Artemis Fowl and the Four Elements 2: The Fight for the Truth
Written on June 1st, 2008 by shanetteStory Details
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The journey begins
There were only the two of them. And they had to save a family of five. And they had no idea where to start.
They rushed back to Fowl Manor, often turning around to see if Jane or any other minion was trailing them. Once they reached the house, they rested for quite a while, before packing some clothes.
But David was not so enthusiastic about all this. He preferred the more obvious way.
“Shouldn’t we just contact the police? ” he shifted, quite uneasily.
“No way. Jane is dangerous. We should look for her ourselves. She may harm people, ” Diana said in her melodramatic voice.
David smiled. “OK, I get the picture. ” Then he went into the twins’ room.
“Ugh, I don’t like the tiny ones’ room, ” he groaned. “It smells worse than perfume in here. ”
Diana chuckled. “Get used to it. ”
But as she walked into her room, Diana got a nasty shock. Her expression changed from ’smiley’ to horrified in an instant. She screamed and fell to the floor. Hearing her shout, David rushed toward it. And immediately he saw it.
The wall was filled with a strange liquid. The drawers were open, the clothes piled up everywhere haphazardly. In simpler words, the room was in a total wreck. And on the wall it was written, “Come to the place where you were reborn…” Somehow, Diana knew this question was for her.
“Come to the place you were reborn? Where the heck is that? ” David questioned.
But without looking at him, without even hesitating, Diana told him the answer.
“Tara. “
June 1st, 2008 at 8:50 am
Hey guys! Some of you may find this story familiar. Just a news flash: I had to re-publish this because, well, I couldn’t update at all the last time. I’m technologically cursed, like Lydia Tall.
Anyways, enjoy the story!
June 1st, 2008 at 6:11 pm
The sentences are somewhat choppy, but otherwise okay. It wasn’t bad, though…who’s the jerk who rated it a one?
June 2nd, 2008 at 4:00 am
Ahh, choppy? Hmm, I’ll amend it accordingly. Lol, I think the ratings have been cleared again.
June 2nd, 2008 at 5:06 am
These sentences were either choppy, or incomplete sentences.
Diana had a crisis. David just shouted at her. Because Artemis’s mother had adopted her. Why was he acting like that? He never even scolded her before. And this time, Diana let her tears flow. They were overpowering her eyes. Was he overprotective? Or did he just want Diana to stay in his house? Was he lonely without her?
Sorry, I’m just picky like that and it really bothered me.
June 2nd, 2008 at 6:00 am
Oh, I get what you mean. OK, maybe I’ll join some up together and make the sentences longer.
June 2nd, 2008 at 8:13 am
I don’t really like my introduction myself… just a few ammendments… Ahh. There we go.
June 4th, 2008 at 4:28 pm
I admit it. Romance is definitely NOT my type. But when you look at every guide to writing they have here, they just say you have to have a little. And that just makes me uncomfortable.
June 12th, 2008 at 7:41 pm
LOL well I loved the first one, and the second is awesome too. The story’s great. I can see that the sentences are a bit choppy as well, though I didn’t know how to put it into words. Choppy fits though. Overall, it isn’t bad in the slightest.
June 13th, 2008 at 8:54 am
Yay Olive!!
-jumps around happily for a few seconds!!-
Great to have you back!!
I’m adding chapter 13 now.
:)
Yuck.
Romance.
I hate this.
:)
But more action coming right up!!
August 5th, 2008 at 4:46 am
Thgis is great please continue it soon