Artemis Fowl and the Four Elements 2: The Fight for the Truth
Written on June 1st, 2008 by shanetteStory Details
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A few seconds back…
As Artemis and his family took the lift down to the cafe, there was what you would call an eerie silence. Nobody spoke until they came down from the fifth floor, all the way down to the basement.
When the lift door opened, the family stepped out, only to be stopped by a young female adoscelent. She had long blue hair, and green eyes. And she prevented any means for the family to get out of the lift.
“You must be the Fowls. I was waiting for you for a very, very long time. ”
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“Nonsense, she’s a liar. As if she can lie to me twice. ” Diana scoffed.
“I don’t know. I doubt that she’s actually lying. ”
Diana hid her smile. “You’re the most doubtful person I ever met.”
Just then, a nurse came up to them from outside the ward. She was there to check Diana’s pulse. She walked up, and smiled at Diana. Diana smiled back.
“Your visiter seemed a little rough, you know. That girl just pushed a whole family into the lift again, then when the lift came back down they were gone except for the girl. She told me she was here to see you. ”
Diana straightened on her bed, and David chewed his bottom lip in surprise.
“How did she look like? ” he asked.
“Well, she had blue hair, green eyes, and told me her name was Jane.”
June 1st, 2008 at 8:50 am
Hey guys! Some of you may find this story familiar. Just a news flash: I had to re-publish this because, well, I couldn’t update at all the last time. I’m technologically cursed, like Lydia Tall.
Anyways, enjoy the story!
June 1st, 2008 at 6:11 pm
The sentences are somewhat choppy, but otherwise okay. It wasn’t bad, though…who’s the jerk who rated it a one?
June 2nd, 2008 at 4:00 am
Ahh, choppy? Hmm, I’ll amend it accordingly. Lol, I think the ratings have been cleared again.
June 2nd, 2008 at 5:06 am
These sentences were either choppy, or incomplete sentences.
Diana had a crisis. David just shouted at her. Because Artemis’s mother had adopted her. Why was he acting like that? He never even scolded her before. And this time, Diana let her tears flow. They were overpowering her eyes. Was he overprotective? Or did he just want Diana to stay in his house? Was he lonely without her?
Sorry, I’m just picky like that and it really bothered me.
June 2nd, 2008 at 6:00 am
Oh, I get what you mean. OK, maybe I’ll join some up together and make the sentences longer.
June 2nd, 2008 at 8:13 am
I don’t really like my introduction myself… just a few ammendments… Ahh. There we go.
June 4th, 2008 at 4:28 pm
I admit it. Romance is definitely NOT my type. But when you look at every guide to writing they have here, they just say you have to have a little. And that just makes me uncomfortable.
June 12th, 2008 at 7:41 pm
LOL well I loved the first one, and the second is awesome too. The story’s great. I can see that the sentences are a bit choppy as well, though I didn’t know how to put it into words. Choppy fits though. Overall, it isn’t bad in the slightest.
June 13th, 2008 at 8:54 am
Yay Olive!!
-jumps around happily for a few seconds!!-
Great to have you back!!
I’m adding chapter 13 now.
:)
Yuck.
Romance.
I hate this.
:)
But more action coming right up!!
August 5th, 2008 at 4:46 am
Thgis is great please continue it soon