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Captured

Summary: Sequel to Lost Love. Artemis kidnaps Holly. That's it really. A bit dark.

Chapters: 1 2 3 4

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A/N:Ta da! The sequel to Lost Love!! Please R, R and R!!! =) =)

Holly’s P.O.V

Cold. Dark. Silent. All the things I hated most. And, although I wouldn’t admit it to anybody, I was scared. I was alone and confused. I tried to scream, but a gag prevented that. I wanted to run, but hard metal stopped me. I was trapped.

I felt someone sit at my feet. I wanted it to be my rescuer, but common sense told me it would be my kidnapper. I kicked him hard.

“Now now, Holly, no need to be violent.” A chuckle, without any cheer.

Artemis?

“Oh Frond,” I whispered, but of course no noise came out. It was him. He was the one who’d kidnapped me!

I felt him clamber on top of me, his warm breath ticking down my neck. I shuddered. Leave me alone! I wanted to scream. Get away from me, you horrible monster!

Soft hands untied my gag, but left my blindfold. “Who are you?” I spat.

“Guess.” A command, not a suggestion

“It’s you, isn’t it, Fowl? You have a sick habit of kidnapping me.”

A sigh. “I thought we were over the first time?”

Another kick. “Get off me, you evil b-”

“Language, Miss Short. We don’t want a punishment before we’ve even become comfortable, do we?”

“Comfortable? Here? With you? Dream on, Fowl.”

“I thought we were on first name terms? If we aren’t, a Sir will do. Or at the very least Master Fowl.”

I was shaking, from anger rather then fear. “You have a sick mind, Fowl. Sick and twisted.”

He silenced me with a kiss. Suddenly, I realised why I was here.

He was jealous.

Jealous that I was with another man, and refused to love him. Yeah, sick and twisted was right. Kidnap a girl because she was engaged!

He eventually pulled away, smirking. He was perched on my feet, so I couldn’t kick him.

“Take off my blindfold,” I growled.

“Say pl-”

“TAKE IT OFF!” I screamed.

I was embarrassed to discover a tear dripping down my cheek. Just a single tear, of course. But Artemis noticed that. He noticed everything.

He ran his finger beneath my eye. “Are you going to cry?” I was pleased to hear the concern in his voice.

I kicked at him again. “Idiot. I won’t cry.” But I couldn’t stop myself from shuddering when his hands ran down my arms. He found this amusing.

“Are you frightened of me?”

I scowled. “You? Your not serious?”

His hands tickled across me again. I was still blinded, and uneasily aware of how close he was to me. Then he started getting ‘curious’. Touching personal places.

“Are you frightened now?”

I snorted. “Are you?”

But he simply laughed when I tried to kick him. “Ooo, yes, very scary.”

He crept closer, making my breathing uneven. He twirled my hair through his fingers, putting his lips at my throat. “You should be scared, precious. Do you know what you’ve done wrong?”

Let him see how terrified I was, that’s what I’d done wrong. Somehow, I didn’t think that was the right answer.

“Well?” His lips crept further down my body, next to his hands. “Do you?”

“Made friends with you? Not killed you when I saw you here?”

“Ha ha, very amusing.” His voice was tense and strained. Good. “Like I said before, don’t get punished now, before we’ve even started.”

“Started what, exactly? You haven’t been exactly welcoming.”

I couldn’t see, but I was sure he would’ve rolled his eyes. Sick of me already. “It’s called kidnapping, Holly. Do you know what that is?”

“Yep. It’s when you capture someone, without them knowing who you are, and starve them etc. Generally it doesn’t involve kissing whoever you’ve kidnapped.”

“Hilarious, I’m sure. But it won’t work.”

“What won’t?” I asked innocently.

Then there was the horrible searing pain in my left shoulder. Blackness surrounded me.

Chapters: 1 2 3 4

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  1. w0w. I like this. 😀

  2. Thanks. =)=) Anything I could do to make it better? In any way??

  3. *is drinking water but suddenly spits it out*
    Better!?!!? Ha!

    Oh… You were serious. Heh. Heh.

    Nope! It’s great! Nice little descriptions, and Artemis’s name comment totally suited him. Holly was spot-on. As you commonly say,

    “UPDATE OR FEAR MY WRATH!!! =)=)=)”

  4. Thanks!! You guys are too kind. =)=)=) BTW:I’m the only one who has scary wrath. =)

  5. Who rated me 1/5? Such positive reviews, so little stars.

  6. so this is your sequel to lost love. its good… what are you waiting for?… update!

  7. …………..wow

  8. I’ll update soon-I have updated almost all my stories, if it makes you feel better. =)

  9. Okay, creepyyyy….

    But good. Unfortunately, I can imagine Artemis doing something like this. When I found it it was called Captured, I thought it meant something like a captured heart and people in love. *sigh…*

    This chapter seems better than the last story though. At least in Holly’s case, very IC! Update!

  10. Thanks. =)=)I shalt update very very soon. Is there anything I could do to make it better?? 🙂

  11. Hmm… WRITE MORE. Have Trouble try to rescue her. Add insanity on Artemis’s part. That should be very interesting…

    Also, I SWEAR I DIDN’T RATE IT. A story has to be seriously horrendous for me to do that. Like, if there was one 8 chapters long, with every other word spelled wrong, and grammar as if the person who wrote it learned English 2 weeks ago. That’s how bad a one star story is to me.

  12. Hermione Fowl October 2nd, 2010 at 7:36 am 12

    I think I know who rated it 1 star, my friend I had a fight with. I won’t giver her name.
    Insanity comes later, don’t worry. But I forgot about Trouble, and Butler. Bet someone dies, even if I don’t plan it. =)=)

  13. ArtemisfianceNo1 October 9th, 2010 at 9:56 am 13

    It wasn’t me, swear to god!!!!!

    everything you write is usuallly either a 3,4,5 star depending on my mood!!!
    I dont think ive ever had to give out a one star b4!!!!!!!!! I’m not that much of a S***

  14. Again, creepy. But you’re doing well! The imagery is /very/ good.

    One question: how come when you update, you only manage to update a few paragraphs?

    Update as soon as you can!!

  15. AFN1:Did you rate this one?? If you did, how much?? 🙂
    Ann:I’ve written more, must have forgotten to put it on. Will do that ASAP. 🙂

  16. ArtemisfianceNo1 October 11th, 2010 at 7:13 am 16

    i havent rated vthis 1 yet

  17. Well, please do. Do you like it?? 🙂

  18. ArtemisfianceNo1 October 29th, 2010 at 11:57 pm 18

    UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATENOWNOWNOWNOWNOWNOW

    lol, pleasepleaseplaseplease update!!!!

  19. Haha! Has been updated. Do it again!!!!

    Funnehhhh!!! Haha!

    (sorry, feeling spammy today)

  20. Thank you for your enthusiasm. Maybe a bit too much, but I feel pressured into updating now. 🙂

  21. Hey, at least I didn’t put the haha in capitals XD. For no reason at all, I don’t like smileys or saying lol. Or rofl. Or, as suggested by my brother, maximum roffles.

    When will you put it up!?? Yayayayayayayayay!

  22. ArtemisLover89 October 30th, 2010 at 3:56 pm 22

    this is a really good story so far! please update soon!!!!

  23. I’ve just updated!! 🙂 Anything I could improve on??

  24. ArtemisfianceNo1 October 31st, 2010 at 5:43 am 24

    MORE UPDATING!!!!!!!
    UPDATE NOW!!!
    Actually,

    “UPDATE OR FEEL MY WRATH!!!!!!”

  25. Ahem, it’s FEAR my wrath. Sheesh.

    Yeah, you do need to update. I’m a very impatient, straight-to-the-point person. Needs update. If you’re looking for concrit, it’s best to ask someone who can actually write better then you.

    (veiled compliment)

  26. AFN1:Your one of my best mates, you should know my catchphrase. And I WILL update-honest.
    WE:I do know what a compliment is. And I’m sure your a great writer *cough yeah right cough* Jokes, you rock.
    Hermione (me): UPDATE OR FEAR YOUR WRATH!!!!

  27. ArtemisfianceNo1 November 1st, 2010 at 8:51 am 27

    OOps, i wrote that at midnight, i meant to say fear, ahem, let me try that again.

    “UPDATE OR FEAR MY WRATH!!!!!”

    LoL, ima awsome!!

  28. Yeah, that’s a good one-you, awesome.
    Wait-you were serious? Oops. 🙂

  29. Erp! What happened to the 4th chapter? *pouts*

    Anyway, very nice. It’s getting a little repetetive, though. He threatens, she makes a good comeback, and eventually she does what he says. Is there actually gonna be a plot in this? Are we ever gonna see Trouble try to save her?

    Update, and please answer these questions!

  30. OK I freakin love you, your stories are always so good with a mencaing touch to them. Update before I combust…spontaeously.

    There are some small typos but I don’t really think they’re anything to worry about.

    I think I’m in love with your writing style, it’s short, concise with a nice darkness. I feel that every word is not wasted each affects the meaning and atmosphere of the story.

    UPDATE~also chappie 4 is empty, something must be done to it 😀

    Oh also, when this story or impossible is updated I shall give you the grape juice…deal? 😀

  31. Thank you Ann! You are the ONLY one who has not said my story is too good to be improved! You may think that is bad, but I need help. I will now update SOON.
    Artyrox:Yeah, chap. 4 is empty, cause I was going to put stuff in, then I had dinner, and I forgot what to write. . .I lead a hard life, you know (sarcasm).

  32. That was an interesting update…

    Very angst. VERY ANGST.

    Well, whadayaknow? I see a fanfic, says “by Hermione Fowl” and I think- Angst. You’re not a depressing person. You write depressing-but awesome-stuff.

    Why did he have to die…

    Oh yeah, try to put a chapter in Artemis’s point of view, I bet we’re all craving whatever’s going on in his wackjob mind.

  33. Thanks WE. And that’s a good idea, doing a chap. from Arty’s mind. Believe me, I want to know what’s going on in his ‘wackjob’ mind too. 🙂

  34. This is, of course, absolutely fantastic. Your writing gets to a person (that’s a good thing). It’s very dark, very creepy. I have to wonder if you’re an H/T shipper or if you hate Trouble…it could be either way, which is interesting. Hm.
    You have excellent grammer and flow. Love it! Update it! (Pleez.)

  35. I’m an A/H. I don’t hate Trouble, but he’s not in my top 5. And thanks. 🙂

  36. NOOO! Trouble’s dead! Great story, though. What’s going on in Artemis’s mind?
    UPDATE OR FEAR MY ROBOT ARMY!!!
    Hehe, sorry. Uh oh gotta go. The Holly in my world is trying to kill Artemis.

  37. Artemis’ P.O.V. is being written, but I need a lot, because people complain if I’ve only updated by a tiny bit.
    An thanks. 🙂

  38. What does P.O.V. mean? I can’t figure it out.

  39. Hermione Fowl March 5th, 2011 at 1:39 am 39

    Point Of View. I couldn’t figure it out for ages either.
    Did you like my story? Did you READ it? I think your comment is spam, it needs to have something to do with the story, so comment again, please.

  40. Ooohh, Holly almost made me cry!

    …You’re very good at this, you know? 🙂

    Is this the climax? If it isn’t, well okay then! If it is, darn. It seems… flat for some reason.

    He UNCHAINED her?? Yeah, he is insane. There’s gotta be some kind of explanation for this. Update as soon as you can!!

  41. Ahh….LET ORION TAKE OVER HIS MIND!! I likeee insanity.Very good story, few mistakes verryyy little OOC…all in all…a 4!!

  42. Hermione Fowl March 5th, 2011 at 5:13 am 42

    It’s the end. There will be no update. However, explanations come in the next story. But what do you mean by flat? Would you like me to change it? Add more?
    And no, Orion will not take over his mind. I don’t know Orion well enough, as I’ve only read TAC once.

  43. OK sorry about the spam comment. I am imagining an ending where Artemis lets her go but then she turns around and he’s crying and she decides to stay & then he isn’t crazy anymore. though it’s a bit too sweet for a story going in this direction. UPDATE!!

  44. Hermione Fowl March 5th, 2011 at 10:22 pm 44

    Seriously? You honestly think I would be that nice?? You obviously don’t know me AT ALL. but that’s the end, anyway, No more will be written. Read the sequel to this one. That should be the last one, and you’ll find out why he let her go.

  45. *chanting* SEQUEL! SEQUEL! SEQUAL! SEQUAL!

    And by “flat” I meant, I expected more suspense, or action, or something. But, that’s just me. You did a fantastic job, all in all! 🙂

    Publish the sequel… NOOOWWWWW!!!!

  46. Hermione Fowl March 6th, 2011 at 7:19 am 46

    Published sequel already-haven’t you read it? It’s called Uncontrollable. And I was quite proud of my ending-I normally suck at them, and this was the hugest cliffe EVER.

  47. Ughhh! This was an even bigger cliff than mine! I love your stories! Keep killing people please!
    …..Wow that was a weird request.

  48. Hermione Fowl March 7th, 2011 at 4:25 am 48

    Request not needed. I try to keep people alive, but my writing sucks if I do that. Sad, right?

  49. No, it makes it exciting!

  50. Hermione Fowl March 13th, 2011 at 2:24 am 50

    That’s good. 🙂 I kill all the good people, too. I keep Opal and Minerva alive quite often, but kill Holly heaps. Trouble dies a lot too, I hate him.

  51. Lol. I hate Trubs, too. XD
    Since you’ve updated Uncontrollable quite a bit, you might want to update this, too. Just a suggestion. 😀
    Good, and I couldn’t see many mistakes, if any. Good job, and good story. 🙂

  52. Hermione Fowl July 8th, 2011 at 9:59 am 52

    I think this is finished. Or should I add more? Uncontrollable was meant to be the sequel to this, but is Holly’s P.O.V. good as well?? Me confused now. 🙂

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