Artemis Fowl and the Four Elements 2: The Fight for the Truth
Written on June 1st, 2008 by shanetteStory Details
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Is it true?
Diana chuckled. “Of course he’s alive. He was here a few seconds ago. ”
David tried to keep his patience. “Not him. Your real father. ”
Now Diana glared at David. “Please don’t make my life a fantasy story. ”
“I don’t wish to. ”
“I won’t believe her. That’s rubbish. ”
After she had said that, David’s expression changed. He became more relaxed, and even smiled at her.
“Good, at least you know that’s rubbish. ” he said. Then a thought struck Diana. “Wha… What about your mother? ”
“Guess what she said. ”
“I don’t wish to. ”
David looked at her seriously. “When I managed to return her to her normal state, she said only one thing. ” He sighed. “She banned me and you from going to each other’s house. ”
Diana goggled at him. “That’s rubbish. Your home is practically mine. ”
“Exactly what I told her. She wouldn’t budge from her decision. ”
Diana sighed. Mrs Walter was smart. She wouldn’t know who did what to her, but she always blames the one she hates.
Diana looked at him, and he looked at her. “Now what? ”
David shrugged. He looked pretty downcast. With the cast and all. Suddenly, his cell phone started ringing. “Hello? ” he said.
He obviously didn’t like the caller. His lip curled, a basic sign that he was not liking what he heard. He shut his phone, and looked at Diana. “She’s got ‘em. ”
Diana looked questioningly at him. “Who’s got who? ”
“Well, here’s how the story goes. Jane claims she has been successful at kidnapping your entire family. ”
June 1st, 2008 at 8:50 am
Hey guys! Some of you may find this story familiar. Just a news flash: I had to re-publish this because, well, I couldn’t update at all the last time. I’m technologically cursed, like Lydia Tall.
Anyways, enjoy the story!
June 1st, 2008 at 6:11 pm
The sentences are somewhat choppy, but otherwise okay. It wasn’t bad, though…who’s the jerk who rated it a one?
June 2nd, 2008 at 4:00 am
Ahh, choppy? Hmm, I’ll amend it accordingly. Lol, I think the ratings have been cleared again.
June 2nd, 2008 at 5:06 am
These sentences were either choppy, or incomplete sentences.
Diana had a crisis. David just shouted at her. Because Artemis’s mother had adopted her. Why was he acting like that? He never even scolded her before. And this time, Diana let her tears flow. They were overpowering her eyes. Was he overprotective? Or did he just want Diana to stay in his house? Was he lonely without her?
Sorry, I’m just picky like that and it really bothered me.
June 2nd, 2008 at 6:00 am
Oh, I get what you mean. OK, maybe I’ll join some up together and make the sentences longer.
June 2nd, 2008 at 8:13 am
I don’t really like my introduction myself… just a few ammendments… Ahh. There we go.
June 4th, 2008 at 4:28 pm
I admit it. Romance is definitely NOT my type. But when you look at every guide to writing they have here, they just say you have to have a little. And that just makes me uncomfortable.
June 12th, 2008 at 7:41 pm
LOL well I loved the first one, and the second is awesome too. The story’s great. I can see that the sentences are a bit choppy as well, though I didn’t know how to put it into words. Choppy fits though. Overall, it isn’t bad in the slightest.
June 13th, 2008 at 8:54 am
Yay Olive!!
-jumps around happily for a few seconds!!-
Great to have you back!!
I’m adding chapter 13 now.
:)
Yuck.
Romance.
I hate this.
:)
But more action coming right up!!
August 5th, 2008 at 4:46 am
Thgis is great please continue it soon