Artemis Fowl and the Mallan Rebellion
Written on June 27th, 2008 by geniustkwStory Details
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Loading ...Chapter 2: The Rise of Kelp and Short
POLICE PLAZA, THE LOWER ELEMENTS
Since Ark Sool’s departure from the LEP, the position of the LEP commander was left vacant for a while, until The Council finally agreed that the famous Trouble Kelp be promoted to “Acting Commander of the LEP” while Holly Short was promoted to Lieutenant, and New No.2 of the LEP, this caused a bit of a uproar for the LEP old guards, but the new Commander Kelp was as adamant as commander root in letting Holly to get promoted.
Holly Short was visibly pleased with her new job now that she herself is now the first female lieutenant of the LEP, and she is all ready to cooperate with Commander Kelp to implement a set of reforms and allowing more females to join the LEP, and ultimately for her, her ambition now is to become the first female commander of the LEP, Holly in fact became quite a celebrity with her new status, the tabloids were talking about her, the newspapers writing about her, in a very positive way, all praising her efforts in the LEP, Holly Short now got more respect from her colleagues, and her new subordinates, and the People.
But all the celebrity fame that she was enjoying came to a halt, as when she was in Commander Kelp’s office, her handphone ringed, the call was an unknown call, and the caller was no doubt, Artemis Fowl The Second…
“Good Morning, Capt.. No, Lieutenant Short.” Quipped Artemis
“How did you know I got promoted?” Holly replied partly happy that Fowl called her Lieutenant, partly worried that Fowl went into some trouble and now needs the LEP to help out, she hated to think of that particularly after the arctic incident.
“It’s easy to hack into LEP files these days, since Foaly is on holiday. By the way, what happened to him.” Artemis was sitting at his computer, actually he knew it because of Mulch Diggums, and not because of a hack into LEP Files, in fact he hasn’t touched the computer for a few weeks, that is so unlike Artemis Fowl.
“Dunno, he’s been having a flu for a few weeks, fatigue, I guess, so Commander Kelp gave him a long leave.” Lieutenant Short looked rather blankly
“Oh I see.” Artemis quipped, sounding happier that since Foaly has a flu, maybe he could hack into the LEP files more often than he should. Just then, Artemis switched on his computer and started the hacking process, but to Artemis’s Horror, he couldn’t even hack into a simple LEP file now.
“What’s happening…” Artemis whispered, sounding a bit flabbergasted, though he was aware that Lieutenant Short was still on the phone.
“ Anyway Foaly said he just invented a new system, he said this is to protect LEP Files, and said that you would have a hard time cracking it.”
“ Ha! Lieutenant Short, hacking into LEP files is just so easy.” Artemis answered with confidence, but practically he was still shocked that how difficult it actually was now to hack LEP files now. Just as Artemis wanted to continue to speak about having tea with the new Commander Kelp, but Holly hanged up the phone, and all that Artemis could hear was a phone signal.
He continued trying to hack the LEP files, but as he tries to hack, he finds he that his computer is also getting hacked this instant, Artemis immediately shut the hacking software, and miraculously, the other hacker stopped, Artemis would have to use a lot of brainpower to solve this problem now and just as he wanted to, Domovoi Butler, his loyal bodyguard immediately signalled to Artemis his father Artemis Fowl the first, was in his room, he immediately went back to his simple schoolwork, but he was bored, dead bored, if only another adventure came, he would have thought, but an adventure would come soon, and he got more than he bargained for.
Some other stories by geniustkw:
- Artemis Fowl and the Frond Trophy Chapter 3 is out!
- Artemis Fowl and the Frond Trophy (Sneak Preview)
- Artemis Fowl and the Mallan Rebellion ending soon! (Sequel coming up!)
- Updates (geniustkw- AF and the Mallan Rebellion)
June 28th, 2008 at 4:40 am
Hi, I’m a teenager AF Fan from Singapore, just writing this for fun, but please give me comments.
June 29th, 2008 at 1:51 pm
Can anybody just give me a review? Chapter 3 added, Thanks!
geniustkw
July 2nd, 2008 at 10:19 pm
Wow! it’s good! you should keep going with the plot. now, is commander root dead, like in the opal deception, or just on vaction?
and thanks 4 the comments on my story!
July 3rd, 2008 at 3:23 am
You got a dictionary and thesaurus in your head! Can you please change some of the words please. I can’t understad.
July 3rd, 2008 at 8:52 am
Thanks a lot, everybody, yah I will try simplifying the words, and for commander root, he would be back in the plot and would play a very crucial character in the story, I’m now working on chapter 10, this story might be very long..
But continue to leave your comments, Thanks!
geniustkw (http://jiayanyixing94.blogspot.com)
July 4th, 2008 at 9:32 pm
the next chapter is great! i like the 100 questions thing
no offense to bentj96, but the big “juicy” words are the best part
that’s what makes a story good
July 4th, 2008 at 9:34 pm
oh, and please comment on my story
i changed it so the charachters are less ooc
thanks!
ps: are you chinese? I am
July 7th, 2008 at 12:36 pm
WOW!that was really good! you should be an Author one day! Maybe you could change all the names and stuff and publish it! it’s just Like the AF books!Write more!
P.S. thank you for the review you gave me!
July 7th, 2008 at 2:37 pm
(computerzandbks4ever), I am a chinese, singaporean chinese. I commented on your story, continue with yours, (Captain Short 711), Thanks for the compliment, Yah, Since I read AF Books, I have been so heavily influenced by Colfer’s writing, I like how he writes it, and now I’m doing chapter 11. Once again,to both of you, Thanks a lot!
geniustkw
July 7th, 2008 at 11:00 pm
neat! i can never find another chinese person, and now its nice to know that im not alone
I will continue with my story, but updates will be slow. (and i mean, paragraph by paragraph)
and thanks a lot to you!
July 8th, 2008 at 10:16 am
As the song goes, you’ll never walk alone… By the way, are you Singaporean?
July 8th, 2008 at 2:25 pm
Anyway, added chapters 7 and 8, hope you enjoy it and please give me more comments and reviews, thanks!
geniustkw
July 8th, 2008 at 2:33 pm
that was pretty good.
keep up the good work
July 8th, 2008 at 3:08 pm
You’re from Sing!?! ME TOO!!
Which part?
And your story was nice, keep the work up!
:)
( faster tell me which part! )
July 8th, 2008 at 11:34 pm
I LOVE your story!
July 9th, 2008 at 10:48 am
(arty_and_holly_4ever, Shanette, AF Rules) Thanks for your compliments and appreciation for the story, will continue this. (Shanette, I stay in North-East, Serangoon North, what about you?)
July 10th, 2008 at 12:41 pm
Totally amazing story. I wish I could write that good.
July 10th, 2008 at 2:19 pm
(Sean09) Thanks for the compliment, anybody can write good stuff like this,
Anyway for all readers, my progress will be quite slow as I have to write script for my school, for its national day celebration, disgustingly 45 minutes, I will be damn tired, so less of AF but don’t fret, work will resume and I’ve completed a few chapters already, so continue to give your comments.
geniustkw
July 10th, 2008 at 2:28 pm
Chapter 9’s in, Commander Julius Root’s returned!
geniustkw
July 10th, 2008 at 2:34 pm
Ahh, Serangoon. I’m pure north. Woodlands. I can see JB from here.
Ohh Root’s back! Can’t wait for more!
July 10th, 2008 at 6:13 pm
Please read my story “Youngest of the Fowl Line” I need more opinions peeps!
July 10th, 2008 at 7:22 pm
i’m not Singaporean. i dont know.
i was adopted when i was 2, so i have no idea.
im from Xi’an province, according to the agency i came from.
July 10th, 2008 at 7:23 pm
(i live in the US)
July 11th, 2008 at 8:35 pm
My my, you are a genius after all. It’s going to take some time to get through your story, but you have me gripped. I’m not quite finished, far from it in fact but still I am going to read. Your skill as a writer is as impressive as your vocabulary perhaps even more so. I’ll happily continue reading your story and when I finish I’ll give you the full review. It’s great so far and I’m confident that I won’t be disappointed. Brilliant.
~Jade Malice
July 12th, 2008 at 8:07 am
(Jade Malice) Thanks a lot. (computerzandbks4ever) It doesn’t matter, we are all chinese.
Everyone, Chapter 10’s added, finished my National Day script for my school, enjoy!
July 12th, 2008 at 1:36 pm
Wow! So far I have only read the first chapter, but I’m already glued to the story.
July 12th, 2008 at 1:42 pm
Any other people here Australian?
July 12th, 2008 at 5:17 pm
(ltnyle375) Thank you! Chapter 11 added, whole story would be finished by chapter 13, a shocking plot twist awaits…
July 14th, 2008 at 2:47 pm
Can anybody please continue to give me comments, I will be posting chapter 13 real soon….
July 15th, 2008 at 2:58 pm
Wow, you’re seriously PRO. Can’t wait for more!! I really love it!!
July 16th, 2008 at 1:47 pm
The whole story has completed already, so anyone is surprised about the plot twist?
geniustkw
July 17th, 2008 at 10:25 am
Not bad, but you should lay off the really long sentences. You’re overdosing on commas. Also; parts of the tenses were mangled, and the way that you phrased some sentences distorts its true meaning.
In chapter 2, Atlantis is spelled wrongly. Some of the punctuation you used aren’t that suitable too.
Try not to use the word ‘quipped’ too much. It gets old.
It’s bad form to start a sentence with a conjuncture.
Almost everything seems rushed.
Sorry to say this, but the plot is rather shallow and a little too contrived.
A little too many troupes too. Cliche after cliche.
You might want to consider proofreading before posting; quite a few typos.
Quite decent though, so keep it up.
July 18th, 2008 at 1:53 pm
(Jonathan) Thanks, you could be my editor if you wish!
Anyone have any other comments?
July 19th, 2008 at 11:09 am
Well, me.
I just loved your story. Your vocabulary is super.
Not being nosey, but which school are you from?
-grins-
July 19th, 2008 at 2:15 pm
Maris Stella High School. What about you? Keep the comments coming!
geniustkw
July 19th, 2008 at 11:25 pm
i agree with jonathan
it’s a really good plot, but the sentences are a bit long, so it’s a little hard to understand.
(jonathan) could you rr&r my stories?
i would LOVE some REAL criteria!
(
these are the titles)
Artemis and Minerva
Oh, Sorry. Is that the wrong question?
The mind wipe that failed
July 20th, 2008 at 4:51 am
Wahow!!! Awesome story with all the complicated writing of a sci-fi movie script!!! (to LtNyle375) I’m an Aussie too.
Can anybody review my stories?
Fairy: 2435
Determin Fomorian: The last Fomorian
Root 4 centuries ago
and World falls on collision course!!! (buckle your seatbelts)!!!
July 20th, 2008 at 8:41 am
Maris stella? Nice!
I’m from NUS high school.
New school. I doubt you heard of it.
It’s a math and science school. They completely torture us with all the 3 sciences.
And I am waiting for the sequel!!
July 21st, 2008 at 2:38 pm
（TroubleKelp) Thanks for the comment,by the way is there any other AF fanfic authors here besides Aussie, Singaporean, american, I wonder. Anyway please visit my blog, Thanks! (Shanette) Yes I am from maris stella high, and I am familiar with NUS high, your principal went to my primary school, (Rosyth, btw). The sequel’s coming soon, just glue to my blog for the time being
July 21st, 2008 at 2:39 pm
Mmkay! I’ll keep waiting!
July 21st, 2008 at 9:54 pm
what’s the sequel called?
July 22nd, 2008 at 11:18 am
(Shanette) First Chapter’s out in my blog, (computerzandbks4ever) Artemis Fowl and the Frond Trophy.
July 22nd, 2008 at 5:05 pm
i really really liked your story. it was very in character, and the length is awesome. I cant wait for the sequal!
July 24th, 2008 at 2:03 pm
First chapter’s out? Sweet!
I’ll check it out.
( Sorry not now, I’ve to switch the computer off ).
But I will see it.
July 27th, 2008 at 10:26 am
I deleted World on Collision Course. It was an already-done idea.
(That award winning story called What if Opal’s second plan worked?: My story was parallel to it. So I deleted mine).
I’m up to chapter 6 I haven’t been reading it lately (cos I’ve been updating).
I really don’t know if it’s just me, but I’m finding some bits hard to follow.
But I still love the story!
You should see my story.
Fairy: 2435
The action comes in the later chapters.
I devoted the first few to the plot building.
(Aaaaargh! I’m spoiling my own story!)
I’d like to see what you think of it, n e wayz.
Keep up all the great work! (not necessarily on this story, since you’ve finished it)
This is TroubleKelp, signin’ out!
*long comment dance*