Sicarius’s Blade- (previously Realize: Part One)

Summary: A story of discovery..... the faireis aren't the only ones with magic now, but they might have it for long....

Chapters: 1 2 3 4 5 6 7

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Foaly looked pensive.

“Ehhh… demonstration, please?”

The Irish boy smiled, reminding Holly of a vampire. A very smart, cunning vampire.

“Certainly.”

The glass of water in front of Foaly suddenly rose two feet in the air, though the water never rippled. Then a blue streak sped like a bullet toward it, shattering it into a million pieces. The pieces froze in mid-air, sparkling dangerously. The water, too, was frozen where it exploded. This was quite a curious sight, mind you, with the water pooled perfectly above them, as if on an invisible surface.

Artemis pulled the water into the shaped of the cup again, and the glass shards reassembled themselves as if they were conducted by a puppet-master. Then the cup lowered onto the table again and stayed there, the pieces of the glass fitted together perfectly.

Holly’s mouth dropped open, for once unmindful of looking like an idiot. Artemis… her Artemis… had magic. Why did he have to keep getting mixed up in such messes? Couldn’t he just lie low and not be such a pain?

Well, Artemis, him being a teenage semi-reformed criminal mastermind who knows about the existence of fairies, didn’t have much of a chance of lying low.

Foaly stared at Artemis in open fascination, probably thinking of multiple ways to test this new-found ability. Holly eventually closed her mouth at a wry glance from Artemis.

“I… umm… wow, Artemis. That’s… impressive,” Holly said, forgetting to be angry for the moment,then remembering, “looks like you don’t need a mentor.”

“Thank you, Holly, though I still need one. Now, do we have a deal? We can start at any time.”

Foaly was practically salivating.”Of course! I.., let me go get some supplies. We can start immediately.”

He practically floated out of the room, heading to the Biological Lab. That left Artemis and Holly, standing there in an awkward silence. Holly was still angry at him, but that quickly dissolved as she saw the look Artemis was giving her. A look of complete confusion. One look that never sat well with Artemis.

“Hey, are you okay? You looked a little angry at me for a second there.”

Holly blinked in surprise. Artemis had never sounded so casual. Or wondering. He was really letting his guard down lately. Holly looked into his eyes, and was surprised to see the last remnants of blue sparks fleeing them.

“Are your eyes… uhh… sparking?” she said, waving her fingers near her eyes.

Artemis smirked. “Yes, my eyes are,” he waved his fingers in mimicry, “sparking. Humans tend to have the magic show in their eyes.”

“Ah. All this human magic is just weird. How long have you been doing this?”

Artemis looked away, hating the betrayed look in her eyes.

“I’ve known about it since we traveled back from the Hybras. I didn’t start testing it until last year.” He looked back at her.

“Forgive me for not telling you earlier. I was still controlled by paranoia when I tested it.”

Holly nodded, feeling a little bad that she was angry at something he couldn’t control.

“Ya, sorry Artemis. I was just startled.To say the least.”

Bad place to stop? to bad… my headache is killing me…. be back later!!

Chapters: 1 2 3 4 5 6 7

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16 responses to “Sicarius’s Blade- (previously Realize: Part One).” Join in!

  1. Ha! i have figured out my technical difficulties… i sometimes edit this from my kindle ereader, but apparently all the spelling erros on this WHICH I JUST FIXED aren’t saved. So please know I did try. stupid technology…. 🙂 I have learned my lesson.

  2. Con critic me: No mistakes so far…….

    Real me: Hi, you can call me either Krissy, Krackle, or Queenie. And I love this idea! I’ll see you around in the forum.

  3. This is really good and I didn’t notice any mistakes. I think you should add A/H like you said. This is very good and UPDATE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

  4. Hai! Does anyone remember me? I haven’t been on since… when was it… July? I dunno. But hey, you can call me Trubs, Trubbie, and also I am called Tubby and Twinkles, but those are Amy’s and Fowlie’s nicknames. ^^

    Okay, so down to the fic.

    This is awesome! I’m wondering how long you’ve been writing… cuz I started writing about a year ago, and my writing is just about getting to this point now. Besides the great vocabulary part. You did an awesome job with that. :3

    On the A/H subject, I say maybe. I would definitely not make it the main focus of it. I’ve seen so many fics(including my own) be overwhelmed by adding ships. So if you do decide to add a ship,(since it is entirely up to you) I would just make a few tiny little cute romance scenes, and not make that the center of attention.

    I didn’t see any mistakes as far as spelling/grammar/spacing/etc.

    Great job, and keep up the good work! I’ll be watching for the next chapter. :3

  5. The next chapter! Great job, the whole thing where Artemis’s eyes were glowing kinda freaked me out, though. (I visualize everything as if it’s a movie when I read.) So yeah. It was freaky. And amazing.

    Alright, concrit… I have none. No mistakes. ^_^ Awesome!

  6. Why such the small update? Anyway, the part where Opal says “I come”, it needs a period.

    I’m getting used to this con crit stuff now.

  7. Sorry… didn’t have time to type much else, and i haven’t figured out how to save the new changes without “updating” it for everyone to see. Anyone know how?
    …..fixed the period…. 🙂

  8. Now I see. 🙂 And thanks for fixing that period.
    I think all you have to do is click “edit” on top of the story. Look and you’ll find out what I’m talking about, test it first, no typing until your sure.

    Special Abilities: Magical barriors? Ability to conjure up or change air into a weapon for combat? To read peoples’ minds? You could try those.

  9. Ah ha! thank ye…I will try that at another time.(I’mon a kindle right now… kinda hard to do from here…) ooo… i like the air idea…(thinking of a plot idea) yes, moi thinks that will do nicely..thank you! and HA!first time replying to a comment… didn’tknow how to do that.. he he..:)

  10. Okay… *guilty look*

    I haven’t exactly read it before today, and now I’m really kicking myself. This.

    It’s nicely written, and I’m liking the tone you used. It’s quite different from the Colfer that I like, but that’s not a bad thing. You describe things in a simple, straightforward way, and I find that I like that. It’s more… Hmm, K A Applegate, or Emily Rodda, than the James Patterson crime fic that I’ve been chasing after lately.

    Your sentences flow pretty smoothly, and are fairly natural. What surprised me(pleasantly, I might add) was how in character Artemis, Holly, and especially Foaly were. I’m not sure why, but lately, I had read(and sorta despaired) over incredibly OOC fics. Yours is a very pleasant change.

    The plot is extremely imaginative. You’ve taken advantage of the little thread that Colfer had left in The Lost Colony, when Artemis deduces that humans must have had magic at one point, which I admire.

    The only thing that bothered me(slightly) about this fic is your title.

    ‘Realize: part 1’, in my possibly inaccurate, slightly biased, but hopefully still valid opinion, should have a capital P and ‘1’ as ‘One'(note the capital O).

    Also, I’d just like to advice you to not go overboard with the powers- it seems Gary Tsu(male equivalent to Mary Sue, just on the off-chance that you don’t understand the fanfic lingo yet). It already looks as though he’s got everything now- genius intellect, magic, telekinesis, and now, WINGS? That’s the thing that put me off Maximum Ride(Note, there are spoilers here)- First, you have bird kids with wings, and increased strength and stamina. Then they start developing superpowers throughout the series. It’s like Angel, you know? She can fly, can read minds, control minds, breath underwater, shape shift… It’s too Mary Sue.

    Okay. Ending my ramble now. You’ll(hopefully) get to know me better as I leave more(sadly, rare) rants on your fics… or if you’re on the forums.

  11. the huntress (or tress) January 6th, 2012 at 12:24 am 11

    Thanks for the compliments! I was really trying hard to keep them in character- it annoys me when they’re not. And for the advice. I have yet to think of a better name…. (if anybody thinks of one, let me know.) I lack inspiration for that at the moment.but for now, i will fix the capitalization. 🙂 I don’t plan on adding anything else (powers, I mean). I don’t want him to be all-powerful, so I will be adding limitations in an update…whenever that is. ( and I DON’T understand all the lingo yet… tips are appreciated) ALL ADVICE WELCOME!!!!!! 🙂 thanks again!

    ….. 3 minutes later…..
    WAIT!!! angel can shape shift? man, i have really got to keep up with developing series… I haven’t read those in like…. ehhh… three years? must go find the new ones…..

    Ugh, I can’t quite recall that particular quality of Angel’s, but yeah, Angel gets WAY too many powers. I stopped reading Maximum Ride because it was too plotless and thriller’y. You know — all action or all gooshy teenage drama? Bleh. I hated it.

    Glancing at the above comment, though, this seems interesting enough, so I’ll give it a read later. To be honest, your title put me off. It might seem more appealing if you change it ^^ ~WE

  12. Whoop, I didn’t find any mistakes, but please update!

  13. I can’t believe i missed this! TOTALLY AWESOME! Why are you so much better than me??*sigh*Really appreciate this fic! i’m adding it 2 my favourites!

  14. the huntress (or tress) January 27th, 2013 at 3:15 pm 14

    Ehhh… You like this? This was moi first… I kinda thought I abandoned it…. It scares me…
    (:P)
    Seriously though… It’s bad. Do you want me to continue this story???

  15. I read this a long time ago, before I actially registered, but I found it again. I really love this plot! I like how you used the magic tidbit from The Lost Colony and you have good foreshadowing for this to be one of your first fics! I’m with Shaadia, please, please, FREAKING PLEEEASE keep this one going! You are pretty much my favorite writer and I like this VEWY MUCH!

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