think I mis-typed the word, or whatever. I’ll go see.

    hitsugaya toushiro? Isn’t it like anime or something? Not that I like anime, but my friend (one person who is really annoying) absolutely LOVES it. So I have to suffer everything she says. I thought I heard that name before.

  5. tinyathlete Says:

    You did have some misspellings, but who doesn’t? One thing I noticed is that you mixed up your verb tenses in the sentence “This simple statement thrown Artemis.” By now of course you must realize that it should have been “thrown”. When you start writing papers and essays in college, they’ll really get you on that.

  6. Helen Says:

    Yeah, I know, but the thing is soo long I dunno where to look. I don’t even know which part you’re talking about!

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