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Housewarming Gift

Summary: Holly walked down the streets of Haven with Trouble at her side. Well he was behind her, hands over Holly’s […]

Chapters: 1 2 3

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Holly walked down the streets of Haven with Trouble at her side. Well he was behind her, hands over Holly’s eye’s so his surprise wouldn’t be ruined. “Trouble if I smash into something you’ll be in trouble. “Holly giggled to herself. “Don’t worry you’ll be fine.” He lead Holly into a stopsign. Well he almost did. He pulled her away at the last second. Holly kicked Trouble in the shin. Trouble swore a horrible swear. A passing elf had her child with her. She slapped Trouble in the face. “The nerve of you LEP officers!” Trouble’s face turned as red as his hair. A few passerby laughed and then went on their way. They walked for a few more minutes. Trouble stepped infront of Holly. She could here the click of a door opening infront of her. “Ok Holly open your eye’s.” Holly opened and her jaw dropped. It was a house. Her and Trouble had there very own house! Holly turned around and kissed Trouble. Trouble’s face was now as red as Commander Root’s. “How can we afford this?” Holly walked through the door. There was a list on the door of all the rooms. It had a kitchen, a bathroom,two bedrooms and a living area. “Well, I had some money saved up and that covered most of it. But the rest well…”Trouble’s voice trailed off. Holly shoke him at the arms. “Well,what!?” Trouble couldn’t tell her. He didn’t have the guts. There was a crash upstairs. Holly drew her Neutrino 2000. She started up the stairs. “Holly I wouldn’t go up there.” Trouble stammered. Holly didn’t listen and cocked her weapon when she reached the top of the stairs. Trouble followed.There was a corner at the top of the steps. Holly turned the corner and yelled”FREEZE!” Holly sighed. “You’ve got to be kidding me.” There in the hallway was Grub Kelp sitting on the floor with a broken lamp in his hands and a cheesy grin on his face.

Chapters: 1 2 3

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  1. That’s good. Very good. =)=0 UPDATE OR FEAR MY WRATH!!!!!

  2. Hmmm… this needs some work. For instance, you need to space between a period and the first word of the new sentence. Also, watch those quotation marks! Overall, while this does have some potential,I think you should either get a beta (and/or anyone else you know) or be more careful when rereading this.

  3. well i just ficked all the puncuation things so that should be better.

  4. This is so good! I love this!!! :mrgreen: 😀 😆 Grub can be so funn sometimes. This is way to amazing! Your grammar, spelling, and punctuation was really good! You should update. But you certainly don’t have to 😉 Some people like their stories the way they are. 🙂

  5. myles smarty-pants February 17th, 2010 at 9:49 pm 5

    plz update or there shall be no blood left in you ’cause i will suck it from your neck ect.you spelt while wrong you put will ‘mom needs him out of the house for a will’ doesnt make sense ‘Mom needed him out of the house for a while’ however does.

  6. This is good… yet incomplete and abandoned. 🙁 Update?

  7. PP left. =( It won’t be updated.

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