Artemis’s first love (part 1)
Written on October 10th, 2007 by captain_artys_girlxxStory Details
- Category: General and Action and Romance
- Author: captain_artys_girlxx
- Word Count: 982
- Read 235 times
Authors note: This is my first story, but i’ve read heaps of every one elses so i was in spired. By the way, I really like sam & dean from supernatural, so i may make them my brothers in heaps of the stories i might write. HOPE YOU ENJOY!! ;D
Chapter 1: Kidnapped
Livia stepped out of the black Chevrolet Impala, pocketing her gun in its arm pouch, grabbing her backpack, & waving goodbye to her two “accomplices”
She watched the cars occupants wave back, turn the car & drive away. Livia turned to the door. She put in the keys, opening the door, closing it behind her & putting three locks on. She dropped the bag on the couch & made her way to her room, rubbing her eyes sleepily. Hunting wasn’t one of the easiest jobs to have.
As she walked into her room & flicked on the light, she saw a pale, raven haired, blue eyed boy about 13 looking at her thoughtfully. Livia slowly reached for the gun handle & took careful steps towards her desk.
The boy stood up but went towards the door.
Livia knew exactly who this boy was.
“Artemis Fowl” she breathed.She was slowly manipulating the gun & putting the safelock on. She then tried to sneak the gun onto her desk.
The pale youth replied, smiling at her.
“Ahh, I see you have heard of me. Not surprising, you seem to know a lot about me miss Livia. Which is what I wish to discuss with you.”
Wow, thought Livia. THE Artemis Fowl is here in my room & wanting to talk to me.
ME!!
This is so cool! Better take the element of surprise & act smart.
” well that’s fine with me Artemis, but how will you cover my dissapearance?”
Livia imposed
“Oh I have a friend to take care of that problem” Artemis replied, giving Livia a very smug grin.
Oh my god that grin so hot.
He’s gorgeous!! said Livia in her head. whoa calm down girly, she told herself, what did your brothers teach you. Don’t get to excited. yet. Hang on, did he say he had a friend? I bet I know who… she thought evily.
“Let me guess” she answered, leaning one hand on her desk & crossing over a leg. ” Captain Holly Short of the LEPrecon?” she said quite smugly.
Artemis frowned slightly.
“How did you know about her? No matter we’ll find out soon enough. Butler, if you please.”
Artemis stepped slightly to the side & dropped his hands to his side.
” Wow butler is here to?!” asked Livia half excitedly. Faster than an eye could blink, Butler stepped out from behind Artemis & shot a tranguiliser at her.
” She is smarter than she looks sir” Said Butler as Livia fainted. ” I also found this” added Butler handing Artemis Livia’s backpack.
“Ahh, good work old friend, no doubt her gear from going on one of her “hunts” eh?” Inqiured Artemis, as he had a rummage through her bag. Butler saw something glint from the corner of his eye.He walked over towards Livia’s desk & saw a double barrel shot gun lying there. The handle on it was made of oak wood & the Barrels seemed to be made of pure silver. A lab test would confirm that. But what really cought Butlers attention was the strange symbol carved on the base. It seemed to be a circle with a star inside it. Strange. He’d have to ask Artemis later what it was. He quickly pocketed the gun.
” She seems to be a quite knowing , yet suspicious young lady.” Butler implied, as he returned to Artemis.
“Hmmm, that is why she interests me.” He replied.” I’ll have to continue looking through the bag a later stage” He finished. Putting the bag on the floor. He took a few steps towards Livia & knelt down beside her body, brushing away a lock of beautiful brunette hair. She’s quite pretty, he told himself, smiling at the girl. The smile soon vanished, Blasted puberty! he scolded himself quietly. First business, then the issue of my feelings for this girl, he quietly told himself.Then he stopped, what would mother have to say about this? What would she think if I had a “girlfriend”? he asked himself in his head.
Holly materialised next to Artemis.
” How did she know about me?” she asked Artemis.
“I’m not sure,Holly, But we’ll find out soon enough. Butler could you please take her to the shuttle?”
“Of course sir” replied the Giant manservant. He bent down & tied Livia’s hands together with rope, in case she would try & run later on.He then hoisted the girl onto his shoulder. Holly looked at Artemis as he stood up. Could it be? Did this mudboy like the girl? Better wait & see, she told herself. Then she spoke to him.
” She’s a nice person Artemis. I kept an eye on her just like you asked, but shes a kind, caring person. She could really help make this planet a better, safer place to live. Are you sure about this?”
She asked the boy genius, placing an elfin hand on his shoulder. Artemis looked into the fairy captain’s eyes & saw concern, he turned towards Butler & looked at the girl on his shoulder. He faced holly again.
“yes” he aswered finally ” a few questions about how she knows us & then… we’ll see.” he finished. They all stared walking towards the shuttle port. Artemis walked up towards Livia & gently stroked her cheek.
“we’ll see” he whispered, smiling at her.


(7 votes, average: 3.86 out of 5)
October 10th, 2007 at 7:28 am
So what do you guys think? plz R&R ;D
October 10th, 2007 at 1:50 pm
This is really good. Artemis in love with a girl. This is how I like a story to start out.
October 10th, 2007 at 9:01 pm
ummmmmmmmm……. oh yeah…..LUCKY LIVIA!!! she’s must be soooooooooo happy!! i wouldn’t be scared of Artemis even if he had a HUGE gun!!!!! I would love it sooooooooo much if i was kiddnapped by him(mabye I would be scared of Butler though)!!!!! *sigh* I can feel him stroking my cheek lovingly *sigh again* Being kidnapped from my room would be so cool IF it was by my fave book chara!!(no, i am not a traitor to the loyal HP or AF fans out there!!!) LUV YOU SOOOOO MUCH ARTY!!! take me away from this place!! JK!!
October 10th, 2007 at 10:17 pm
Oh…sounds good. I like the bit of mystery…
I think that you could make it more dramatic AND more realistic in the paragraph when Liva is thinking about Artemis and how hot he is…pretend you are Liva and write it asif you were her. That will make your awesome first chapter absolutely amazing. Can’t wait for part 2!
October 11th, 2007 at 1:03 am
I like this. Livia’s very mysterious (though she seems a little Mary Sue. Be careful!).
Your spelling and grammar are pretty good, but the use of & instead of ‘and’ is a little annoying.
October 11th, 2007 at 1:22 am
I agree with MMK. The use of “&” instaed of “and” is a little bit annoying to me too. I still like it. You have just a few spelling errors, but other than that, it is really good. Though, Livia does seem a little bit like a Mary Sue.
October 11th, 2007 at 1:31 am
really? ok get rid of the ‘&’, put in ‘ and’. Thnx Guys! I’m glad u like it.
oh and whose this mary sue girl?
October 11th, 2007 at 1:42 am
A Mary Sue is what we call a female character who is too perfect. All we’re doing is warning you that Livia should have some faults, too.
October 11th, 2007 at 1:48 am
Exactly wht MMK said. At first, I thought that a Mary Sue was someones relative.
October 11th, 2007 at 2:43 am
who is Mary Sue? Good story but not very original it has th same beginning as many others. I guess I will not rate because I don’t know what will happen.
October 11th, 2007 at 2:47 am
When people call someone a Mary Sue, they are saying the person is to perfect.
October 11th, 2007 at 2:53 am
hmm….. There r a few people at school who act that way (they r very flawed) I don’t know if they know what a Mary Sue is though…
October 11th, 2007 at 3:27 am
Very cute. Are you planning to continue? They are right, Livia is a bit Mary Sue, but we don’t know enough about her to call her that. Write again soon! That was awesome for a first fanfic.
October 11th, 2007 at 4:47 am
well, i just put out the second chapter, & yer i am Livia by the way. Thats my name. well i guess i was so busy concentrating on making a few twists here and there or a little more detail i kinda didn’t do much describing of Livia! oh well. i hope it gets a bit clearer in the next chapter. currently working on chapter 3.
p.s Livia has abit of a tough life because she battles all these evil things so she gets abit lonely. She feels special when someone treats her lovingly. But she doesn’t quite trust everyone.
there is that abit better? now she’s not so perfect. I hope lol
;) thanks guys. Keep up the good work!
;D xoxox
October 11th, 2007 at 4:59 am
|TO LiViA|
That’s wonderful Liv-{ii}-ahh! :] Baha.x3 You have talent buddy!
I think that’s great!
`x0—
smiley
[cass]
|FR0M CASS|
October 25th, 2007 at 3:26 am
wow.. that is such a great start… im readin part two!
December 16th, 2007 at 12:01 am
I WANT TO GET KIDDNAPED BY ARTEMIS!!!!!!!
anyway good story.
December 22nd, 2007 at 1:28 pm
Dayummmmm! Artemis is soooo smexii!
omg i should get him to kidnap me so i can mess with his mind and get to go all *rawr* for me lol!