Artemis Fowl and the Four Elements 2: The Fight for the Truth
Written on June 1st, 2008 by shanetteStory Details
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A sudden attack
“Mother, I am going to fetch Diana back home. When she’s at David’s house, an hour seems like three seconds.,” Artemis said, with a hint of scorn in his voice.
Angeline smiled. “OK, dear. Just be careful. ”
Artemis opened the front door. “Alright, ” he called from outside.
He left the manor, and he didn’t know what he was putting himself into.
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Diana had enough for one day. David almost having to give a lift to the most ugliest girl imaginable, and now getting a JOB! She felt like dying. She looked at David, who seemed almost dead. He gave her a sad smile, and said, “This is life, eh? ”
Diana was silently fuming inside her. “Wow, you sure listen to your mother. ”
David just shook his head. “She didn’t give me a choice. ” Diana snorted. “Yeah right. ”
David looked at her, annoyed. “Why do you- ”
But he never got to the end of that sentence, as the building started to shake. Only for a split second. Then all returned to normal.
“What the blazes was that? ” David asked, confused. Diana shook her head.
“Go down. See if those people are alright. ”
David rushed downstairs, to see if his mother and her visitors were okay. But what he saw gave him nightmares for days. “Diana, you better look at this. ”
Diana came down after a few seconds. And she was equally as shocked.
“Oh my God. ”
David’s mother, Trisha and her mother. All of them were frozen. In a huge block of ice, in the living room.
June 1st, 2008 at 8:50 am
Hey guys! Some of you may find this story familiar. Just a news flash: I had to re-publish this because, well, I couldn’t update at all the last time. I’m technologically cursed, like Lydia Tall.
Anyways, enjoy the story!
June 1st, 2008 at 6:11 pm
The sentences are somewhat choppy, but otherwise okay. It wasn’t bad, though…who’s the jerk who rated it a one?
June 2nd, 2008 at 4:00 am
Ahh, choppy? Hmm, I’ll amend it accordingly. Lol, I think the ratings have been cleared again.
June 2nd, 2008 at 5:06 am
These sentences were either choppy, or incomplete sentences.
Diana had a crisis. David just shouted at her. Because Artemis’s mother had adopted her. Why was he acting like that? He never even scolded her before. And this time, Diana let her tears flow. They were overpowering her eyes. Was he overprotective? Or did he just want Diana to stay in his house? Was he lonely without her?
Sorry, I’m just picky like that and it really bothered me.
June 2nd, 2008 at 6:00 am
Oh, I get what you mean. OK, maybe I’ll join some up together and make the sentences longer.
June 2nd, 2008 at 8:13 am
I don’t really like my introduction myself… just a few ammendments… Ahh. There we go.
June 4th, 2008 at 4:28 pm
I admit it. Romance is definitely NOT my type. But when you look at every guide to writing they have here, they just say you have to have a little. And that just makes me uncomfortable.
June 12th, 2008 at 7:41 pm
LOL well I loved the first one, and the second is awesome too. The story’s great. I can see that the sentences are a bit choppy as well, though I didn’t know how to put it into words. Choppy fits though. Overall, it isn’t bad in the slightest.
June 13th, 2008 at 8:54 am
Yay Olive!!
-jumps around happily for a few seconds!!-
Great to have you back!!
I’m adding chapter 13 now.
:)
Yuck.
Romance.
I hate this.
:)
But more action coming right up!!
August 5th, 2008 at 4:46 am
Thgis is great please continue it soon