Artemis Fowl and The Nightmare Revenge
Written on February 22nd, 2008 by JuliaStory Details
Loading ...N’vall squeaked in relief. The mud boy had almost figured it out there. Luckily for the scheming rodent, his unwilling servant had seen it hovering in the boys head and had quickly banished it. Morpheas, Lord of Slumber and Dreams, was in the clutches of a guinea pig.
Butler winked at Holly and connected her helmet’s com chip to the audio speakers. Turning the mike on, Artemis steepled his fingers and waited. Foaly’s voice soon made itself heard. “Well, Holly, have you squeezed any useful information from the mud boy? I have to admit, that one’s brain is amazing. ”. Artemis smiled maliciously. “Why thank you, Foaly. It’s a pleasure to be recognised. ” In the control room, Foaly jumped and spoke indignantly. “You! I’ll have you know I didn’t mean that! Anyway, do you have any, uh, useful theories on the fault line?” The Irish genius thought back to his nightmare, and its strange relationship with what he had seen earlier that day. He decided not to mention it. “If I had your resources, Foaly, I am sure I would plenty by now. Unfortunately I do not.” Foaly sniffed, his pride wounded for the umpteenth time by the young prodigy. “Well, if you have nothing useful, then I have better things to do with my time.” The connection went dead. Holly looked at Artemis reproachfully, half amused and half angry. “You shouldn’t have offended him, Artemis.” He looked at her strangely.
“I don’t think it made much difference to our effectiveness.” The major glared at him, before giving up and bursting out laughing. “Well, I have to go now. If your mighty brain figures anything out, give me a call. ” Butler nodded goodbye as she shielded and flew off.
February 22nd, 2008 at 12:31 pm
This is basically a re-write of my last story; when i got back on most of it had gone missing so this is still my first story.
Please please please rate or review!
February 22nd, 2008 at 4:29 pm
Poor Arty! He had a nightmare!
February 22nd, 2008 at 4:33 pm
I like it. Good storyline. Great grammar and spelling. Some people just don’t worry about typos and leave fixing it to the editors. But you might want to consider changing the title. It’s not to catchy. How about something similar, like “The Dream Master” or “Artemis’ Dream Dilemna”? But I think that this story deserves 5/5 stars. Keep up the good work!
February 22nd, 2008 at 9:28 pm
Holly almost got killed while Foaly’s getting free food!
Revenge by a hamster? Oh– excuse me, revenge by a guinea pig?
I thought Sool got fired?
February 22nd, 2008 at 10:43 pm
I really like it. Great idea, and the characters are very well written. Great job so far!
February 23rd, 2008 at 1:40 am
I like it so far keep on writting! Ther is a really good plot, Update soon!
February 23rd, 2008 at 2:57 am
Yay! U finally used my idea! Here’s another suggestion. Maybe the “spirit” is haunting Artemis because of the thing with the Fowl Star and some other hidden secret about it. Maybe Artemis Fowl I was smuggling something or going to Russia for some other sinister purpose.
February 23rd, 2008 at 3:22 am
I like it! good story line. Here’s one little adjustment: enquired is spelled inquired. With an I. And also, at the end of chapter 3, Are you sure that’s not too story-giving-awaying? Oh well, I like it a lot! Good job, and keep writing!
February 26th, 2008 at 7:49 pm
oops! the computer lost everything again, so i had to re write it! im not sure if i missed anything out, but if i did, please tell me
February 26th, 2008 at 7:55 pm
enquired? inquired? i think that there are two different words. o well, if i am wrong i will change it. sorry about sool, peeps, but i needed a stupid commander.
February 26th, 2008 at 8:08 pm
ok, when i first started writing, i didn’t realise how long it would be. should i keep writing or not?
February 28th, 2008 at 10:00 am
never mind
February 28th, 2008 at 3:20 pm
I see that you changed the title. Much better!
May 27th, 2008 at 8:32 am
Hmmm. The writing is marginal. The storyline is marginal. The characters? Marginal. THOUGH. Since you’re one of my good friends in R/L, I guess I feel entitled to give you a 1/5. *cough*
JOKES! Julia - it rocked. Good ideas, good EVERYTHING. If only you wrote that well in our stories…..haha. 5/5. KEEP WRITING. Though, of COURSE, your writing is NOTHING matched to mine….
Haha. You go girl.