A Murder on Baker Street

Summary: (22)1 Before the Investigation (There Must be Crime)

Chapters: 1 2 3

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(22)1, Before the Investigation (There Must be the Crime)

Moriarty could do nothing but stare at the person above him, eyes wide in a fear he had never experienced before as the needle was plunged into the vein again. The syringe was filled with nothing but air, but that was what worried him. It wouldn’t be long now. He could already feel death’s cool embrace sneaking up on him. The needle pierced his skin for the third time.

“Isn’t it funny how easy it is to break trust?” Asked the man above him. He was short, three feet at the most, and his features were covered in shadows due to the dark night. His prey was tied to the chair in his study, except for one arm, but there was little Moriarty could do with it because of the muscle relaxant injected earlier.

“I mean, you trusted me, they trust me. Hell, I could get anyone to trust me just by acting like brainless lap dog! It worked with you.” Another insert. Shouldn’t he have been dead by now?

The man cackled as he got up, staring with an icy gaze at his work. “Don’t worry,” he said, his voice smoother than velvet. “You’ll be dead soon. Actually, you should be by now…” He drifted off thoughtfully, crossing his arms. His expression was quizzical with a tinge of worry. He really should have been slumping over in his chair by then. After a moment he shrugged, deciding it was nothing to worry about.

Moriarty glared at his former accomplice with as much hate as a dying man could. It was over. After so long, the puppeteer was falling, leaving his strings to fall to the ground for someone else to pick up. And he knew who that someone would be. What other reason did this man have for murdering him?

His eyes glazed over and his head slumped. The man quickly got rid of the ropes, tossing them out the window quickly along with the syringe, leaving the corpse slumped on the desk.

Chapters: 1 2 3

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  1. iwa the Chris Tormentor February 24th, 2010 at 10:46 pm 1

    Awesomey! XD Waiting for Updation!

  2. YAYYYYYY! That was really good. PLEASE update!!

  3. Wait a second… this is your FiRsT sToRy??!!??!!??!!??!!?? I don’t believe you. The grammar/spelling/punctuation was too good, and the idea too original. You sound like an experianced author… Eoin! You and that lofty sense of enterprise are both twin Colfers. I’m not kidding.
    No reccomendations, except an update! 😀 :mrgreen:

  4. Woah. crazy chick has it right. How could this possibly be your first story?? it’s amazing. update NOW

  5. This is excellent. I totally believe this is your first story because just because it’s the first you’ve posted on this site doesn’t mean you’re ten and have failed half your standardized writing evaluations. I’m glad to say that I’ll be waiting with bated breath for updates.

  6. UPDATE OR FEAR MY WRATH!!!!!! You rock, dude.

  7. Artiholi180 the epic person of epicness! April 19th, 2010 at 12:18 am 7

    This was really awesome! I would greatly aprecciate an update =) How old are you, might i ask? because if your younger than most of us, then WOW! And even if you older, this is still a very good story! (I, by the way, am turning 13 next month)
    remember, updates are welcomed! KUDGW!

  8. *clears throat* I’m 13 1/2. And, since most of you were so disbelieving (why, might I ask?), this is not, in fact, my first story. fat from it, really. This is, what? The… at least fortieth. I have high hopes for this one.

    Chapter four is being written.

    Oh, and my teachers (yes, all that have seen my essay’s) say I sound better than some high school students. I really don’t see it. You?

  9. I agree whole-heartedly! the quality of your writing sounds far better than your average high-school student. You should think of wrting an original piece and submiting it to a publisher. I would love to have your talent but it seems that i can only think up of good storylines but the writing in itself fails to express the message i want to convey. ^_^’

  10. shadowsnake451 May 26th, 2010 at 11:10 am 10

    me sees CC’s point. I thought Moonlight Knight was Eoin Colfer- I think they’re a relation- but you, my dear n00b friend, could be the man himself.
    Or Finn! His son Finn! Is that you?
    BRILLIANTFICLOVEITLOVEITLOVEIT!!!!!!!!

  11. Bookworm1998912 December 15th, 2011 at 11:56 pm 11

    Yes, finally. Somebody has to write about the time when Sherlock was. (keeps a straight face for about a minute, and then jumps out of her chair and dances all around the room with a crazy face). anyway…..great job!

  12. Bookworm1998912 December 15th, 2011 at 11:59 pm 12

    although holmes and watson are unusual than always. but oh well, after all, i’m only on the memoirs.

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