Artemis Fowl and the Four Elements 2: The Fight for the Truth
Written on June 1st, 2008 by shanetteStory Details
Loading ...A/N: Hi!! This is the sequel to Artemis Fowl and the Four elements, so you might want to read part one first! Anyway, hope you enjoy this one! ( I had to republish this, because my computer went crazy when I first tried to update ). Leave a comment please and thanks!! =D
Chapter 1
The explanation of the first paragraph of chapter one, of part one. (phew…)
‘It just isn’t like him to shout at me like that…’ Diana was feeling just so uncomfortable. David hadn’t liked the idea of her being adopted at all. He was really angry at first, but then turned more to being hurt. ‘Maybe he’s just lonely..’ she thought. Diana knew that David’s father and elder sister, Viveca, had died in a car crash many years ago. But he had his mother… who always went against his decisions.
She just did not know what to do. In the room next to hers, her brother Artemis was tapping away at his keyboard, along with Butler at his side. Angeline was in the kitchen, making some pasta. She didn’t know what David was doing, which just added to her sorrow. Finally, her guts just told her to pick up her handphone, and call him.
She ran out of her room, went to an empty one, and dialled his number, now her heart thundering against her ribs. Thankfully, he picked up after a few rings.
“Diana? Is that you? ” he asked.
Diana let a huge sigh of relief. He didn’t sound angry one bit.
“Yeah, its me. Erm… what are you doing? ”
Suddenly, Diana heard a loud crash from David’s line. Then, David started talking.
“Squawker, I’ll call you back. ” And he hung up. Diana looked at the phone. And realised something. Why? she wondered.
‘Why did David sound choked at the end, like as though he was crying?’
June 1st, 2008 at 8:50 am
Hey guys! Some of you may find this story familiar. Just a news flash: I had to re-publish this because, well, I couldn’t update at all the last time. I’m technologically cursed, like Lydia Tall.
Anyways, enjoy the story!
June 1st, 2008 at 6:11 pm
The sentences are somewhat choppy, but otherwise okay. It wasn’t bad, though…who’s the jerk who rated it a one?
June 2nd, 2008 at 4:00 am
Ahh, choppy? Hmm, I’ll amend it accordingly. Lol, I think the ratings have been cleared again.
June 2nd, 2008 at 5:06 am
These sentences were either choppy, or incomplete sentences.
Diana had a crisis. David just shouted at her. Because Artemis’s mother had adopted her. Why was he acting like that? He never even scolded her before. And this time, Diana let her tears flow. They were overpowering her eyes. Was he overprotective? Or did he just want Diana to stay in his house? Was he lonely without her?
Sorry, I’m just picky like that and it really bothered me.
June 2nd, 2008 at 6:00 am
Oh, I get what you mean. OK, maybe I’ll join some up together and make the sentences longer.
June 2nd, 2008 at 8:13 am
I don’t really like my introduction myself… just a few ammendments… Ahh. There we go.
June 4th, 2008 at 4:28 pm
I admit it. Romance is definitely NOT my type. But when you look at every guide to writing they have here, they just say you have to have a little. And that just makes me uncomfortable.
June 12th, 2008 at 7:41 pm
LOL well I loved the first one, and the second is awesome too. The story’s great. I can see that the sentences are a bit choppy as well, though I didn’t know how to put it into words. Choppy fits though. Overall, it isn’t bad in the slightest.
June 13th, 2008 at 8:54 am
Yay Olive!!
-jumps around happily for a few seconds!!-
Great to have you back!!
I’m adding chapter 13 now.
:)
Yuck.
Romance.
I hate this.
:)
But more action coming right up!!
August 5th, 2008 at 4:46 am
Thgis is great please continue it soon