Cool story I like it. If you want I can help you delete that extra chapter at the begining. The same thing has happened to me before. There were some spelling and grammar mistakes.
This is really nice! I hope you continue along this line. The mysterious stranger… hmm… who is he? I will go crazy is you don’t continue!!! You have to write much much more quickly!
March 25th, 2008 at 9:18 am
even thou this is really short im already hooked….u must continue with this idea
March 25th, 2008 at 2:49 pm
yes please continue
March 25th, 2008 at 11:56 pm
This is a very good beginning and sounds like a good story. You truly should continue.
March 28th, 2008 at 4:20 am
Ohh, interesting. I can’t wait to see what happens next
March 29th, 2008 at 10:14 am
Ohhh thats really good, it gets you hooked really quickley.
May 23rd, 2008 at 5:17 am
“Hello this is Foaly, the most handsome and smart centaur ever. Who’s this?”
Lol
that was great.
May 26th, 2008 at 5:00 am
Cool story I like it. If you want I can help you delete that extra chapter at the begining. The same thing has happened to me before. There were some spelling and grammar mistakes.
May 26th, 2008 at 7:12 pm
I really like it! Please continue.
June 18th, 2008 at 11:28 am
Thankyou for all the reviews ^^ Lydia Tall, I’d love if you told me how to get rid of the extra chapter.
June 27th, 2008 at 1:45 pm
This is really nice! I hope you continue along this line. The mysterious stranger… hmm… who is he? I will go crazy is you don’t continue!!! You have to write much much more quickly!