Deserted- Chapter Twelve is written!!! OOOOOOH! Artemis slips up!!!!! :P R&R
Written on August 26th, 2007 by Holly314Story Details
(19 votes, average: 3.63 out of 5)
Loading ...Chapter 7: Weakness
Holly awoke to searing pain, all over her skin. Ironically, she felt dizzy,and lightheaded. A tune from her childhood flitted through her mind, buzzing, and humming through slurs, and bars. She opened her eyes a crack, and the song dispersed. She felt feverish now, and her skin crawled and burned all over. She smelled some kind of fruit, getting dizzy from the sweetness of it. She saw the red sun setting over the calm ocean, and saw Artemis sitting in the cave entrance sucking an orange, or something like it. Her eyesight wasn’t the best. So she just dropped back into sweet sleep, and peace from the confusion.
She awoke again, this time at night, feeling more like herself. She tried to prop herself up on her elbows. At this time, though she didn’t know it, Artemis was out foraging. She looked at her skin, and her suit, burned beyond repair. Her skin was blotchy where she could actually see the wounds. The rest were covered in semi-cool moss. She had a moment where she wondered where Artemis was. He probably got eaten alive, trying to save me, she thought. She stared at the silver stream of water rushing down in front of the cave, and then fell back onto a bed made of rushes, palm leaves, and moss.
After staring at the ceiling for a while, she thought she might as well try to stand. There was no one around to laugh if she fell. Or to help her up again. She could easily break a bone trying to stand in the shifty sand, or make her ankle worse. A drop of water fell from the cave’s roof, hitting her flat on the head, and she remembered the events of the day past. She had been eaten by the plant, and minutes later, fallen out of it, her whole body burning. She remembered the evening before, seeing Artemis in the cave mouth.
She sat on the ground, and slowly, for her palms were burned, and crisscrossed with welts, she dug a small pit in the ground. By gathering some of the dryer rushes from her bed, she was able to make a small fire with the suflur and quartz around her. She added more parts of her bed to the fire, taking joy in how free it seemed.
Artemis was returning back to the cave with armsfull of edible roots, and mangoes. He suddenly saw the start of an orange glow from the cave. “What?” he murmered to himself. Holly couldn’t possibly be awake yet with the burns she had sustained. But Holly isn’t exactly human, he reminded himself. He stepped onto the stone ledge that would allow him to go under the waterfall. He stepped in seeing Holy staring blankly into the fire. He gently set down his supplies in the small hole he had dug, and walked toward her. He came up to the edge of the fire, picked up a small root on a stick he had gotten, and began to roast it over the fire. He handed her the still steaming, puffed up root. She took it , and began to chew it absentmindedly.
“Holly,” It was the first word he had said in a while to anyone else listening. “I know there’s something wrong. If you want to talk about it…”
She hesitated. “I was kind of wishing my parents were here. If my mom were here, we would be out of this mess already.”
“It does no good to hope for things that can’t happen.” He said trying to take the normally icy edge off his voice. Now wasn’t the time to start a fight.
“How do you know they can’t happen?!?” she yelled, her temper suddenly shot. “Why do you always have to act so much smarter than everyone else?”
“I..” he started.
“You know what? I don’t care. Go on ahead. Everything is just fine with the world and I don’t exist lateedahdeedah.”
“Holly..”
“Shut up!”
“Holly..”
“I said shut up mud boy!”
“HOLLY!!! LISTEN TO ME!!” she was silent. “You are too weak to be putting this much physical exertion into anything! You need to rest!”
“Don’t tell me what to do mud boy,” she said, her voice gaining a keen edge to it.” I am not weak. Just because I’m a girl and I’m injured doesn’t mean you have to take pity on me. I don’t need any of this.” She stormed out of the cave entrance.
“That’s not what I meant!” he yelled after her.
August 26th, 2007 at 2:38 am
pleezpleezpleez r&r!!!!!!!! GAAAH! *gasps for air and falls off chair*
August 26th, 2007 at 7:54 am
Please update soon!Pretty please!This sounds great;)
August 26th, 2007 at 10:15 am
Holly314…………i dont know how to say this but……………………………………………THAT WAS MAGNIFICENT!!!!!! ♥ the NOOOOOOO part. dont worry bout flamers…i dont think ya gonna get any of em! write more !!!!
August 26th, 2007 at 12:40 pm
Flamers! I wish they could think of an insult we’ve not all heard once in a while…maybe then we’d care!Anyway good start & please update.
August 26th, 2007 at 3:22 pm
I’m trying kk? I have reely slow internet, and it sticks a lot, so it may be…hmmmm..2 days at the most, probably I’ll update today. TY for all criticism.;)
August 26th, 2007 at 3:24 pm
Oh srry, I haven’t logged in, I thought I was, but yes it’s me kk? Srry for whatever confusion THAT may have caused.
August 26th, 2007 at 6:34 pm
yay i got a mention and a box of cookies!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! ( great story btw i love it lol lots and lots!) i am very proud of my guru!!!!!!!!!!!!!
August 26th, 2007 at 9:30 pm
lol
August 26th, 2007 at 9:45 pm
so r u gonna continue lol i wanna see more!! xxx btw read my new story lol
August 26th, 2007 at 11:24 pm
I’ve read! I will write more kk?
August 27th, 2007 at 9:48 am
•♦lol chapeter 2 is lovely!!!•♦
August 27th, 2007 at 5:25 pm
i can’t wait!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! eeeeep!
August 27th, 2007 at 9:14 pm
ahhhhhhhhhh ich bin gehen schlecht!!!!!!!!!! u r killing me madame guru one!!!!!!
August 27th, 2007 at 9:42 pm
lol keep it comin! I will right more, maybe l8r, I’m in a psych blok right now, got a lot 2 do.
August 27th, 2007 at 10:58 pm
it’s finished but shrt! chpter3 is done!
August 27th, 2007 at 11:00 pm
Oh and do u think I made foaly sarcastic enough? I’m not good with witty retorts, unless my adrenaline gets going, and writing isn’t that exciting.
August 28th, 2007 at 4:44 pm
yes it is exciting!!!!!!!!!!!! i am tearing my hair out in anticipation!!!!! keep going now u know how i feel!!!!!!!!!!
August 28th, 2007 at 9:35 pm
kk! I’ll try to update soon…
August 28th, 2007 at 9:42 pm
My my Holly dear. look at all the reviews you’ve got. Sorry it took so long but I’ve been off and on traveling through Wisconsin to get back home. Anyways, yes this is a brilliant story. Artemis and Holly fall into charecter very simply, perfect fit. You could be Eoin Colfer’s Double
May I suggest that you multi task? and not only add to this but to make new stories as well? I look forward to them all. Especially to your updates to this particular story. Again my apologies for being so late.
~Jade Malice
August 29th, 2007 at 5:40 pm
omg jade u r so posh. do u come from england? i do eveyone says i tok posh but i don’t lol they just think i do cos they r scottish lol
August 29th, 2007 at 5:43 pm
i definatley sound realy common online lol cos i use text speak everywhere …
August 29th, 2007 at 7:46 pm
Lol. No vinyaya I am an American with an acceptable vocabulary. Intellectual beings would consider my talking normal. lol, thats nerd for maybe everyone else is just unsmart. On top of being American I’m also Minnesotan but don’t let the nasty rumors about us fool you. We don’t wear plaid and eat hotdishes all the time -_-
August 29th, 2007 at 10:26 pm
I’m an intelleigent american!!! I’m alabamian, but that doesn’t mean I’m a hillbilly!
August 29th, 2007 at 11:56 pm
Oh and ty guys for all comments, chapter four is now done! YAY!!!!!! *throws confetti and chinese take-out boxes*
August 30th, 2007 at 9:39 pm
ok…no one has commented! AAAH!
August 31st, 2007 at 1:57 am
Throws confetti and chinese take out boxes? Still, write some more!
August 31st, 2007 at 8:22 pm
omg u two are so far away from me i am in little old scotland edinburgh! ina tiny little village lol u r soooo lucky to be in america lol
August 31st, 2007 at 8:25 pm
hey this is a cool fact my comp is facing america lol *waves* YAY keep going i loved chappie four!
August 31st, 2007 at 8:26 pm
remember 2 comment on whiskey lullaby soon cos i wanna know what u think…
August 31st, 2007 at 9:35 pm
Yeah, I’m trying ot get around to chapter five, so…Umm…yeah!
Srry for the wait!
September 1st, 2007 at 1:25 am
scotland, american……is nobody out there aussie!!!!!!
September 1st, 2007 at 8:14 am
r u?????????? kl this rox aussie american and scottish
September 1st, 2007 at 8:37 am
yea im aussie but everyone i talk to is like “r u from another country” AHHHH SO ANNOYIN …..lol
September 1st, 2007 at 4:44 pm
lol |)
September 2nd, 2007 at 1:05 am
Chappy 5 is fin`e yay!!!!!!!!!!!
R&R !!!!!! I suck at writing by the way, so yeah!
September 2nd, 2007 at 3:39 am
actually I think its a little too short.Keep adding its getting better!!! sorry this is random but…GO CALIFORNIA!! U.S.A. forever!
September 2nd, 2007 at 3:41 am
yup it says it Im California born and bread.;)Im also half filipino! oh yah!!!! fil-am(filipino-american)(;
September 2nd, 2007 at 4:29 pm
I’ll try and update soon, kk?
September 2nd, 2007 at 6:36 pm
ok I’ll keep checking this story cuz I cant wait til its done!!! P.S. I live near San Fransisco,so seeing the Golden Gate Bridge isnt that special to me anymore.;)
September 3rd, 2007 at 1:02 am
not special?!? oh well, yeah I guess it depends on the person… ;D
September 3rd, 2007 at 2:43 am
really Ive seen the Golden Gate Bridge like what a thousand times!!! Same goes for the people Ive known since kindergarten!! basicly its big and red and takes fifteen minutes to get across!! You know Im not mad Im actually proud that I get to see it.oh sorry I type to too much.keep adding to the story please.
September 3rd, 2007 at 2:44 am
btw where r u from Holly314?? Im just a little curious.;))
September 3rd, 2007 at 4:34 pm
umm..well, Alabama. The Heart of Dixie. not much tourism down here though, so yeah. I’ll try to add soon, but u know I’m havin writers block…again. Have u read the 5th avocado? That’s so weird.
September 3rd, 2007 at 6:07 pm
I know its just sooo freakin weird.why would anyone want to write something that weird exept because they’re bored? it was really strange.its ok everyone gets writers block every once in a while..it’ll pass.;)
September 4th, 2007 at 2:19 am
YAY!!! CHAPTER 6 DONE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Enjoy!
It took me like 1 hour to write. It feels longer than it is.
September 4th, 2007 at 2:29 am
see writers block passes quickly…usualy and its a great story so far.I cant wait til its done!
September 4th, 2007 at 9:36 pm
hmmm..no one has reviewed exept luv-arty all day..is my chapter that bad…?
September 5th, 2007 at 1:18 am
omg! maybe someone will review if I write another chapter, becuz I’m itchin to, but I’tll have to be l8r. Clarinet practice. bye 4 now u guys. L8r.
September 5th, 2007 at 3:03 am
GAAH! Chappy 7 half-done. Good night to u all! *snores*
September 5th, 2007 at 3:58 am
maybe some people are soooooo busy.ya know some people starting school some already in it like me.I not checking as much as I used to.and its a great story.btw ur 12 right,Im 11 turning 12 this JANUARY.right now while Im writing this its Sept.4 in California.
September 5th, 2007 at 3:58 am
;):)
September 5th, 2007 at 8:36 am
i feel like a loner cause i dont see many aussie on the iste….lol
September 5th, 2007 at 10:58 pm
oh wel..yeah, I been banned from compute. I’m not supposed to be on, but I can’t do any more wting today srry….
September 6th, 2007 at 4:14 am
ohh you play clarinet…I play flute!!!I was banned to.but my mom reduced my sentence.lol;)
September 6th, 2007 at 8:22 am
im gonna sound so stupid but wat does a clarinet sound like???
September 6th, 2007 at 9:39 pm
Low. mellow, and when it gets high, it must say it sounds kinda reedy.
September 6th, 2007 at 10:06 pm
Oh and yay! chappy 7 done! better than be4, so R&R pleez! I enjoy having ppl salvate over my work.
September 7th, 2007 at 3:00 pm
hey cool i play alto sax and clarinet and oboe!!!!!!!!!!!!!! we should like start a cyber wind group lol
September 7th, 2007 at 3:10 pm
and oh no!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! they should know by now that seperating is the worst idea!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! i am anticipating the next chapter greatly!!!!!!! keep going lol u rock!
September 7th, 2007 at 6:09 pm
oh no holly or arty could get killed! nooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo!
September 7th, 2007 at 9:46 pm
oh they won’t die. Holly won’t get far, believe me,kk? But they don’t die, I’m not that morbid.
I fixed as many of the spelling errors and grammar errors I could find, so yeah:))
September 9th, 2007 at 6:58 pm
yay!!!
September 9th, 2007 at 7:01 pm
ok, srry, but yeah this is very short becuz it isn’t finished yet kk? I’ll write more l8r today.
September 11th, 2007 at 2:07 am
ok, chappy 8 finished. If I don’t get any comments soon, I won’t write any more until I hear begs. Honestly people. Gettin a little slow around here, so I’m probably gonna end up commenting to myself, like I am now, so yeah. R&R pleez.
September 11th, 2007 at 3:44 am
hurray finally!srry about the outburst.;)ohhh pls. keep adding.:)
September 14th, 2007 at 9:57 pm
oh somebody comment! It’s been 3 days since I even got a comment! lord. Well, I won’t type anymore until I get a comment from someone other than Luv-artygirl.
September 14th, 2007 at 10:21 pm
i will never give up on you holly314! don’t worry (and i will tell everyone to read this or else to!) great chappie lol keep going!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
September 15th, 2007 at 3:03 am
great story.update pls.
September 15th, 2007 at 3:05 am
wow its an awesome story so far!!…even if I am an A/M shipper.dont hate me.Im new
September 15th, 2007 at 3:08 am
I like it.its not the kind of story I usually read but I actually like it….but Im like amazingly=different….Im an A/M shipper.
September 15th, 2007 at 3:10 am
welcome amazingly=different!!HOPE YOU LIKE THE FANFICS SO FAR!!!=):)
September 16th, 2007 at 11:08 pm
ok, well..ummm….can;t think of anything for chappy 9….
September 17th, 2007 at 3:01 am
whyyyyy why is the world so cruel!!! srry but please I am going to die….of anticipation
September 17th, 2007 at 12:37 pm
some one has to come and save them… maybe trouble and root… and artemis is accidently left behind because they take holly when she is sleeping and artemis is out getting food and they think holly is ill…………..ah well do whatever you think best lol!
September 17th, 2007 at 9:46 pm
No, I need them to stay awhile, and get everything into routine, and then the people tear them away from the little society they have( sort of…only 2 ppl)
September 18th, 2007 at 4:55 pm
awwwwwwwwwwwww…
September 19th, 2007 at 12:00 am
I’m morbid, get used to it!!!! Society meaning, everything is organized, and they have schedules of what they need to do, and stuff like that, not what you are thinking of.. (I don’t think….)
September 20th, 2007 at 2:34 am
ok its tommarrow update pls.;)
September 20th, 2007 at 9:40 pm
ok, ok yes! I shall!
September 21st, 2007 at 9:34 pm
srry I didn’t update! I had to play at a football game, that lasted till 8:30, and then I had to go to bed, so yeah. I’ll try, but tonight’s pretty busy too, so….
September 22nd, 2007 at 10:35 pm
ok, chappy nine up!!!!!!!!!! HOORAY!!! GIMME A CHAPTER!!!! *people in background, “CHAPTER!!!”* GIMME A NINE!!!! *people in background again, “NINE!!” *
WHAT PROFOUND AND ANONYMOUS THING AM I TRYING TO SAY??????!?!? *people blahblahblah,”CHAPPY NINE IS DONE, AND NOW LUV-ARTYGIRL WON’T KILL ME!!!! YAYAYAYAYAY!!!!!!!”
September 22nd, 2007 at 10:36 pm
ROFL, I am commenting to my self again! lolol….that’s like the only reason I have 80 comments with only 9 chapters. Half of them are mine, so I’m going to see If I can take mine off the top tens board.
September 23rd, 2007 at 2:51 am
yaaaaaaaaaaaaaay!!!!!!!you bet I wont kill you!!!
September 23rd, 2007 at 7:15 pm
Story makes it seem like they’ve been there for weeks, but really they’ve only been there…hmm..three days, and four nights, so yeah. Holly has gone completely out of her mind, and Artemis is…well…being, Artemis. Also, chapter 10, or half of it has been added!!!! YAY!!! read the end of chappy ten for more info. (I sound like MMK lol. No offense MMK)
September 26th, 2007 at 2:49 am
Ok, I haven’t had a comment in a few days, and I am really getting frustrated, so pleez review. PLEEZ!!! GAAAAAAAAH!!!!!!!!!*pulls out hair*
September 27th, 2007 at 3:56 am
Im building up the anticipation.I wont review til you add more.k thx
September 27th, 2007 at 3:59 am
OH I HATE SCHOOL!!!WORKS BEEN PILING UP. I seriously love ur story.if you could I’d like an update pls.
September 29th, 2007 at 7:41 pm
I like potatoes!!!! and this story!! I also love updates!!!! you could update right??pls.pls.pls.pls.pls. PLEEEEEEEEASE
September 30th, 2007 at 3:14 am
ummm.oook…Mabye l8r…
October 1st, 2007 at 2:23 am
AWWWWWW ok I’ll wait……(2 seconds l8r)ok its l8r………ok I’ll wait more.Im hungry Im gonna go get food.=$ mmmmmm fooood.
October 7th, 2007 at 7:00 pm
LOL!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!SORRY 4 DA EXCLAMATION MARKS!
October 7th, 2007 at 7:01 pm
IM CRAZY!
October 8th, 2007 at 11:37 pm
uh, yeah.
October 9th, 2007 at 2:50 am
awwww.still nut’n’.me sad.=(:(
October 11th, 2007 at 3:04 am
ok im gonna still wait 4 as long as it takes.Im NEVER sErIoUs FeR LoNg.and I aM TyPiNg LiKe DiS On pUrPoSe.
October 11th, 2007 at 9:51 pm
So srry…I can’t think of nothin….
October 17th, 2007 at 7:49 pm
lol cool update it soon!
October 19th, 2007 at 2:06 am
Wow. We read this poem today. First it said someone had died. Then, it said that someone had a wife then died. Then, it said that someone had a kid and died again! I felt a little confused about that. That is how I feel about this too.
October 19th, 2007 at 9:40 pm
they’re practically trading emotions. Everyone is capable of that, but their ability was triggered by panic, and need.
November 1st, 2007 at 2:14 am
InTeReStInG! iT iS rElLy GoOd I cAn’T wAiT 4 MoRe!
November 4th, 2007 at 3:03 pm
You know it still says that this story is a oneshot at the very beginning lol. It has 11 chapters now so it isn’t a oneshot!
November 4th, 2007 at 6:41 pm
what is a oneshot?
November 8th, 2007 at 10:33 pm
Uh yeah I guess I’ll remove it now, since it’s like the longest half interesting thing I’ve ever written..
November 25th, 2007 at 4:30 am
Wow, this is really quite amusing! I love the setting, keep it up!
November 25th, 2007 at 4:44 am
I didn’t write that question! eeeepp1 someone is using my name! EGAD! I have FANS!! or unfortunately probably like Vinyaya stalkers. YIKES!
November 27th, 2007 at 3:22 am
LOL, Ok i’ll try to get chappy twelve out…Will you guys help spread the word? Because this story is completely buried now, And I’m not getting many reviews anymore…Please?
December 15th, 2007 at 7:10 pm
okay, I’ll try to. It’s a really good story! You should put a link to in in your siggy at the forum.
December 24th, 2007 at 2:13 am
good idea! I’m about to type chapter twelve!
December 24th, 2007 at 1:34 pm
ooooooooooooooooh…Artemis slipped up in chapter twelve!!!!!
January 18th, 2008 at 2:09 am
AAAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH THIS IS SUCH A GOOD STORY YOU SHOULD TOTALLY ADD ON MAYBE A SECOND ONE
January 27th, 2008 at 4:24 pm
I’m sorry for neglecting this story, I’ll try to update soon! Just so many other things going on, I barely get any time to write anymore!
March 28th, 2008 at 10:03 pm
OHHHH wow that’s great, I don’t usually like stories that are all Atemis and Holly but this is really good.
July 4th, 2008 at 9:55 pm
i got lost…please make the story clearer
it seems like you wrote this hurriedly, so slow down. quality is better than more words
September 17th, 2008 at 3:56 pm
GOOD!!! SORRY HAVE NO TIME TO WRITE MORE!!
BYE!!!!