war:humans vs fairys
Written on April 27th, 2007 by elfredaStory Details
Loading ...chapter 1: breakfast
haven
It was a race against time. All the faires were getting ready for war, this viny’aya had noted was no time to complain about getting your hands dirty or scratching the shuttle. After a briefing from the comander the faires marched up to the surface and waited until dawn…..
fowl manor
Artemis suddenly woke up. He could’nt help but feel sorry for holly. She had given up her life in haven for him and now her friends, family and people were now at war with his own kind. He, butler,juliet, holly, mrs fowl and mr.fowl did not wish to help the humans but help the fairys. somebody knocked on the door and disturbed artemis’s thoughts. He asked sheepishly “who is it” there came a small reply”it’s me holly your mum said it’s time for breakfast.” “tell her i will be down soon.”artemis said. “kay“
hollys pov
I knoked on artemis’s door and artemis asked who it was so i told him it was me and what his mum had said.He told me to tell angeline that he would be down in a minute so i ansered okay.
April 27th, 2007 at 8:53 pm
A very short chapter (and the first one was blank) but your plot seems good…I’d be very careful though. I’ve seen lots of fics like this be sure to make it original.
April 28th, 2007 at 5:30 am
A very good start so keep uploading the chapters.
May 6th, 2007 at 2:14 am
Nice and casual. You need a bit more detail, though. And why would the fairies be having a war against humans?
May 7th, 2007 at 7:14 am
I don’t read stories with extreme lack of grammar. I’m sorry, but you need to know that things look so much better with spaces after full stops and commas, and capital letters. You also start a new line when someone different is talking, and note where apostrophes go. There are also a few spelling mistakes.
July 8th, 2007 at 2:04 pm
well…sorry im only nine im still in year 4
July 10th, 2007 at 7:11 am
UR NINE?????
then that means u did really good
i liked it
keep writing
July 20th, 2007 at 6:32 pm
well done u r really good if ur only nine and don’t listen to nicole she just proud because she’s a really good writer and got a lot of good reviews. very good!
July 20th, 2007 at 6:41 pm
and who gave u a one for this story’s rating? that is really mean i would never give anyone a one even if it was terrible which this one wasn’t. Was it u nicole? i gave it a five well done elfreda
xx Ps nice name lol
August 11th, 2007 at 10:55 pm
cool! pleez write more!!! soon
September 7th, 2007 at 5:04 pm
thanx every one here is so nice to me thax!(again!)
September 24th, 2007 at 10:59 pm
updates plzzzzz!
October 8th, 2007 at 5:29 pm
im sorry i couldnt get on da comp!by da way its my b-day on november 22nd and i am now in year five!(im GOING to be 10!)