Artemis Fowl and The Nightmare Revenge
Written on February 22nd, 2008 by JuliaStory Details
Loading ... N’vall bared his little rodent teeth at Foaly’s image. “Well, pony boy; soon your pet mud boy’s dreams will come true. Now it’s your turn.” Pressing down with both paws on the controls, he managed to pull a lever towards him. “Give Morpheas his instructions. Don’t forget the draught! ” he squealed into the mike.
“Yes, sir.” came the drugged reply. Juliet Butler was well and truly caught!
Foaly leapt into bed and wiggled his hooves happily. Caballine had agreed to take a trip with him to Atlantis. Of course, it was mainly because she had a client there, but it was still something, right? He was going to have lovely dreams tonight.
Foaly could feel his life force ebbing away from him as he watched Caballine walk away without once looking back. This was the first time he had had a serious relationship, and now he had ruined it. They did have a serious argument before, but was all a misunderstanding. This time it was all his fault, this time he would never get her back. All his fault, all his fault…he could hear the death knell already…
Dong! Dong! Dong! Foaly slammed a back hoof onto the alarm clock. D’arvit, now what was he going to do now that he had lost Caballine? Wait a second…he had been asleep! It had all been a dream…no, nightmare…so real. Foaly clopped away to work, trying to forget his horrible vision. At least it wouldn’t come true…would it?
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February 22nd, 2008 at 12:31 pm
This is basically a re-write of my last story; when i got back on most of it had gone missing so this is still my first story.
Please please please rate or review!
February 22nd, 2008 at 4:29 pm
Poor Arty! He had a nightmare!
February 22nd, 2008 at 4:33 pm
I like it. Good storyline. Great grammar and spelling. Some people just don’t worry about typos and leave fixing it to the editors. But you might want to consider changing the title. It’s not to catchy. How about something similar, like “The Dream Master” or “Artemis’ Dream Dilemna”? But I think that this story deserves 5/5 stars. Keep up the good work!
February 22nd, 2008 at 9:28 pm
Holly almost got killed while Foaly’s getting free food!
Revenge by a hamster? Oh– excuse me, revenge by a guinea pig?
I thought Sool got fired?
February 22nd, 2008 at 10:43 pm
I really like it. Great idea, and the characters are very well written. Great job so far!
February 23rd, 2008 at 1:40 am
I like it so far keep on writting! Ther is a really good plot, Update soon!
February 23rd, 2008 at 2:57 am
Yay! U finally used my idea! Here’s another suggestion. Maybe the “spirit” is haunting Artemis because of the thing with the Fowl Star and some other hidden secret about it. Maybe Artemis Fowl I was smuggling something or going to Russia for some other sinister purpose.
February 23rd, 2008 at 3:22 am
I like it! good story line. Here’s one little adjustment: enquired is spelled inquired. With an I. And also, at the end of chapter 3, Are you sure that’s not too story-giving-awaying? Oh well, I like it a lot! Good job, and keep writing!
February 26th, 2008 at 7:49 pm
oops! the computer lost everything again, so i had to re write it! im not sure if i missed anything out, but if i did, please tell me
February 26th, 2008 at 7:55 pm
enquired? inquired? i think that there are two different words. o well, if i am wrong i will change it. sorry about sool, peeps, but i needed a stupid commander.
February 26th, 2008 at 8:08 pm
ok, when i first started writing, i didn’t realise how long it would be. should i keep writing or not?
February 28th, 2008 at 10:00 am
never mind
February 28th, 2008 at 3:20 pm
I see that you changed the title. Much better!
May 27th, 2008 at 8:32 am
Hmmm. The writing is marginal. The storyline is marginal. The characters? Marginal. THOUGH. Since you’re one of my good friends in R/L, I guess I feel entitled to give you a 1/5. *cough*
JOKES! Julia - it rocked. Good ideas, good EVERYTHING. If only you wrote that well in our stories…..haha. 5/5. KEEP WRITING. Though, of COURSE, your writing is NOTHING matched to mine….
Haha. You go girl.