Artemis Fowl and The Nightmare Revenge
Written on February 22nd, 2008 by JuliaStory Details
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Holly clipped a power regulator to her shoulder. Actually, it was a com link to Fowl Man, but no one else knew that. Dropping through the open window of the attic, she almost crashed into Butler. He wheeled around, grabbed her arms and pulled her up to the light. “Oh, it’s you. Did you see Juliet when you came in?” Holly stared at him. “What? Do I look like I’m Juliet’s keeper?” she demanded. Butler glared at her fiercely. Holly changed her mind hurriedly. “Ok, ok. No, I didn’t. I’m sure she can take care of herself, Butler,” The bodyguard groaned.
“She missed dinner, Holly. Even worse, she missed dessert! Does that sound like her to you?” Holly thought about it. Butler was right.
Foaly chuckled as he hijacked a mud man satellite. No decent security whatsoever. Pathetic. Moving it over Northern Europe, he scanned the area where the fault lines should be. Nothing. Frowning, he tried another country’s. Still nothing. He checked the fairy space portal and…D’arvit! How come he hadn’t thought of this before? The fault lines were completely invisible to all kinds of technology, even the fairy’s! His hunch had been correct, this wasn’t man made…but if it wasn’t, whose was it?
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February 22nd, 2008 at 12:31 pm
This is basically a re-write of my last story; when i got back on most of it had gone missing so this is still my first story.
Please please please rate or review!
February 22nd, 2008 at 4:29 pm
Poor Arty! He had a nightmare!
February 22nd, 2008 at 4:33 pm
I like it. Good storyline. Great grammar and spelling. Some people just don’t worry about typos and leave fixing it to the editors. But you might want to consider changing the title. It’s not to catchy. How about something similar, like “The Dream Master” or “Artemis’ Dream Dilemna”? But I think that this story deserves 5/5 stars. Keep up the good work!
February 22nd, 2008 at 9:28 pm
Holly almost got killed while Foaly’s getting free food!
Revenge by a hamster? Oh– excuse me, revenge by a guinea pig?
I thought Sool got fired?
February 22nd, 2008 at 10:43 pm
I really like it. Great idea, and the characters are very well written. Great job so far!
February 23rd, 2008 at 1:40 am
I like it so far keep on writting! Ther is a really good plot, Update soon!
February 23rd, 2008 at 2:57 am
Yay! U finally used my idea! Here’s another suggestion. Maybe the “spirit” is haunting Artemis because of the thing with the Fowl Star and some other hidden secret about it. Maybe Artemis Fowl I was smuggling something or going to Russia for some other sinister purpose.
February 23rd, 2008 at 3:22 am
I like it! good story line. Here’s one little adjustment: enquired is spelled inquired. With an I. And also, at the end of chapter 3, Are you sure that’s not too story-giving-awaying? Oh well, I like it a lot! Good job, and keep writing!
February 26th, 2008 at 7:49 pm
oops! the computer lost everything again, so i had to re write it! im not sure if i missed anything out, but if i did, please tell me
February 26th, 2008 at 7:55 pm
enquired? inquired? i think that there are two different words. o well, if i am wrong i will change it. sorry about sool, peeps, but i needed a stupid commander.
February 26th, 2008 at 8:08 pm
ok, when i first started writing, i didn’t realise how long it would be. should i keep writing or not?
February 28th, 2008 at 10:00 am
never mind
February 28th, 2008 at 3:20 pm
I see that you changed the title. Much better!
May 27th, 2008 at 8:32 am
Hmmm. The writing is marginal. The storyline is marginal. The characters? Marginal. THOUGH. Since you’re one of my good friends in R/L, I guess I feel entitled to give you a 1/5. *cough*
JOKES! Julia - it rocked. Good ideas, good EVERYTHING. If only you wrote that well in our stories…..haha. 5/5. KEEP WRITING. Though, of COURSE, your writing is NOTHING matched to mine….
Haha. You go girl.