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History Repeats 3

Summary:   Chapter 1   Holly   “Duck!” I ducked just as the lead goblin fired off another shot, and it […]

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Chapter 1

 

Holly

 

“Duck!”

I ducked just as the lead goblin fired off another shot, and it whizzed over my head.

“Cover your eyes,” I yelled, pulling out a stun grenade. “Otherwise this will hurt.”

My comrades covered their eyes, and I chucked the grenade at the lead goblin as hard as I could. It hit him right between the eyes, and exploded. He and the dozen other goblins with him were immediately stunned, though it got him the worst.

Me and the other LEP officers accompanying me moved in. In minutes, all of them were shoved in the back of police cars and on their way to Howler’s Peak.

I was back in Haven. A few days after the big scenario with Opal (which no one in Haven knows anything about), I got an urgent call from Commander Kelp saying that he needed me back in Haven – ASAP. I was back in Haven a few hours after that, but I was alone. I let Sam stay above ground. Artemis promised he’d watch her for me ( and more importantly, she promised she’d listen to him) .

I called in to report to Trouble that the mission had been a success.

“Great work, Captain,” he said. “Seeing how late it is, go ahead and call it a day.”

“Okay,” I said, relieved to be getting out of the field. “Thanks, Trouble.”

“That’s Commander Kelp during work hours, Captain. You know that.”

“Yeah, but technically I’m not working right now, since you just sent me home,” I said. “How much longer you think you’ll be needing me down here?”

“Don’t know, Captain. Sorry. Just hang tight down here for the night, and I will call you tomorrow to let you know if your good to go or not.”

I nodded. “Okay. Night, commander.”

“Bye, Captain. Good night.”

I hung up, then turned and started walking back to my apartment. It wasn’t too far from here, otherwise I would have got a ride from someone, but it was only a few blocks down so I didn’t see the point.

When I got there I pulled out my communicator and called Artemis and Samantha and told them good night, then I went straight to bed.

Nothing like a shoot out against a bunch of goblins to make you tired enough to fall asleep where you stand.

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8 responses to “History Repeats 3.” Join in!

  1. SilverGoddess May 9th, 2013 at 6:04 am 1

    Yay, you finally made the new part! What time is it? Nitpicking time! I can’t sleep, so I wrote down every mistake I found, outside of the numerous missing commas. That would be entirely too much to type on a phone. Here we go!

    Ch. 1
    1) … me and the other LEP officers… – the other LEP officers and I

    2) Although it was probably an innocent typo, you didn’t capitalize Commander once.

    Ch. 2
    1) …ball whizzed rift past… I think you meant right past

    Ch. 3
    1) wing a ball? I don’t even know what this was supposed to be, unless you put wing intentionally, although it makes very little sense.

    2) till- until or ’till

    3) “Don’t press luck…” this was a slightly awkward statement. “Don’t press your luck…” would run smoother

    Ch. 4
    1) missing a space between homework & and (which I realize was just a typo, but the fun of nitpicking is pointing out EVERYTHING. Plus, it gives me something to do, because I can’t sleep.)

    2) I figured I probably- another slightly awkward line

    3) “…says its late…” should be “…says it’s late…”

    4) We sped down the hallway- hallway? I think you meant road.

    Ch. 5
    Nothing!

    Okay, I’m done. You can love or hate my obsessiveness, but I’m bored right now, or else I wouldn’t have seriously just pointed all those out from a phone. I probably still wouldn’t with a laptop.

    Yay, you used my idea! (I think. If I’m right, I think I know what happens next. Maybe.)

    I’m glad you kept this going!

    Also, shaadia, I got your email with your picture (she’s so cute!), but my account is acting up and I’m having trouble sending emails. I receive them just fine, but I can’t usually get them to send. I am working on debugging it now, though!

    Sorry about my inactivity, more testing. They have it spaced awkwardly, and with numerous big projects with looming deadlines, life is hectic and I have less time to pay my respects to FG.

    But I’m still reading!

    Well, my thumbs are sore, so I’m going to end this long, freakishly nitpicky comment. Night, y’all.

  2. Very long comment, Silver. Anyways, I typed this on my IPod because my computer is giving me crap so there is bound to be some errors. It may be hard to believe, but I DID go back to check for errors before I got on and posted it, but I did have time to save my document so the changes weren’t saved. I know, lousy excuses, but hey, it’s true. And the thing about the ‘its’… This thing has spellcheck, I know it does, but its been acting up like that and I’ve notice the little errors slipping through for a while. On the thing where I put hallway, I meant to put highway. And I meant put fling, but I must have spelled it wrong so my IPod changed it. Though it think ‘wing’ would be kind like a slang term if I used it intentionally.
    Sorry for all the errors and the long wait! I’ll update soon!
    P.S. I think I am going to use your idea.

  3. yay! me craaazy happy! me doing sunflower dance on beach, because me happy! me even toe excited to write proper english, me that happy! u updaated! yipee me luv this me luv this me luv you for posting this! me want moore! pleeezeee update! me happy! how many times did i use that word? sorry….

  4. SilverGoddess May 9th, 2013 at 5:34 pm 4

    Sorry if I seemed rude or anything in my comment. I was dying of boredom and my sketchbook was in my school locker, so I pointed out everything I found. I was going for helpful, but putting down EVERYTHING probably crossed a line to annoying. Sorry.

  5. SilverGoddess May 9th, 2013 at 5:43 pm 5

    Also, the term “its” can also be correct, depending upon how it’s used. My phone doesn’t correct it, either.

    Example:

    “the dog wagged its tail.”

    “It’s going to be a great day.”

    Wow, what cheesy sentences. I’m sure you already knew all of that, I’m just bored. I wish I could update my fic from my phone, but it won’t let me scroll to the bottom. Stupid smart phone. (Hehe, oximoron).

    I can’t wait to see the next part!

  6. is that was oximoron means? i am clueless! but i totally understand what you mean, there are some gadgets that don’t let you scrool to the bottom. weird. i can’t even do some peaceful research on wikipedea cause this gadget won’t let me see the rest. what, it’s not something BAD to see, is it?! also, on the pandigital, the moment you spot a single swear word that is not censored, you are MIRACULOUSLY taken back to its home page. annoying, but good in a way…..oh, and before i forget, updaate updaate updaate…puppy eyes and wobbly lips, please? pleeaseee??

  7. Okay! I think you found my weak spot, I hate when people cry around me. It makes me feel bad even if its not my fault.
    @Silver: you didn’t sound mean or anything. I know I make a lot of mistakes like that.
    I’ll update soon!

  8. the huntress (or tress) May 14th, 2013 at 8:05 pm 8

    Sorry this isn’t a review- please be mindful that we are being attacked by spammers- please ignore those posts (as of now- 5/14/2013)as I attempt to figure out a way to remedy this. Thanks! -Tress

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