Summary: Chapter 2
Chapters: 1 2
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WOW I really Liked that! 🙂 I could’nt find any mistakes, even though my 21 year old sister was poking my in the head. I laughed at this part:“So, this is our army?” I said standing up, “Wow, this is just pathetic a bunch of kids and an adult.”
*Is so happy get’s pink gun that shoots TACOS!*
Don’t shoot me!*hides under table* If you do then… I’ll… I don’t know!
Great job. It’s lacking in suspense, and it’s kind of dull but the concept and plot idea are fresh enough for me to want to continue to read the updates. I look forward to an update.
That was Awesome! thank you for putting me in it! I can’t wait for the next chapter!!!
M. Fowl says…
Your welcome Torry!*hugs* Just be a bit more careful I have a few tricks up my sleeve for you! *grins evilly*
cool. I didn’t really see any mistakes, but it was kind of boring. It’s hard to understand. I feel like you have the idea in your head, and write assuming that people know everything in your head. Which we don’t.
So, just a pointer, please be more descriptive. And sorry if this sounds like flame, its not supposed to be. I just want to make your stories easier for people to read.
Dude I am trying my best I had a friend over last night I have a lot of things on my mind and I haven’t updated this is like… A few weeks so just lay off a bit please.
That was really good, so far. Needs more description though. E.G-Said can be changed to agreed, encouraged, cheered, shouted etc.
Also, the bit at the start was kinda confusing. Who was he talking to??
I think that’s it. So. . .
UPDATE OR FEAR MY WRATH!!!!!
That was GREAT! I loved it! 5 lollipops! Can I be in it? I look foward to updates!
UPDATE OR FEEL THE WRATH OF MY KILLER KITTENS!!!
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