Artemis Fowl and the Four Elements 2: The Fight for the Truth
Written on June 1st, 2008 by shanetteStory Details
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The adventure takes it first step
They packed all their things. They counted all their money. They made sure nothing was missing. And they set off.
Diana was actually near delighted the Fowls were kidnapped. She had this once in a lifetime opportunity to venture. To get involved in a real kidnapping. Her heart hammered against her ribs with every step. She was just too excited for her own good. Not knowing what she would find out.
But David was serious. Being the more sensible of the duo, he knew this was not a fun ride he was going to enjoy. It was on his mind to just get the family as fast as possible and thrust the kidnapper in jail.
Then, just as they stepped out of the house, a thought hit David. This was all just too straightforward.
“Diana, this is a trap. I have a feeling we’re not… heading in the right direction. Literally. ”
Diana raised her eyes. “What do you mean? ”
“I mean, all that message said was to go to Tara. We haven’t even planned anything. Don’t you think this is too easy? ”
Diana didn’t say anything. In actual fact, she had realised this as well. It could be a slip. She was hoping David wouldn’t bring the matter up.
“You’re right. ” She said, dejected. “But then, where do we go? ”
David shrugged. “I don’t know. Ask those fairy friends of yours. ”
Diana lips broke into a small smile. “What a genius, ” she mocked.
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As Artemis tried his best to even lift his head, he realised the place… seemed familiar. He recognised the smell, and the ground tiles were shaped in a familiar pattern. Then it hit him.
Since when did underground Tara have tiles?
June 1st, 2008 at 8:50 am
Hey guys! Some of you may find this story familiar. Just a news flash: I had to re-publish this because, well, I couldn’t update at all the last time. I’m technologically cursed, like Lydia Tall.
Anyways, enjoy the story!
June 1st, 2008 at 6:11 pm
The sentences are somewhat choppy, but otherwise okay. It wasn’t bad, though…who’s the jerk who rated it a one?
June 2nd, 2008 at 4:00 am
Ahh, choppy? Hmm, I’ll amend it accordingly. Lol, I think the ratings have been cleared again.
June 2nd, 2008 at 5:06 am
These sentences were either choppy, or incomplete sentences.
Diana had a crisis. David just shouted at her. Because Artemis’s mother had adopted her. Why was he acting like that? He never even scolded her before. And this time, Diana let her tears flow. They were overpowering her eyes. Was he overprotective? Or did he just want Diana to stay in his house? Was he lonely without her?
Sorry, I’m just picky like that and it really bothered me.
June 2nd, 2008 at 6:00 am
Oh, I get what you mean. OK, maybe I’ll join some up together and make the sentences longer.
June 2nd, 2008 at 8:13 am
I don’t really like my introduction myself… just a few ammendments… Ahh. There we go.
June 4th, 2008 at 4:28 pm
I admit it. Romance is definitely NOT my type. But when you look at every guide to writing they have here, they just say you have to have a little. And that just makes me uncomfortable.
June 12th, 2008 at 7:41 pm
LOL well I loved the first one, and the second is awesome too. The story’s great. I can see that the sentences are a bit choppy as well, though I didn’t know how to put it into words. Choppy fits though. Overall, it isn’t bad in the slightest.
June 13th, 2008 at 8:54 am
Yay Olive!!
-jumps around happily for a few seconds!!-
Great to have you back!!
I’m adding chapter 13 now.
:)
Yuck.
Romance.
I hate this.
:)
But more action coming right up!!
August 5th, 2008 at 4:46 am
Thgis is great please continue it soon