Mindfreak
Written on March 25th, 2008 by The Almighty MoiStory Details
(1 votes, average: 4 out of 5)
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Rain splattered down on his head as he knelt in the mud. He was surrounded by a desolate wasteland of old crumbling buildings. Raised voices were heard and he hurridly began chanting. Lightning flashed and a portal of blue sparks appeared before him. He smiled grimly. Succesful.
“There he is!”
He turned around to see a group of armour clad goblins, already throwing fireballs, running towards him.
“Get him!”
He quickly jumped in the portal closing it behind him. He was traveling to the past to fix everything.
He was going to save the world.
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March 25th, 2008 at 9:18 am
even thou this is really short im already hooked….u must continue with this idea
March 25th, 2008 at 2:49 pm
yes please continue
March 25th, 2008 at 11:56 pm
This is a very good beginning and sounds like a good story. You truly should continue.
March 28th, 2008 at 4:20 am
Ohh, interesting. I can’t wait to see what happens next
March 29th, 2008 at 10:14 am
Ohhh thats really good, it gets you hooked really quickley.
May 23rd, 2008 at 5:17 am
“Hello this is Foaly, the most handsome and smart centaur ever. Who’s this?”
Lol
that was great.
May 26th, 2008 at 5:00 am
Cool story I like it. If you want I can help you delete that extra chapter at the begining. The same thing has happened to me before. There were some spelling and grammar mistakes.
May 26th, 2008 at 7:12 pm
I really like it! Please continue.
June 18th, 2008 at 11:28 am
Thankyou for all the reviews ^^ Lydia Tall, I’d love if you told me how to get rid of the extra chapter.
June 27th, 2008 at 1:45 pm
This is really nice! I hope you continue along this line. The mysterious stranger… hmm… who is he? I will go crazy is you don’t continue!!! You have to write much much more quickly!