Artemis Fowl and The Nightmare Revenge
Written on February 22nd, 2008 by JuliaStory Details
Loading ...Water, swirling water, cutting off his hearts frantic pounding, robbing his brain of sanity, taking the hope of life away in its swirling current….He couldn’t feel his hands, he had almost lost the power to control his movements ….The water was a living thing, desperate for him to join it in its miry depths…. He pounded on the lid of his imagination, crying out for mercy, for anything…Then the vision changed, and a roaring nemesis of flames sped toward him…no, this was magma, the lava that had not yet erupted. Magma! He turned to run only to find his way blocked by a chasm, a chasm in which yet more magma flowed…
Artemis woke up, his head rearing up to collide with a muscular chest. “Wake up Artemis!” a stentorian voice was echoing through his head. “Wake up!” Artemis sat up gingerly and stared. Butler hastily got off him and removed his arms. “What was going on?” he enquired gently. His employer opened his mouth, then changed his mind and reached for a laptop that was stowed on the bureau, and started typing furiously. Butler waited patiently for him to finish, his eyes roaming the room for signs of danger.
Artemis knew there was nothing to be concerned of in the room itself. The nightmare had been so real, he really had thought he was about to die – although Butler holding him down hadn’t helped. I suppose it was to keep me from hurting myself. What worried him was that he had been having the same nightmares time and time again…and he was certain they had nothing to do with his imagination.
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February 22nd, 2008 at 12:31 pm
This is basically a re-write of my last story; when i got back on most of it had gone missing so this is still my first story.
Please please please rate or review!
February 22nd, 2008 at 4:29 pm
Poor Arty! He had a nightmare!
February 22nd, 2008 at 4:33 pm
I like it. Good storyline. Great grammar and spelling. Some people just don’t worry about typos and leave fixing it to the editors. But you might want to consider changing the title. It’s not to catchy. How about something similar, like “The Dream Master” or “Artemis’ Dream Dilemna”? But I think that this story deserves 5/5 stars. Keep up the good work!
February 22nd, 2008 at 9:28 pm
Holly almost got killed while Foaly’s getting free food!
Revenge by a hamster? Oh– excuse me, revenge by a guinea pig?
I thought Sool got fired?
February 22nd, 2008 at 10:43 pm
I really like it. Great idea, and the characters are very well written. Great job so far!
February 23rd, 2008 at 1:40 am
I like it so far keep on writting! Ther is a really good plot, Update soon!
February 23rd, 2008 at 2:57 am
Yay! U finally used my idea! Here’s another suggestion. Maybe the “spirit” is haunting Artemis because of the thing with the Fowl Star and some other hidden secret about it. Maybe Artemis Fowl I was smuggling something or going to Russia for some other sinister purpose.
February 23rd, 2008 at 3:22 am
I like it! good story line. Here’s one little adjustment: enquired is spelled inquired. With an I. And also, at the end of chapter 3, Are you sure that’s not too story-giving-awaying? Oh well, I like it a lot! Good job, and keep writing!
February 26th, 2008 at 7:49 pm
oops! the computer lost everything again, so i had to re write it! im not sure if i missed anything out, but if i did, please tell me
February 26th, 2008 at 7:55 pm
enquired? inquired? i think that there are two different words. o well, if i am wrong i will change it. sorry about sool, peeps, but i needed a stupid commander.
February 26th, 2008 at 8:08 pm
ok, when i first started writing, i didn’t realise how long it would be. should i keep writing or not?
February 28th, 2008 at 10:00 am
never mind
February 28th, 2008 at 3:20 pm
I see that you changed the title. Much better!
May 27th, 2008 at 8:32 am
Hmmm. The writing is marginal. The storyline is marginal. The characters? Marginal. THOUGH. Since you’re one of my good friends in R/L, I guess I feel entitled to give you a 1/5. *cough*
JOKES! Julia - it rocked. Good ideas, good EVERYTHING. If only you wrote that well in our stories…..haha. 5/5. KEEP WRITING. Though, of COURSE, your writing is NOTHING matched to mine….
Haha. You go girl.