I Left My Heart Behind

Summary:      I got bored at lunch so I decided to try my luck at poetry. It’s not the first poem […]

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     I got bored at lunch so I decided to try my luck at poetry. It’s not the first poem I’ve written, not by a long shot, but it is one of the first I actually tried to write because usually, my poetry just happens. I don’t let myself think about it then I look down and it doesn’t even seem like my own writing. I tried to do that here, but fell a little (lot) short. It’s also the very first I made a conscious effort to rhyme. Please review and tell me what you think! If I get enough good reviews I will post more poetry.

 

I dropped the rose to the ground

The whispering wind the only sound

To be heard through the Irish valley

Unheard was the pain screaming within me

I walked away, drawing my coat close

Trying to cling to what matters most

Until this moment, my head was deaf

To my hearts’ words, now tainted with death

And now, so lost, alone I cried

For the loss of the love I left behind

My heart told me what I would never hear

Until my love would disappear

No longer there was the boy

Who had brought such strife and joy

Now where he rests, in my mind

 

Is where I left my heart behind

 

 

 

A/N: The line “until my love would disappear” does not indicate that she no longer loves him, but that her love (Artemis) was gone (dead). When I read over it again, I realized that was a bit unclear.

 

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  1. SilverGoddess March 23rd, 2013 at 1:18 am 1

    I fixed it so it allows comments! Yay me!

  2. shaadia is weird March 23rd, 2013 at 1:58 am 2

    yay! i get to comment! woopee! awesome fic! you should write more! write more or be a palm tree! *giggle”*

    *invades comment* Hey now, don’t be stealing my line. I spent way longer that any person should coming up with that palm tree line. MINE!!!!!*grips cruddy intangible line like crazy person she knows she is* MMIINNEE!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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